This is my first Fanfic, and I would appreciate critiques/comments. Chapters one and two are fairly short, but their length improves.
LoZ: Shadow vs. Light
Chapter One
Link entered a simple stone building which was build similarly to a shrine. Once inside the door slammed shut behind him and the room turned into mirrors. No, not mirrors, ice! Link realized as he took a step and nearly fell. The rather small room grew colder, Link could see his breath. He gilded towards the wooden door.
His curious nature was going to get the better of him this time. When he heard voices he moved closer towards the door.
"Veran, how is our Hero of Shadows to be summoned?" a male voice asked.
"Are you that dim-witted?" Veran asked, impatient, the voice was that of a female's. "The Hero of Light obviously, Onox."
"And you assume that he will oh-so-conveniently show up?" Onox asked, deliberately annoying Veran.
Veran glared at Onox. Considering he was supposed to help her, he certaintly was making the assignment difficult. In the torch light Veran's almost black purple dress, which covered little on the top side, almost appeared maroon. "As your superior, I suggest you don't question me," she said icily.
"You're my superior now? As if I didn't realize that," Onox said sarcastically, annoyed with Veran's very being. What had she done to rank above him? Practically nothing. "Veran, I should tell you, women shouldn't exercise their authority to much. I, for one, find it provoking, and there is no doubt that the Master frowns upon it as well."
"And the Master condones in you now? Hardly. You are the lowest in our ranks, aside from Vaati. You know as well as I do that the Master only gives you orders."
Link started to draw his Master Sword when the door turned into a black portal and Veran's bluish hand wrapped around his throat and yanked him through. Link could feel his energy being sapped, absorbed. His strength was diminishing.
When Veran released him Link back-flipped to place distance in between them. "Convenient, is he not?" she drawled, like a cat playing with a mouse. Even through Onox's armor Veran could sense his anger, which tensed his body.
The Triforce of Courage began to glow as he unsheathed his Sword.
"So, wanna-be-Hero, you're going to fight the both of us?" Onox taunted as he toyed with his spiked fail.
Link remained silent, in his 17 years he'd learned to ignore taunts. Still, Hero?
"Onox, for now, we leave," Veran snapped and they disappeared, but not before Link saw the black Triforce symbol on their foreheads. The symbol of those fallen at the hands of a Triforce bearer.
Link lowered his sword as a mirror on the far wall caught his attention. What was that about? He wondered as he walked to the mirror.
The script at the top of the mirror read:
The Mirror of Shadows.
A sword suddenly went through the mirror and slashed beneath Link's chest at a diagonal angle. As Link staggered back he did a double-take. He looked very much like him, yet very different.
Instead of a green tunic and floppy hat this person was wearing black, as well as the fact that he was perhaps four inches taller than Link. Whereas Link's hair was blonde and his eyes icy blue, the near look-a-like's hair was black and his eyes red. The hilt of his Master Sword was black instead of dark blue. Lastly, his trousers, instead of being white they were gray. Although, like Link he did wear brown leather gauntlets and boots.
"Hello, Link," he said smoothly as he readied for attack.
"You are ...?" Link asked coolly as he went into offensive stance.
"Your other self. Dark self, I might add. You may call me Shadow, or your death!" he declared and attacked.
End of Chapter 1