Don't own twilight or any of the characters. Hope you enjoy!!
My version of breaking dawn; starts off with Bella turning in to a vampire. I wanted some opinion in it. So please R&R
Chapter 1 the beginning
"Edward" I said, looking in to his beautiful topaz eyes, " I love you."
"You know, Bella, We don't have to do thi-"
I put my finger up to him stopping him in mid-sentence.
"I know but I want to."
I pulled myself up to him and, pressed my lips against his hard cold lips. Pulling away looking into Edward's beautiful topaz eyes knowing I will never be the same clumsy self again.
"Edward" Carlisle said, breaking our trance.
"Ok, Carlisle" Edward said , looking at him.
I guessed that Carlisle must have told Edward something in his mind; maybe not to freak me out or anything. I will have to ask Edward later I thought quietly to myself.
"Jasper, Emmett, you going to have to hold Bella down for the first day or so."
Edward took my head in his hands and whispered into my ear, " I love you we will be together forever I promise."
Edward Pulled away and went right underneath my jaw and kissed it. Then, Edward bit me it felt like… I could not finish my thought the fire interrupted it. Edward kissed my wrists and my ankles and the fire started there too.
Edward pulled away from my ankles and held my hand humming my lullaby. The pain it, it was unbearable, too much. All I could to do scream. I wanted
someone to put out the fire. I tried to get up and get water to put it out but Emmett and Japer was holding me down.
I heard crying next to me, I looked over and Edward was tearlessly sobbing.
"What had I done to my love" Edward asked himself quietly.
"Stop it Edward" I managed to get out without screaming. "You wanted this I wanted this almost your whole family wanted this so, stop it."
The fire continued around me my head hurt the worst it was like my head burst in to flames. I could not take it, I wanted to die I started to think; No answering myself sternly I wanted this to be with Edward forever.
so that was the first chapter, don't forget this is my first one so I would like constructive criticism' but please, please no heats If you like it I will add more to it That was I really short chapter I know but, I just wanted some opinion on before I got really in to it.