Alright this is my first fanfic ever. I'd like some constructive criticism for future writing. Remember there is a difference between flaming and constructive criticism. This is a yaoi and as of yet the main pairing is undecided yet, but I will try to experiment with sasunaru, gaanaru, sainaru, itanaru, nejinaru, and maybe kibanaru. It will be a high school and yakuza fic. This first chapter is short but I will try to make them longer.
Disclaimer: Naruto does not belong to me.
On Edge
Chapter One: A Dimly Lit Room
In the middle of a dimly lit room, stood two men. The first wore a black suit with his shirt partially opened and with sunglasses on the tip of his nose. His dirty blond, shoulder length hair was pulled back into a pony tail. He seemed quite relaxed despite the fact that the tension in the room was so thick one could cut it with a butter knife. The other was wearing torn jeans with a white tank top that revealed the numerous tattoos running down his arms. A green beanie covered his scruffy black hair. Unlike his close by acquaintance, this man was quite discomforted and fidgeted from side to side. Suddenly a silky, but disgruntled voice from behind a large, wooden desk broke the silence.
"Where's the boy?" asked the man.
". . ."
"Well, where is he?"
"I-it s-s-seems he has es-es-escaped," stumbled the tattooed man.
"What?!" replied the man behind the desk. His anger rising.
"He escaped last night after taking down the guards outside his cell. There's been
no sign of him anywhere in our territory since," replied the suited man smoothly.
"Well, how is it that he escaped our territory so fast without my men catching up to him, hmmm?"
"Um, well you see… there was this incident… and um he sort of, well he ummm…" mumbled the awkward tattooed fellow.
"COME ON OUT WITH IT ALREADY!!!"
"He slashed all the tires of the vehicles," stated the suited man.
"Except yours… instead He. Stole. It.," piped in the fidgety man.
". . . WHAT?!" hollered the disgruntled man, but before he could say anymore the two men had vanished leaving a cloud of smoke behind.
"Just you wait, Uzamaki Naruto. When I get my hands on you, you will rue the day you ever defied me," whispered the man maliciously to himself.
Okay so here is the first chapter of my fanfic it is very short and personally I don't really like it, but I had to use it to open the story. It does get better so please keep reading.