After having writers' block after writers' block, I've decided that "A Pony Presence" had many flaws in its writing, resulting in not only one but two other stories written trying to take its place. But when I noticed that my two other stories couldn't quite take the place of this one, I've decided to rewrite the story. Some moments in the story will be the same, but others will happen differently. I hope you all enjoy this and thank to all of you who have enjoyed the first written story.
This is the story of two best friends who are the only two people who can see something different that others can't. Once they find out the riddle, they are mysteriously transported into the world of Equestria! Can the two best friends get to the bottom of this and get back home?
Enjoy the story!
"Aw come on!" I yelled as I threw down the game controller. "You win every time, Jake! I was so close that time!" Jake was my best friend, he also happened to be my neighbor.
"I told you, I'm an awesome smasher when it comes to Pikachu!" Super Smash Bros. was our favorite game to play together. Getting ready for the new one coming out soon, he and I decided to practice on brawl. "Come on, Zoey, I beat you in gaming, but no one can dare try to go up against you on your skateboard!" I guess he had a point, I was able to master the flip that Sonic can do in Sonic adventure 2 city escape.
"Want to play one more round?" I asked.
"I can't, I'm afraid I have to get going. It's my grandpa's birthday tonight, I can't miss that." That I could understand, I wouldn't miss my family's birthdays for the world.
"Alright, Jake, I'll see you tomorrow. Hey, let me know if you can see the figure in the moon again." I instructed him. "Likewise. I'll see you later." Jake said as he left.
I watched him leave and then ran up to my room to do some investigating. Every night, I could always see this strange figure in the moon, it looked kind of like a dark-blue horse. My mom keeps saying she doesn't see it, nor my dad, nor my little brother, but for some strange reason only Jake and I could see it...I can't explain it, but it's almost like there's someone watching us.
I headed upstairs into my room. It was pretty good, nice yellow walls, a comfy bed, a desk with a laptop and printer, and a dresser, and my Skateboard laying up against the wall. I lay with my head by the end of the bed. Looking out the window, I could see that same shape in the moon. I get up from my bed to the window. Jake and I had this pulley system connecting from his window to mine, with a small container so we could exchange letters and messages. Every night, I had taken a picture of that moon and sent it to him every night we saw it in the sky. Strangely enough, it showed up on the picture, but no one, besides me and Jake, could see it at all. It's a strange mystery.
We had started seeing the moon like that when we were about twelve years old. For the last four years, it seemed to always be there. It showed up sometimes, and sometimes it wasn't there at all. I almost wonder if there's something about when it appears and reappears...
As I try to figure out what it all means, I grab my music player and headset and start playing Team Chaotix from Sonic Heroes.
Now, back to the matter at hand, I study every picture I've taken since the first time I saw the figure in the moon. I never had any clue as to what it was doing there, why we could see it, or why it only shows up at certain times. I wondered, maybe it was some sort of code?
I first search all kinds of codes...binary, nope..but then it hits me, "Oh yeah!" I look up a Morse code translating website to see if it gets me anywhere. It didn't take me long to find a site. I try typing in a code based on when the horse appeared and how long, going by each night. [... . .-..]
"What?!" My headphones drop from my head onto the ground, I had found something! It read: Hello there. I see you have cracked this code. You are a smart mare. How is that possible? Who did this? This makes no sense...I have to tell Jake.
I run to my bag and grab my phone, "C'mon, pickup, pickup..." A few rings...than I hear a click.
"Hello?"
"Jake, first, where are you now?" I didn't want to interrupt his grandpa's birthday after all.
"Oh that...yeah...turns out its next week, not today...haha..." Seriously? How could you mess that up?...
"Are you serious? No matter...Jake, are you at a good time to come over now? I have something important to show you!" I cannot control my hype, once something happens, I need to satisfy my hype to calm down.
"Well, sure, we're done eating anyway, so sure, see you in five minutes."
Having put all of my stuff, my phone and my music stuff, I sat in the chair next to the laptop on the desk. Suddenly I heard my door open.
