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-List of phrase you should know before reading-
Darkspawn: Are evil creatures that live in the Deep Roads(An abandoned underground Dwarven city)
Archdemon: A leader of the Darkspawn
Blight: When the darkspawn become organized and go to the surface because of the birth of an acrhdemon
Grey Warden: A group of legendary fighters that dedicate their lives to killing darkspawn. Additionally they contain some darkspawn blood themselves and are the only ones able to kill an acrhdemon
Dalish: A faction of elves that live in tribes away from cities in an attempt to preserve their Elven heritage
Templar: People who hunt mages and send them to the Circle(Mages prison)
Circle of Magi(The Circle): A prison for mages because everyone fears their power and that they may become Blood Mages
Blood Mage: People who use blood magic, corrupt arts learned from demons
Abomination: Mages who become possessed by demons often as a result of blood magic
Chantry: A religious organization that supervises the Templars
Alienage: A poverty stricken area populated with only elves
Keeper:Leader of a tribe of Dalish
Apostate:A mage that's not in the Circle or not controlled by the Chantry.
Slaver-Someone who imprisons another person to sell them on the black market or a place where slavery is legal.
Magister:A mage that only cares about power and often have a large amount of slaves.
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Dragon Age 2:Doomsday
(ACT 0/Prologue)
Narration
Once upon a time in the country of Fereldan there lived a family which consisted of Malcolm, Leandra, Crimson, Bethany, and Carver. They all lived content in the farming village of Lothering that is, until the fifth Blight. The town of Lothering tried it's very best to defend against the darkspawn but it was inevitable... the town was destroyed and the Hawke family barely made it out alive...
Crimson P.O.V
My family and I ran with the darkspawn gaining on us every second. I was running out of breath and father promptly turned to throw a fireball spell at the darkspawn disintegrating them on contact. My family and I stopped to take a breather. "That should do it for now" father exclaimed a little exhausted.
"Our home in Lothering... all of it gone" mother buried her head in her hands.
"I'm sorry mother I know how much Lothering meant to you" I said trying to console her.
"We've been running since Ostagar" Carver chimed in.
"If only we'd left sooner..." Bethany was now staring at Carver.
"Well why are you looking at me, we're running from your blighted templars"
"ENOUGH" father bellowed and Carver and Bethany looked at him with fear in their eyes.
"I will not have my children fighting each other when we should be protecting each other from the darkspawn. This is the last I want to hear of you two arguing, is that clear?!"
"Yes father" Bethany and Carver said in unison and he smiled at them gently resting each of his hands on their shoulders. I looked at father and was in awe, man before me is such a powerful person that he can instill fear within the most fiercest warriors, but can become one of the most loving and nurturing people when needed. I want to be someone like that ... I thought before I was broken out of my stupor by the sound of my father's voice signaling for us to stay behind him. We moved into a small clearing when darkspawn began trying to ambush us from both sides of the path. Carver intiated the first attack with his Pummel Strike technique slashing a few darkspawn while cleaving stone, then he followed up with his normal sword swings. Bethany and father combined their firepower to create a massive flamethrower that that spread over a large radius. I stayed next to mother protecting her from all incoming darkspawn. I started by using my Mind Blast spell on the darkspawn around us before striking them down with my fire staff. We were finished in record breaking time and made our way to the a hill south of the clearing before stopping again.
"Where are we going?"Bethany said concerned.
"Isn't it obvious we're getting away from the darkspawn." Carver stated simply.
"And then where we can't just wander aimlessly."
I replied quickly "As long as we're together."
"But Bethany has point"replied father.
"We can go to Kirkwall" Leandra replied finally voicing her thoughts.
"Mother are you sure?" I then made a face saying 'Do you really want to do this?' however it went unnoticed.
"Yeah Kirkwall has a LOT of templars"
"Yeah but we have family there... and an estate"
"So it's decided, my beautiful wife and kids will be going to Kirkwall" father finalized before bringing mother into his arms and held her for a deep, passionate kiss. Carver and I made faces at their display of public affection.
"Thank you dear" After the heartfelt moment my father and I moved down the path before more darkspawn appeared. I began cutting them down with my staff until I caught wind of a female taking arms against the darkspawn... that's suicide. I told the rest of my family who seemed to be finished with their portions of darkspawn before we began closing in on the ones attacking the woman. One by one the creatures approached us and one by one they fell. As soon as we finshed off the darkspawn we approached the seemingly exhausted darkspawn victims. One was a woman of tall stature and the other one... well I nearly jumped when I realized the other one was a Templar.
"Oh it seems the maker has a sense of humor" Bethany smiled wryly
"By order of the chantry I order you to-" and like that the templar was on the ground coughing and convulsing in pain.
"...must-" the Templar was cut off by a gentle hand on his shoulder, his wife apparently.
