Okay, I just read what i wrote and it kinda sucked so I'm trying to come up with a different storyline. Tell me if you like this one better or if the other one was way better than the one I'm writing right now.
Donatello sighed. He was feeling very down lately. He didn't know if he was depressed or not or if he just needed more sleep, or if it was a little of both. He was probably depressed and that was making him not get enough sleep, or vise-versa. Whatever, it didn't matter. He just wished he didn't feel like his best friend had just died. Maybe it was because April and Casey moved away to California. Maybe it was the fact that Splinter was very ill and had been ill for six weeks. Maybe it was because Leonardo was acting very hot tempered, and that was making Raphael even more hot tempered too than usual. Maybe it was because Mikey kept on breaking everything around the house and he (Don) had to fix it. Maybe it was the fact that Shredder was hunting them down and trying to capture Don for some reason. Maybe it was because Shredder had 'accidentally' killed Karai and that was making Leo upset. Maybe it was because Leatherhead had been killed by Agent Bishop. Maybe it was because Angel had moved away to Arizona and he missed her a little bit. Maybe it was everything that was going on in his life.
While he was thinking about a solution to make himself less depressed, his alarm systems suddenly started bleeping, then it turned off all of a sudden. His brothers ran to the lab as quick as they could to see what had happened.
"What's going on Donny?" asked Leo, glaring.
"Something's broken into the lair!" cried Don.
"I say we teach 'em not to mess with us," growled Raph. Leo nodded and all four of them ran to go see who had intruded into their home. To their dismay, it was none other than the Shredder!
"Dude, whaddya want with us," asked Mikey, twirling his nunchuks around. Shredder glared.
"I need the one called Donatello!" Shredder yelled. Don's eyes widened. Why did he want him out of all of his brothers?
"Why me?" Don asked nervously.
"You shall see soon enough," Shredder said, glaring even harder, only this one was aimed straight at Don. All the turtles started fighting off the Foot ninja so they could get to Shredder, but the Foot seemed too strong, way stronger than before. Shredder noticed them struggling and laughed out loud. "I trained them well before I had them attack, I could not stand to fail capturing you turtles any longer."
Finally, after twenty agonizing minutes of fighting, the turtles fought off all the ninja. To their alarm, Shredder was holding an unconcious Splinter in his hands.
"Turn yourself in Donatello, unless you want the rodent to die!" he bellowed. Don put his weapons on the ground and started walking slowly to Shredder. "Faster you reptile!" he hollered.
"Okay, I'm going faster, just be careful with him..." Don said as he started fast walking towards Shredder. Once he got to Shredder, Shredder threw Splinter to Leonardo, then handcuffed Don as if he were arresting him.
"Don't even think about trying to stop me, if you do, I will surely kill Donatello and after, I will destroy this so called 'home'." Shredder warned. The remaining turtles glared as the Foot left with Shredder and Donny. If only Shredder had killed himself instead of Karai... man that would be awesome. When they left, the turtles stood there in silence. Finally Mikey broke up the silence.
"So...when are we gonna get Donny back?" he asked.
"Right now," Raph replied, twirling his sai.
"Wait, don't we need a plan first?" asked Mikey.
"Mikey's right, we need a well, thought out plan." Leo said thoughtfully. He put Splinter back in bed then they went in a circle and started discussing what they were going to do to get their brother back.
Shredder laughed. His plan was going exactly as planned. He had put a camera in the lair and saw that the turtles were discussing what they were going to do to get their brother back. He smirked. Surely they knew he had planned all this out already. He stopped smiling when he head the one called Michelangelo say, "What if this is all a trap?" He banged his fist on the table. They weren't supposed to know that it was a trap! Then his smile returned when he heard Leonardo say, "Whether it's a trap or not we are going to get our brother back." His plan was going to work out after all. He saw them leave the lair, so he got all the places they could enter in surrounded by about eighty ninja. He knew the turtles would probably split up, then his ninja could kill them, and he would kill Donatello himself. Then the sick rat wouldn't have anyone to take care of him and he would die as well. His life would finally be free of the turtles. He turned to Donatello.
"I'm going to make your death slow and painful," Shredder said, laughing evilly. Even though he tried to look brave, Don actually looked frightened, making Shredder even happier. He was glad that he chose this turtle. He grabbed the chained up turtle and threw him across the room. He smiled even wider when he heard the sound of a few bones breaking. He grabbed the turtles leg and sunk a sword he had kept nearby into it. He smiled wider than he had ever smiled in his life-time when the turtles cried out in pain. He grabbed the turtles face and put it near his. "Do you know how I found your dwelling place?" Don gulped and shook his head.
"N-No I-I don't know h-how you found us..." Don said in a shaky voice.
"It's all thanks to you really. I found a tracker and it led us straight to you turtles." He said the word turtles as if it hurt to say it. He heard Don say something under his breath that sounded like, "He tracked us by the Shell Cel Mikey left on the gorund..." Shredder was about to make some rude remark when his alarm systems went off. He saw some hope fill Donatello's eyes. "Do not think that your brothers will save you. I have put approximately eighty-five ninja at each entrance to the building, and they (your brothers) will easily be defeated. I heard their plan and they will split up, making them even more vulnerable to death, so don't get any hope." Don smiled weakly.
"My brothers have defeated over a hundred ninja alone before, this is no different." he said, earning a smack from Shredder. He tried to ignore his blackening eye. "Besides, they've probably figured out that this is a trap and decided to stay together." Shredder slapped Don's bleeding leg, making the turtle wince.
"Hmmm, I did not think that would happen...thank you for telling me Donatello, I will make sure to be on the lookout for your brothers so that I can be sure to destroy them." Don's face fell to the ground as Shredder left the room. Why in the world did he have to open his big mouth and tell Shredder the plans his brothers had most likely made? That was why he didn't talk much because when he did, it usually got him in trouble. He wished his leg would bleed out faster so that he didn't have to hear or see his brothers die. All of a sudden, the bleeding stopped. He stared at his leg, surprised. Did his platelets really clog the cut that fast, or did the chains cut off his blood circulation? He didn't care, he just hoped his brothers defeated the ninja off without dying.
So is this version better, or did you like the other one? Please review and tell me:^)