"Zoey, what's up? You seem over-hyped." I don't need to talk, I just point to the screen with the translated message.
"Look at this..." I said pointing at the translation. He took a couple minutes to read the first translation.
"Is that from the first year?" Looking at all the pictures, I realized it was all from the first year.
"Yeah, it is...but I don't know what it means by mare...and colt...?" I said reading over the translation again.
"Maybe it'll explain as you put in the other years?"
I nodded, and started translating the second year. "ok, here it is...!"
Now it got even more confusing and interesting at the same time; It read:
Now by the time you start realizing the patterns, you need to start preparing. Mare and stallion, be ready.
"Start Preparing?...ok, I'm starting to really question this whole, 'Mare in the moon' thing." Jake said in frustration. I was getting a bit spooked about this whole thing, maybe it was just a joke after all...haha?
"Let me put in year five, maybe it'll make some sense?"
"I don't know, Zoey. This all seems a bit farfetched...huh?" After he had said that, a faint blue-purple dust circled around us.
"Um...maybe I ought to type in the 3rd translation..." That blue dust landed on every one of our treasured belongings along with us. Ok, I typed it in, the translation reads:
Now you may notice a strange change, though you disappear, you will return in a drastic time.
"...Jake, I feel different, don't you?...!" What?! Jake wasn't able to move much, and I could feel that feeling on me..I have to know the last translation...struggling to type, I managed to do so:
Do not fear...you're special talents won't have you lost for long. You will feel abandoned and scared, but it'll all make sense soon...
"...J-Jake?..." I turn around...but what I saw in front of me was something I never thought I'd see...Jake...my best friend...was disappearing..."J-ju-Jake!" I yelled in fear
"Z-zoey..."...He's gone...soon after he vanished, my room began to disappear from my vision...The same thing is happening to me as Jake...all I could see that was clear was my backpack and skateboard...
I...
I'm...
I black out.
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Zoey POV
"Uh...hmm..." What happened..."mmm...huh?" I'm in some sort of meadow...but that's weird...I wasn't in a meadow...Wasn't I just... "
What in the world?!" I yell as I stand up, only I fall onto my hands... "Argh...ok, that's weird...Wait, what?!" My hands were no longer hands, but golden-yellow hooves..."What? since when did I have hooves?" I look around myself to see I wasn't human anymore, but a pony?
"Uh...am I dreaming?..." Only one way to find out-check with reality. "OW! Ok...not dreaming..." I say as I rub my ha-I mean hoof...
I turned my head around and saw I also had wings. I also saw on my bottom was a side-ways dark blue lightning bolt with gray circles below it. "What is this?" I had some sort of symbol on my bottom, a sideways blue lightning bolt and two gray wheels. "So I'm a pegasus? That's new...Whatever...where am I?"
I get a better look at my surroundings, I was in a clear opening with a few trees around. The sky was bright and blue with a few clouds in the sky. "Hey, is that my.." I look over and see my bag and skateboard. Trying to walk over is difficult on all fours...but somehow I manage... "How did this get here? and where IS here?"
I start looking at the sky and take notes at other pegasai in the air. Looking behind me, I notice a town. I never knew ponies were that civilized? Deciding to investigate, put on my backpack-which surprisingly fit pretty well-and put my skateboard tucked between me and the bag and walk over to the unfamiliar town.
When I got to the town, I could see many ponies, some normal, some with wings, some with horns too. All of them had some sort of mark on them...why does all of this seem familiar? All of the ponies gave a quick glance at me and then got back to what they were doing.
"Woah!" I yell as a little orange Pegasus, with a dark magenta mane and tail, zips by on a scooter.
"Sorry Ma'am!" the little girl said. She was using her wings to propel her scooter, kind of like a motor, huh..clever idea.
As I'm walking through town, there are more and more ponies. One pony that stood out was light pink pony with hot pink poofy hair, she was staring right at me.
"Um...hello..." I said politely, though her reaction wasn't what I had expected...