"I am Aveline Vallen and this here is my husband Sir Wesley, we can hate each other when we're out of the horde"
"Agreed" father replied eyeing them with killer intent.
"Let's move" I said trying to ease the tension between the two parties. We swiftly began moving south and with another fighting hand we were nearly unbeatable. We disposed of the darkspawn in any way possible. Bethany, father, and I shot bolts of magic at any darkspawn that was trying to sneak a hit on Carver or Aveline. Carver hack and slashed through any darkspawn that came his way, and Aveline parried off any darkspawn threatening mother or her we made our way to a rather large clearing, where an ogre stood. I was paralyzed with fear. I hadn't even SEEN an orge much less fought one. They were large and ugly creatures with a purple-blue tint. It was large at three times the size of a normal person and four times as wide. It's face however was perhaps the worse part of it all. It was scrunched up with a dark expression like it was going to eat me, the beast even had piercing red eyes to match. The face was all cut up and gorey and was leaking as though someone recently slashed at it's face, it even had black saliva which looked beyond acidic as though touching it would melt off your skin. What do I do... I know I should attack it but I can't get my legs to move. It roared which had me on the verge of collapsing. Without warning it began charging at Wesley but before any of us could try to divert it's attention away then it happened. Something my nineteen years of being a mage could not have prepared me for, father pushed Wesley from out of the orge's path and... took the killing blow. My father died ... for a stranger one that probably wanted me, him, and Bethany imprisoned for the rest of our lives. Father died because of a templar. Father died because of a templar. I continued to chant this as I fell to my knees. Warm tears began their way down my face as I realized my father was no longer with us.
I shook my head at this,THIS can't be happening. I was about to break down into full blown sobs until I heard a roar on the other side of the clearing. THIS IS YOUR FAULT. I intended to take the ogre down or die trying and after I killed the ogre the TEMPLAR was next. We should have just left him and his stupid wife surrounded by darkspawn and father wouldn't have taken the killing blow for him. I grew angrier and angrier by the second, my killing intent rising. I started with my entropy magic and summoned the worse nightmares that I could on the ogre. I then froze his feet to the ground using my Winter's Grasp while he was wallowing in pain and grief. I smirked Don't like pain now do you big guy?. Then ran up to him and shattered the ice so that his feet were no more. Still under the influence of my Nightmare spell I climbed onto the now fallen ogre and stabbed him in the head. I did it repeatedly as the ogre's blood spewed everywhere. I stop until ogre brain and blood soaked my fabrics and I had finally noticed the ogre was no longer in the realm of the living. I looked around to see heaps of darkspawn bodies scattered around the clearing. I assumed while I was fighting the ogre evryone else defended me from other darkspawn.
"MALCOLM" mother bellowed running over to where her husband died.
"FATHER" Bathany and Carver said in unison following mother's actions.
"My husband my poor husband"mother's head was held low near the crook of his neck.
"He died bravely" I said half trying to console my mother half trying to console myself.
"I don't want a hero I want my husband, how could you let him charge off like that he was your father ,my... husband."I temporarily held my head in shame before looking back up.
"Let's move we've wasted enough time, if we die here he would have given his life for nothing."
"Agreed" Carver chimed in.
"Here they come" stated Bethany who pointed to the next wave of darkspawn. We were weak from fending off darkspawn for long periods of time with no rest. Since our little party was out of mana and stamina from pure exhaustion, we were reduced to regular sword swings a blasts of energy shot from our staves, all while accumulating the smallest of injuries except for Carver who suffered a huge gash on the side of his forearm and back from a darkspawn emissary and was incapacitated.
"There's too many of them" Carver said being held with his arm around Aveline's shoulder as she helped him walk closer to the party. The darkspawn began surrounding us, and I was moving back into a fighting stance. It seemed futile until a dragon swooped down from an overhead ledge roasting and tearing apart a few darkspawn. Suddenly there was a spiraling light and in the dragon's place was an old woman? I don't care if she was a mabari with cutest eyes I would still get ready to to kill it. If a fight breaks out I may not be able to keep casualties to a minimum, given we even win.
I stepped forward "I don't know who or what you are but, I'm not going to let you hurt us"
"Child if I wished you harm you would already be hurt" the dragon lady paused before starting up again"It appears to happen yet again" she turned to face me now"It appears as though fortune smiles on us both child, I have a proposition for you"
"We don't need you we were doing just fine"
"Well excuse me if it didn't seem that way" I narrowed my eyes at the woman."Just who or what are you anyway?"
Aveline lifted her head "I know what she is... the witch of wilds"
"Some call me that also Asha Bellana, the woman of many years, the old hag who talks to much." the old hag paused before continuing again."Know that if you wish to flee the darkspawn you are going the wrong way"
Carver chimed in hastily "We've running since Ostagar"
"Well how about it?!" the old woman said smiling mischievously.
Sir Wesley collapsed from exhaustion because he was wounded by a darkspawn earlier.
