This is my first fic period so give me honest constructive advice please.
I do not own the X-men Evolution, however Daniel/Conduit is MINE so stay away!! All the other characters will be copyrighted later.
"Hey beautiful," Daniel said as he greeted his date.
She blushed slightly, still not used to being complimented in front of her way to protective parents. Behind her, her father gave him a mean look but he didn't care what her dad thought. This was their night, not his.
"Ready to go?" he asked, kissing her hand as he helped her into his car.
Her green eyes glinted mischievously, "Hell yes! Lets go already!!"
Her parents had not let her date until she was 16. They had met during a school
dance when she was 15. They had been secretly dating since.
"Let's go then" he grinned, and they headed to the dance.
While they drove, he kept glancing at her whenever she wasn't looking.
**She's so pretty tonight, well, she's pretty every night! ** He thought to himself and grinned.
"What's so funny?" Amanda asked.
"Just glad your dad FINALLY let you go"
"Good thing I brought my grades up"
"Yeah, too bad your dad still doesn't like me"
She laughed and shook her head "I told you, he doesn't like ANYBODY"
They arrived at the dance. It was her school; it was her friends that they'd be sitting with tonight. They all liked him though, and that was a VERY good thing.
They walked though the doors and into they gym, looking for her friends.
"Hey Amanda!!" he turned to see her, well, their friends sitting at a table nearby.
**I wonder if they're going to put me though the 3rd degree again** he didn't care though, as long as he was with Amanda he could get through anything.
His past was not a very happy one. Picked on by everyone from 6th-8th grade, he had slowly gone into seclusion, living in books and wishing he could find someone who understood him. When he entered High school as a freshman, things changed, he quickly discovered that all his tormenters from grade school readily forgot the past and they became friends. These on the other hand, were her friends. There was the other Amanda, also known as Mandi, who was one of his few friends from grade school, and her date Matt. Matt was a little on the slow side, and never got any of Mandi's hints that she kinda like him, A LOT! Then there was Tabitha, who still had a grudge on him when had made a comment about Mandi's dress last year, and her date Ryan. He really didn't know Ryan that well, even thought they went to the same school. There was also Jennifer,
Teresa, and a few others that Daniel couldn't remember so well. They all had their own dates.
"What's up ladies and gentlemen?" I asked as we sat down.
"Nothing much, you big meanie!!" That would be Tabitha
Everyone laughed because they all knew she was kidding. Conversation went on, mostly about how the school had FINALLY gotten a DJ who knew when to play good songs, and how they never have enough dances. He was a little nervous, this was going to be the night he asked Amanda to be his girlfriend, a first for him. He just hoped that the others didn't catch on.
Through then night he kept waiting, trying to find the best way to put it. Then during the middle of a slow song, he finally gave up and said to himself **What the hell! Give it a shot, if she says no, then just ask her again in a few months**
He leaned back from her slightly so he could see her beautiful green eyes. "Hey Amanda,"
"What, is there something wrong?" she asked
"Just one thing, I have a question to ask you," He said mentally kicking himself for being such an idiot.
She grinned because she knew what he was going to ask, "What," she asked
putting on her mask of innocence.
"We've been dating for a while and I was just wondering-" he began but could not finish as Amanda started laughing. "Whaaat! What's so funny?"
"Just ask me you big goof, Mandi told her what you where talking about"
**Damnit,** he thought ** I DID forget to ask her not to tell**
"Will you be my girlfriend, Amanda?" he asked hesitantly
"Of course I will you weirdo! Gosh I swear sometimes you're as thick as Matt is!!" she laughed and hugged him tight.
She leaned back and looked at him with her green eyes. They leaned closer, their foreheads touching, until the sound of a gunshot rang out.
Instinctively, he puller he down into a crouch with him, searching for the fool that dared interrupt their perfect night. He saw Steve, one of his old bullies from grade school, whom he had humiliated in a fight last year. You could not tell this just by looking at Daniel, but he had become a very adept fighter after taking martial arts for 4 years. And when Steve had pushed it too far, he found out exactly why you don't judge books by their covers.