"GASP" and she took off like a rocket...
"uhh..." first of all, who runs away from a hello? and second of all, how can anyone move so fast? again, why do these ponies seem...ah nevermind...
All of a sudden, there was a loud "whoosh" in the air as a cyan pegasus with a rainbow mane and tail flew through the air. ...She seems cool. Why does that pony look familiar to me though? I thought. I noticed the pegasus was doing all sorts of tricks in the air while clearing the clouds.
"What in the world?" I said aloud as I saw her punch the clouds as if they were nothing.
"Triple flip and bam!" The pegasus said as she destroyed the last cloud.
She then looked over at me, seeing that I had been watching her.
"That was awesome." I told her.
"Thanks, but that there was nothing. You should see my sonic rainboom." She bragged.
"What is that under your wings?" She asked.
"Oh, this is my skateboard. I like to ride on it sometimes." I told her. "Cool. By the way, the name's Rainbow Dash." She introduced.
Rainbow Dash, now it all clicked together. She was from that show called My Little Pony, I heard about it all over Youtube. Those Bronies and all the memes I keep hearing. I remember watching a few episodes about it, but was too busy to watch a whole lot of it. So if I recall, that pink pony was Pinkie Pie?
"What's your name?" She asked.
Huh...she got me there, if I said my real name, it might not fit in..I need a name that can keep me low-cover. Wait, what if I..."Uh..my name is Storm, uh, Shred Storm." I said.
"Shred Storm, eh? Cool name. Hope we get to hang out some time. Wish I could stay and chat, but I gotta help a friend out. Catch ya later." And with that, she was off.
"Shred Storm..." It wasn't like it was a name I was unfamiliar about. I used the name before in most online games.
Anyway, seeing as I now had wings, I decided to give my wings a good try and I started using my skateboard. I took note from that little pegasus and used my wings to move my board. I could never do this at home! Keeping in mind I'd have to look for Jake, I'm here, he might be somewhere in this world too.
As I rode my board, I saw that ponies gathered and cheered as they saw me on my skateboard.
"Huh..." I guess it would make sense, they might not have seen many ponies riding around on one before, but the attention was new to me.
"Woah, look at that, Twilight!" A purple dragon, with green spikes, said as he saw me on my skateboard.
"Yeah, Spike, come on, we have to help out Pinkie Pie." Said a purple alicorn with a dark-purple mane and tail with a pink streak going through it.
I realized something as I zipped through town; I'm technically lost. I'm not of this world, my home is in another dimension! Even so, if this is where I'm staying for awhile, it certainly won't be terrible. Though I wonder about my family, do they realize I'm gone? What about Jake and his family? Everyone is probably worried...Maybe there was more to the mare in the moon after all...
I stop my skateboard and look around. There was big tree with windows and inside looked like there were many books, kind of like a library, and there were many stories going up. (pun intended) With the sky getting darker, I might as well find a place to stay for the night.
"Sweete Bell, wait up, dear!" I turn around to see two unicorns. One little white unicorn with light purple ans pink hair, and the other one about my age. She had a curly dark purple mane and tail, I guess they're both sisters?
"Oh, hello there, sorry to get in the way." The older one said to me.
"oh, uh, no problem at all.."
"My name is Rarity, and this is my younger sister Sweete Belle." She introduced. "Uh, cool, I'm Shred Storm, but uh..most peo-I mean ponies..most ponies call me Storm.." Ugh...I can tell it will e hard for me to add 'pony' to most words...This will take some getting used to...
"Why, nice to meet you, Storm. Are you heading to the party too?" Party? What party?
"Uh, I didn't know there was one..." Ponies have parties too? so much about this world is circling through my head already...
"Oh, you must be new to Ponyville then. Everypony around here knows Pinkie Pie all too well... She always has some sort of party going on. Why don't you come with us?" Rarity offered.
"Oh..I wouldn't want to impose on anything.." I really wasn't one for parties..but I always lived family parties, and seeing everyone from out of town, but usually I was hanging by myself or with Jake.
