This is my first story, so I'm not sure how it's going to turn out.
Prologue
Alison was sitting on her bed in her room staring at a fairth of her elven mother when someone knocked at the door. She bounded down the old wooden stairs to get the door, only to see that her father had already opened it and was letting Brom into the house. Alison had to smile in greeting because she could not follow the elf customs in Carvahall, a small village that is inhabited by humans.
"What brings you here today Brom?" Alison's father asked politely
"I came to warn you both," Came Brom's reply, while he turned and closed the wooden door. "The Ra'zac are here so you must stay inside because they will be able to tell you are elves, but I have leave to check on Eragon"
"Why do you need to check on Eragon?" Alison asked, alarmed.
" They were after him," Brom replied grimly and hurried back out of the house
"Don't you think of going after him, you know Brom is fully capable of defending himself," Alison's father said worriedly
"It's not Brom I'm worried about," Alison said and she swiftly darted around her father and out of the door, her black hair flying behind her.
Once out of the house Alison had to slow down because the villagers would be alarmed at her fast pace. She heard her father running after her, calling her name. Alison slowed to a stop when she heard footsteps hurrying down a thin street nearby, from the sound of the footfalls there was two, more likely three people walking. Alison, with her highted senses, could hear them speaking
"Maybe we sshould go back and get the boy," Said one voice
"No," hissed another "Too rissky,"
Then the two voices were upon Ailson and she froze as she realised that they smelt strange, like rotting meat. The two hooded figures appered to have hump on their backs and they both wore black gloves, no skin was visible. They hissed and one of them said "Seemss we've found an elf, masster will be pleased," Alison's father had caught up with her by then and he pulled out a hidden knife with a slight curve and inticrite patterns down the blade. He stood ready to fight the Ra'zac as they pulled down their hoods, Alison could barely breathe she was so frightened, staring at their powerfull beaks. One of them lunged forwards and bit her father in the shoulder and he lifted the knife in an attempt to block the attack, then the other one drew it's long and pale sword and stabbed Alison's father in the chest, he tried to evade the blow but was too slow on account of his injured shoulder. That was when Alison started screaming. She ran forward, propelled by her fury but everything went back when one of the Ra'zac hit her in the head with the hilt of his sword.
Please review! I want to know if it's any good! If you didn't fully understand, Alison is an elf so are her parents, they were sent to live in Carvahall before Alison was born so that the elves would be aware of what is going on in the Empire. But then the Ra'zac came, but Alison doesn't know that they came for the egg, but the Ra'zac capture Alison and kill her father.