Steve looked drunk, his dirty blonde hair was matted and he carried with him a still-smoking gun. Behind him where his gang, all holding weapons, 2 with whiskey bottles with rags in them. He knew he couldn't take them all on at once, especially if the 2 decided to light the place up with the bottles.
**Damnit, of all nights to go for revenge** he thought as he pulled Amanda and their friends to the back, crouching under the panicking crowd. Hopefully, they wouldn't be seen.
"DANIEL," Steve's voice rang out, "come out or I'll light this place up!!"
The security guard was down, the receiver of the shot heard earlier. Steve seemed to forget his ultimatum and had the bottles lit and thrown. The crowd rushed past them, and the gang searched though them.
Daniel didn't know why but all of a sudden, a deep anger was growing within.
How dare they ruin his night!! How dare they threaten my friends!! How dare they threaten my girlfriend!! He felt something in him change and not knowing why or how, he raised his hands toward the flames and somehow drew the energy out of the fire. He felt the energy growing within him, so much that it felt like he was going to explode. The energy concentrated around his muscles. It burned off the fat, and tightened muscle and sinew. His clothes became baggy on him. He still had plenty of energy left. His eyes flashed as he concentrated the energy into his hands, willing it to form a glowing sphere of energy. He grinned as everyone still looked at him with awe, and in the case of the would-be-attackers, fear.
"Hey STEVE!!" he shouted as directing the energy ball towards the gang.
"Daniel what are you doing?!" Amanda whispered, a small note of fear in her voice. She and his friends were still under cover.
He grinned at her, "Saving the day, what's it look like," and with his palms out toward Steve, he mentally pushed the energy away.
"Feel my wrath you party-crashing son of a bitch!!" he yelled as he unleashed the energy.
The wave of pure destructive force flew at Steve, and he and his entire gang where hurled like dolls out the doors onto the streets where the police where just arriving.
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So what do you think?? I need some reviews to help my decision. Should I have Amanda be a mutant too? If you have any other ideas, let's hear 'em. There will be more on the group and the aftermath of the fight in the next chapter.
Please review!!!!!!!!!!!!
I do not own the X-men Evolution, however Daniel/Conduit is MINE so stay away!! All the other characters will be copyrighted later.
"Hey beautiful," Daniel said as he greeted his date.
She blushed slightly, still not used to being complimented in front of her way to protective parents. Behind her, her father gave him a mean look but he didn't care what her dad thought. This was their night, not his.
"Ready to go?" he asked, kissing her hand as he helped her into his car.
Her green eyes glinted mischievously, "Hell yes! Lets go already!!"
Her parents had not let her date until she was 16. They had met during a school
dance when she was 15. They had been secretly dating since.
"Let's go then" he grinned, and they headed to the dance.
While they drove, he kept glancing at her whenever she wasn't looking.
**She's so pretty tonight, well, she's pretty every night! ** He thought to himself and grinned.
"What's so funny?" Amanda asked.
"Just glad your dad FINALLY let you go"
"Good thing I brought my grades up"
"Yeah, too bad your dad still doesn't like me"
She laughed and shook her head "I told you, he doesn't like ANYBODY"
They arrived at the dance. It was her school; it was her friends that they'd be sitting with tonight. They all liked him though, and that was a VERY good thing.
They walked though the doors and into they gym, looking for her friends.
"Hey Amanda!!" he turned to see her, well, their friends sitting at a table nearby.
**I wonder if they're going to put me though the 3rd degree again** he didn't care though, as long as he was with Amanda he could get through anything.
His past was not a very happy one. Picked on by everyone from 6th-8th grade, he had slowly gone into seclusion, living in books and wishing he could find someone who understood him. When he entered High school as a freshman, things changed, he quickly discovered that all his tormenters from grade school readily forgot the past and they became friends. These on the other hand, were her friends. There was the other Amanda, also known as Mandi, who was one of his few friends from grade school, and her date Matt. Matt was a little on the slow side, and never got any of Mandi's hints that she kinda like him, A LOT! Then there was Tabitha, who still had a grudge on him when had made a comment about Mandi's dress last year, and her date Ryan. He really didn't know Ryan that well, even thought they went to the same school. There was also Jennifer,
Teresa, and a few others that Daniel couldn't remember so well. They all had their own dates.
