Hey Guys! This is my first fanfic, so please be easy on the flames. Also, please review! I really want feedback on my story. Thanks!
*EDIT* So i've gone through and added things… and made it so the story isn't so rushed. Also, i'm going to space it out more so there's more then one chapter.
Step Towards Sanity- Intro
The streets and pathways in Konoha were as busy as ever. The sidewalks jammed with carts, the streets full of people, and the people; full of money. Today, at last, was the long awaited fair.
We had been waiting all our lives for the fair. My brother Naruto and I, Sakura, that is. The fair only happens every 12 years or so, and during the last fair my brother and I were too young to go. (Were twins.)
"Donburi! Donburi! Get your fresh, steaming hot Donburi right here!" yelled a man in a purple robe with his clan symbol painted on the sleeves and back. He was pushing a wooden cart full of pre-packed bowls of Donburi. The sign on the side of the cart said they had several types of Donburi; Oyakodon, Katsudon, Gudon, Tendon, Unadon, and Tekkadon. Sweat was dripping off his face from the cooking august sun, and you could tell by his forced expression he didn't want to be there. His hard wooden sandals made an audible nose much like a horse's hooves, "clip-clop, clip-clop" and as he walked blisters started forming painfully slow on his muddy toes.
"Bah! Who wants Donburi? Get your freshly cooked Yakitori right here!" Yelled a different man around the same age. He sported Navy Blue Kahaki Pants, and a dark brown shirt with his Clan symbol on the back. His straw hat provided much needed protection from the boiling sun, but the glare from the tin cart he was pushing (which was full of Yakitori) glared into his eyes. He was also obviously not happy about being there.
Although there were many things to see, (and believe me, there were) something else caught my eye. A man… a man with squinted eyes, tousled red hair, and a very strange smile… It looked… almost….fake?
'Fake is a good way to put it… Why smile if it's fake?' I thought to myself. Nothing bothered me more than people who only pretend to smile.
I continued to stare at him, ignoring Naruto who had found some cute School Girls to hit on. His clothes, I noticed, were exceptionally dirty. And torn in certain places as well. His hair also really bothered me. Why didn't he comb it? it's not that hard to do. Or at least run him fingers through it! He still had a very peculiar smile plastered on his face, and his eyes were still squinted. I looked harder at his eyes, trying to make out what color they were…
And then I felt it.
An electric shock, that ran through me like a tidal wave. I gasped, my eyes opening wide from the sudden sensation. 'Mystery Man' turned away and started to walk off, and I was to transfixed to move in that direction.
'What the hell _was_ that…?' My mind started to wander as I leaned against a pole that just happened to be nearby. I stared off in the direction he had gone, wondering what had just happened and who that strange man was.
Sooo... I hope this is better than it used to be. I'll have the rest if the story up again soon, I just have to go through it and add/take out things. Hopefully it won't be to long.
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