"Why, you wouldn't impose at all. Pinkie Pie would be more than happy to have you come!" The unicorn assured me.
"Well, then I'd love to come, thank you!"
With Rarity leading the way, we walk towards the giant tree. When she opened the door as we were walking in, it was very dark. When I get inside, the door shuts, and I can't see a thing. Rarity walks away into the dark. ooh..I can't see a thing..
"SURPRISE!" As there were ponies screaming in my ear, the lights suddenly came on. Just about everypony I saw in town was in this library. Before I knew it, a certain pink pony got in my face.
"Hi! I'm Pinkie Pie! I saw you in town, and I was like. 'ohmygosh! there's a new pony in town! so I threw you this welcome party! Do you like it? huh huh huh?!"
"Uh..I'm completely surprised!..." Ok, so far I've met three of what the fandom call 'the mane six.' Still, I wonder if Jake is here too?
Overhearing from a group of ponies, I hear, "and you should have seen her on what she calls a skateboard!" I look over and see Rainbow Dash talking to Rarity, Pinkie Pie, and a few other ponies plus that dragon from earlier.
"I saw, Twilight did too, and a whole lot of other ponies." Said the dragon.
"Hey, Storm!" Rainbow Dash greeted. I walk over to their group of ponies.
"Hey, Rainbow Dash." "So Storm, is that how you got your cutie mark? Doing those skateboard tricks?" Rarity asked.
"My what?" what in the world is a cutie mark?
"Your Cutie mark. You know, the symbol on your flank that tells about your special skills?"
I look over to my 'flank' and that blue lightning bolt is still there."Uh...yeah...I think it has something to do with that..."
"So you're Storm?" I look over and see that purple alicorn from earlier. "Yeah, and you're Twilight, and uh, Spike, right?" "Yeah, I assume you heard us?" Spike asked. "I did, when you guys were in town." I replied. "I'd never seen anypony do that before. You should teach me to do that!" Spike said.
"Well anyway, let me properly introduce myself. My name is Twilight Sparkle, but most ponies call me Twilight." Twilight introduced.
"Twilight 'ere is a princess, dubbed that my Princess Celestia 'erself" An orange pony, with blonde hair and a brown cowboy hat, said.
Twilight started blushing a bit. "I told you it's not that big of a deal." She said with a small smile.
"Are you kidding? Of course it's a big deal!" Rainbow Dash chimed in.
"Th' name's Applejack, by the way. Pleasure to meet ya."
"Cool, and nice to meet you too."
"And this is Fluttershy." Rainbow Dash introduced.
"um...hello there, Storm." "Hi there!" I said.
"Hey...uh..by the way, you...wouldn't have happened to know a pony named Jake...um...would you?"
The ponies just gave me a strange look.
"Who's Jake? Is he another new pony? gasp! I need to throw another party when I meet him!" Pinkie Pie cheered.
"Uh..I guess not..sorry..." I knew it was a long shot but I had to ask. Guess looking for him isn't going to be as easy as I thought...
"Wait a minute, who is Jake?" Rarity asked.
"Uh...just a friend of mine..there was..uh..an incident..and we got separated.."
The ponies I was with gave looks of sympathy. "I'm sorry, Storm. Maybe I can send a note to the princess about your friend." Twilight offered. I guess she's referring to this 'Princess Celestia.'
"Well...I don't know..I wouldn't want to bother her...she might me busy..."
"It wouldn't be any trouble at all, I'll write her a letter tomorrow concerning your friend. Until then, I suggest you stay here for now." Twilight said comfortingly.
"Really?" I asked.
"Of course. I can let you know right away if Celestia has replied." she smiled.
"Thanks..." I smiled back, I guess she could tell I was a bit upset.
"By the way, Storm, what do you keep in your bag?" Rainbow Dash said pointing to my bag. It was a good question, I don't know what's in there. I took off my backpack and let my skateboard sit beside me.