"What's up ladies and gentlemen?" I asked as we sat down.
"Nothing much, you big meanie!!" That would be Tabitha
Everyone laughed because they all knew she was kidding. Conversation went on, mostly about how the school had FINALLY gotten a DJ who knew when to play good songs, and how they never have enough dances. He was a little nervous, this was going to be the night he asked Amanda to be his girlfriend, a first for him. He just hoped that the others didn't catch on.
Through then night he kept waiting, trying to find the best way to put it. Then during the middle of a slow song, he finally gave up and said to himself **What the hell! Give it a shot, if she says no, then just ask her again in a few months**
He leaned back from her slightly so he could see her beautiful green eyes. "Hey Amanda,"
"What, is there something wrong?" she asked
"Just one thing, I have a question to ask you," He said mentally kicking himself for being such an idiot.
She grinned because she knew what he was going to ask, "What," she asked
putting on her mask of innocence.
"We've been dating for a while and I was just wondering-" he began but could not finish as Amanda started laughing. "Whaaat! What's so funny?"
"Just ask me you big goof, Mandi told her what you where talking about"
**Damnit,** he thought ** I DID forget to ask her not to tell**
"Will you be my girlfriend, Amanda?" he asked hesitantly
"Of course I will you weirdo! Gosh I swear sometimes you're as thick as Matt is!!" she laughed and hugged him tight.
She leaned back and looked at him with her green eyes. They leaned closer, their foreheads touching, until the sound of a gunshot rang out.
Instinctively, he puller he down into a crouch with him, searching for the fool that dared interrupt their perfect night. He saw Steve, one of his old bullies from grade school, whom he had humiliated in a fight last year. You could not tell this just by looking at Daniel, but he had become a very adept fighter after taking martial arts for 4 years. And when Steve had pushed it too far, he found out exactly why you don't judge books by their covers.
Steve looked drunk, his dirty blonde hair was matted and he carried with him a still-smoking gun. Behind him where his gang, all holding weapons, 2 with whiskey bottles with rags in them. He knew he couldn't take them all on at once, especially if the 2 decided to light the place up with the bottles.
**Damnit, of all nights to go for revenge** he thought as he pulled Amanda and their friends to the back, crouching under the panicking crowd. Hopefully, they wouldn't be seen.
"DANIEL," Steve's voice rang out, "come out or I'll light this place up!!"
The security guard was down, the receiver of the shot heard earlier. Steve seemed to forget his ultimatum and had the bottles lit and thrown. The crowd rushed past them, and the gang searched though them.
Daniel didn't know why but all of a sudden, a deep anger was growing within.
How dare they ruin his night!! How dare they threaten my friends!! How dare they threaten my girlfriend!! He felt something in him change and not knowing why or how, he raised his hands toward the flames and somehow drew the energy out of the fire. He felt the energy growing within him, so much that it felt like he was going to explode. The energy concentrated around his muscles. It burned off the fat, and tightened muscle and sinew. His clothes became baggy on him. He still had plenty of energy left. His eyes flashed as he concentrated the energy into his hands, willing it to form a glowing sphere of energy. He grinned as everyone still looked at him with awe, and in the case of the would-be-attackers, fear.
"Hey STEVE!!" he shouted as directing the energy ball towards the gang.
"Daniel what are you doing?!" Amanda whispered, a small note of fear in her voice. She and his friends were still under cover.
He grinned at her, "Saving the day, what's it look like," and with his palms out toward Steve, he mentally pushed the energy away.
"Feel my wrath you party-crashing son of a bitch!!" he yelled as he unleashed the energy.
The wave of pure destructive force flew at Steve, and he and his entire gang where hurled like dolls out the doors onto the streets where the police where just arriving.
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So what do you think?? I need some reviews to help my decision. Should I have Amanda be a mutant too? If you have any other ideas, let's hear 'em. There will be more on the group and the aftermath of the fight in the next chapter.
Please review!!!!!!!!!!!!