Okay. Here is the revamped chapter one. I didn't do a total rewrite. I just fixed an error that had a hork-bajirr speaking in thought speak. And I add in a few details that i'll need later. So reread.
Illusion.
With a gasp Tobias woke up. He looked from left to right but was unable to locate anything out of the ordinary.
In fact he was unable to locate anything at all. It was pitch black. He tried to right him self but found a strange gooey substance covering his feathers.
What the? He thought. But the sticky crap flowed off of him to dissolve in a puddle on the floor.
"Good,"came astrange gruffvoice in broken english, "You no sleep more."
Startled, Tobias called back,
(What the hell's going on here?)
(It appears to have no memory of the events,) a thought speak voice chimed in.
This struck a nerve in Tobias that refused to quit burning.
(IT?) he roared.
"He right," the first voice said, "heishuman."
Tobias was getting confused. What was going on here? One minute the Rachel was heading for Oblivion. Then, the next, he was here in some place withvoices coming at him from all sides.
(WHAT IS HAPPINING HERE!)
The voices paused, as if unsure what to do.
"Well, the first one said, "he know eventually."
(Indeed,) the second one came.
A light came on in front of Tobias and Illuminated an Andalite With along thin scar on it's cheekand a Hork Bajiir.
The Andalite continued.
(Subject 44362, Codename Tobias. This is the year 2125.)
Okay I hope you like it. Look for chapter 5 real soon.