"Well, lets see...!" My music player and headphones were in my bag, though they looked a bit different. How on Earth did this stuff get here?
"Well, I have my music player..." I said getting it out of my bag. "I have some candy..." And I pull out this cool looking bracelet, that had a lightning bolt skateboard on it. It had also changed to fit my hoof. "And my good-luck bracelet..."
"Bracelet? I've never seen a bracelet like this." Rarity used her magic to levitate the bracelet in the air to get a better look at it.
"I don't know where it came from. I found it when I was young..." I replied.
"It's an amazing bracelet. Look at the craftsmanship! Oh! And it has your cutie mark on it? That's peculiar that you happened to just find this." Rarity said raising an eyebrow. I looked down at my flank.
"Yeah, I suppose it is." I replied.
Later that night, as the party was dying down, I walked out to the balcony to look at the stars. "Sigh..." I sighed as I looked up. ...The stars look the same here as they do on Earth... I noted. I watched the stars as I heard other ponies partying inside.
"Hey, what are you doing out here?" I turned to see a little purple dragon standing there.
"Oh, hey Spike...I guess I just wanted to look at the stars...I'm not much for partying..." I admitted.
"Just don't tell that to Pinkie Pie. You will get the lecture of a lifetime." Spike smirked.
"Lecture? From Pinkie Pie?" I asked.
"That's what I thought the first time I saw her do it, heh." Spike chuckled.
"So, who's your friend you mentioned? Uh, Jake?" Spike asked.
"Well, he's a really good friend of mine, my best friend. In fact, he once saved my life." I blushed.
"Really? That must be a good friend." Spike said.
"He is. He and I were trying to solve this mystery that strangely no one else could see. And, well, somehow we found something out, but got separated in the process." I explained.
"That's too bad..." Spike frowned. I stood up and stared at the moon.
"Well, if anything, he's in this world. I'm sure I'll find him..." I said determinedly.
"I understand that your friend is missing, but there's nothing that can be done at this time. How about coming inside and enjoying the party a little?" Spike suggested.
"Maybe you're right...I'll come in, just give me a moment." I said.
"Sure thing." Spike said as he went back inside.
"Sigh...Jake, if you're out there, please, please be alright...I'm in a safe place...I hope you are too..." I said as I stared at the sky. "Maybe you're looking at the same stars I'm seeing...I hope that maybe, we can reunite..." I turned to go rejoin the party.
"Thanks again for letting me stay, Twilight." I said to her.
"No problem, Storm. Spike and I will send that letter first thing in the morning. We'll find out if she knows anything." Twilight said.
"Great. I'm so worried about him..." I told her.
"Yawwwn...I'm going to bed, I'm bushed. Night..." Spike said as he walked tiredly up the stairs.
"Goodnight, Spike." Twilight said.
The little dragon waved and headed to the bed room.
"We should probably get some sleep too. I'm tired as well..." Twilight yawned as she headed towards the stairs.
"I'll be up in a minute, I just want to check something..." I said to her.
"Alright, goodnight." She said.
"Goodnight." I replied.
"Hmm?" Looking at my belongings one more time, I saw there was a small bit I missed. I remember clearing out my bag just to keep my possessions, but inside was a note:
Do not worry. Things around you will begin to make sense. Zoey, stay strong, Jake is in this world too. When your friendship is reunited, only then you will find some answers.
"Jake..." I start to tear up... So he's alright? That's a relief...but where is he?
...First off, this place isn't as bad as I thought things would be, but I'm still lost. I'm in this world without friends or family. I hope they're alright...Oh Jake, I wish you were here with me...Even if I'm in a new world I would probably be more comfortable to have you by my side...
...I'd better get some rest...Goodnight...Equestria...
Hope you all enjoyed this chapter! It sure is a lot different from the original, so I hope it was interesting enough. And I'm of course going to do a Qotc at the end of every chapter, so be sure to leave an answer.
Qotc: Who is your favorite character in Mlp?
Thanks for reading and be sure to stick around for the next chapter. Until next time!