"Wesley" Aveline said running to her husband. "Crimson we have to or Wesley will die"
"What's happened to your man is irreversible" the retorted.
"She's right I feel the darkspawn corruption running through me, I won't make it... you have to kill me"
"No Wesley you can't you don't know what you're asking" I walked over to Aveline "Let me do it... so that he doesn't become one of them" Aveline let out a choked groan. I took her knife and then looked him in his infected eyes. I leaned over and whispered in his ear before plunging the dagger in his heart "This is for father...". He looked shocked as I ceased his existence with his dagger, he then closed his eyes very peaceful. I wish he had died more painfully.
"Ahhhhhh now do you realize how much I am needed child"
"Didn't I say we don't need you!"
"Ahhhhh but I need you, listen I will fly you to Kirkwall and in exchange you will deliver this amulet to a tribe of elves. Be sure to give it to their leader Marethari"
"How do you know I'll even deliver your amulet?!"
"Oh I know..."
Narration
So the Witch of the Wilds did as she said and flew them all to a port away from the darkspawn horde there, the Hawke family and Aveline took a ship to Kirkwall but they did not know that their troubles were just beginning...
Crimson P.O.V
"Hey move it move it" one of the city guards said as they pushed a mass of refugees back away from the city gates. "Look at this city, it's packing with Refugees from the Blight, how are we going to get in?!"
"They'd probably send us back in a heartbeat" I said as I liustened to a conversation in the background
"We want you to let us into the city"
"The city's full"
"What do you mean full?! That's not right!"
"Look we'll find ships to take you all back to where you came from" My group and I approached the city guard.
"Can I speak to who's in charge?!" I said with grit in my voice.
"That's if you can find him"
"Fine then I'll locate him myself" I said angrily as I stalked off to another part of Kirkwall's Entrance. I saw an important looking man in the city guard uniform surely he must be important right?! "I need to speak with your leader"
"Pardon?!" the guard said and mother walked up to him and tried to keep the conversation non hostile."What my son meant to say is that we're here to live in Kirkwall" my mother said politely. "Yeah well line up, you and every other refugee but, don't worry we find ships to take you all back"
"But we have family here and an estate"
"Had an estate..." everyone turned to see my cousin Alior walking casually with a grin on his face. He had purple hair with soft brown eyes and a defined jawline. He had slicked back hair in a suave manner and a short bread that only grew along his jaw and chin.
"Alior what do you mean?!" mother said after hugging him. "Doesn't Gamlen own the estate?!"
"Gamlen" the city guard captain said with a look of disdain on his face.
"The only Gamlen I know is a weasel and a low life"
"Sadly aunty dearest it's true my father is a low life... however, guard captain surely you can spare a bit of room for the pretty people" Alior said gesturing toward us."Unless they have money then I don't think so..."
Another group of mercenaries were furious that we had a chance of getting into Kirkwall and decided to force their way into the city and the Guards began fighting the mercenaries. I mostly used spells that messed with their mind and then slashed them with my fire staff while they were being mentally plagued. I finished off a few of the mercenaries and finished at around the same we finished the guard captain approached us.
"Thank you for helping with that little... outburst we had"
"Let me guess we still can't get into the city" I said glaring at the guard captain."Look I can't get you into the city but, I'll go personally fetch Gamlen for all of you just wait"
"I think I'll go along... father is a drunkard and those people usually need a lot of convincing" Alior chimed in before he and the guard captain were off to find my uncle Gamlen.
Six days later
"We've been here for days" Bethany dejectedly announced. A moment later Gamlen and Alior walked into our range of view and Leandra ran and gave Gamlen a hug. "Gamlen it's so good to see again"
"And you Leandra"
"Gamlen... Malcolm didn't make it..."
"Oh come on Leandra don't drop this on me here, now I don't even know if I can get you into the city"
"What do you mean what about the estate?!"
"Uh yeah I lost it... while gambling..."
"Then all hope is lost" mother said glumly."Well not exactly I know two characters who can smuggle you into the city given you do what they say"
"Wait Gamlen are these people criminals?!"
"One's a smuggler and the other's a mercenary"
"I say we force our way in" I said slamming my first into a nearby stone monument. Alior smiled cheekily "Yeah because that worked for the other mercenaries who tried to 'force' their way in."
"I agree with Alior on this one" Bethany said laying a gentle hand on my shoulder.
"Well what do you think we should do Carver, Bethany?!"
"Well I just want whatever gets us in" Carver said curtly and Bethany agreed.
"Then how about we try this mercenary" I had decided and with that we were mercenaries.
Narration
And with that they were cast mercenaries and began making a name for themselves in the various districts of and his family barely made enough money to survive in Kirkwall's poorest district and his group has been eyeing this opportunity to make a fortune but to make money you have to spend money...
(ACT 0/Prologue) - End
