A/N: Before you read my WONDERful [cough] story, please bear in mind this is how to NOT write a Harry Potter fanfiction. Not to be taken seriously, as this is merely showing how your story could end up a disaster. Cool? Let the horrors begin!
snape pced da room."you dont know wht ive been through recently" he sobbed. harry hermione n ron glanced at eachotha "oh no" hermione whispered"hes gonna start telling us"
snape sighed first i fly twentymls on my broom to find adecent mcdonals then i have to wait in a queue for 20mins then i got telled that its time to shut" he pushed a chiar out the way"shut I say! Can yah beleive it?" ron shook his head,"disgusting"
could yah understand it? no? mayb if i had written it this way:
Snape paced the room.
"You don't know what I've been through recently," He sobbed. Harry, Hermione, and Ron glance at each other.
"Oh no," Hermione whispered, "He's going to start telling us,"
Snape sighed.
"First I fly twenty miles on my broom to find a decent MacDonald's, then I have to wait in a queue for 20 minutes, then I got told that it was time to shut!" He pushed a chair out the way, "Shut I say! Can you believe it?"
Ron shook his head, "Disgusting."
A/N: Could you understand it now?
No?
Oh. Even if you could understand it, it makes a rubbish story anyway, doesn't it. Everybody knows there is a decent MacDonald's only two minutes away from Hogwarts. Silly Snape. Again, don't take this too seriously.