HI guys! so I've been working awhile on this and I would really like others reviews. please nothing too negative, but I would like some constructive criticism. I didn't spell check or grammar proof/capitalize check, so if you see something please don't point it out, I'm working on it. anyways, thanks! Review!
Freedom in chains
~Mary~
The summer heat weighed down on me. I sat on the beach in shorts and tank top, digging my bare feet in the sand. The waves crashed on the beach in full force as the day was crawling to an end. I raked my fingers through my excessivly long scarlett hair. Glancing around, seeing college students mess around and having fun while still young. I sighed. I was beginning my senior year in high school in August. I layed back on the sand, stretching.
I had come to Myrtle Beach, South Carolina for the summer to spend time with my grandparents. I would be heading back to Tennessee in a week, to begin school. The beach was my usual destination, for i didnt care for crowds. My summer friends were on last minute vacations with their families and i was alone. i didnt mind, though. i begin picking at the sand when a looming shadow appeared above me. my heart raced as panic set in.
i was afraid to turn around, but afraid not to. my head slowly crept around to peak at my on-looker. it was a boy that looked around my age, black hair, fierce blue eyes and a slight pale body. i could see his toned uscles underneath his light blue shirt. He was gorgeous. He probably would have been even hotter if it wasnt for the fact he was glaring at me. I scurried to my feet and began backing away from the mysteriously attractive boy.
A sound that resembled a low growl came from his chest and i gasped. i looked around me hoping for help, but i hadnt noticed the sun already went down and the beach was vacant of citizens. i gulped slowly and began backing away faster, towards the ocean. I was aquaphobic, and didnt know how to swim, but it had to be a better fate then what this boy probably had for me.
his eyes started to shine and turn a crimson red. i began shaking, and wanted to scream, but it felt like someone had shoved it down. i opened my mouth to help it come, but nothing escaped my lips. the boy began advancing on me. "Didnt your parents ever tell you not to wander alone?" he said sarcastically, as if there was a hidden joke i wasnt allowed to know. his advances became faster, and i backed up in match. i felt the waves began to rush my ankles and rise to my knees as i went deeper in the water.
"Freeze!" he growled. As f i had no control of my own limbs, my legs froze, mid-thigh deep in the ocean. I hated the ocean, and water for that matter. Swimming pools were sometimes okay, but i had to be able to see the bottom and be able to touch. it was more a fear of deep water. so as i noticed how deep i was, i bean to hypervenilate. the boy advanced on me, his jeans picking up water as he entered the water. i was shaking violently by this point and i felt tears well in my eyes.
he reached for my arm and grabbed it tightly. i was gonna die. or get raped. hopefully he wouldnt torture me and i could die quickley. i came to grams to this but that didnt stop my protests as his grip became tighter. he opened his mouth alittle and i stared confused. as i took a closer look, i saw tiny fangs protruding out. Vampire. i whimpered as i came to this realization. but thats impossible, they dont excist! i begann to fight agianst him, trying to jerk free of his iron grasp, but he just tightned his hand. i kicked and punched at him, but that just earned him picking me up by my hair and dunking me in the ocean.
i began to scream, and he just dunked me under more, until my lungs began to fill with water, and my throat started burning as i gasped for air. a huge wave hit us then and he stumbled alittle, unexpectedly letting me go. i used the oppertunity and stumbled for the beach, convulsing up water. my eyes and throat burned at the pain. i tripped on my own feet, but i didnt let that stop me. i tried to crawl away, but the feeling of being pressed to the ground by a body crushed my hope. he flipped me on my back and wrestled me until he had my arms pinned above my head and my legs locked between his knees. "Hold still and ill make your death more swift!" he hissed. that didnt stop me, i began fighting even more. he struck at my head and i felt a wave of dizziness take over. i felt a warm liquid trail down my temple, and figured i was bleeding. i saw a change in his eyes at the sight of my blood. his eyes entered a sort of frenzy as he licked it up.
i trembled and whimpered as the pain in my head grew evident. i went limp and began shaking. he loosened up, "Thats better..now just do as i say and this will be over soon. See i havnt eaten today, and you just smell so amazing. i couldnt help it, its your fault for smelling so good." he said this as he licked more of my blood off my temple. a moan escaped his lips as he savoured the taste. i closed my eyes waiting on my death and the pain that came with it.
A deep growl entered the night. i snapped open my eyes to realize it hadnt come from he vampire threatening my life. my vision was becoming hazy, but i managed to turn my head slightly. a humungous wolf stood a few foot away, growling at the vampire on top of me. the boy arised off me and faced the wolf. i stayed on my back, unable to move. the wolf glanced at me, concern filling its dark eyes. Is that...a werewolf? i gulped, which caught the wolfs attention. the vampire took that momment to leap at him. the wolf growled, taking an arm full of flesh into its muzzle. they faught like that for awhile. each one sticking in its own attack. my head was swimming.
Werewolves and vampires..everything that i was taught was folk stories meant to teach kids lessons, was all real. i gulped and closed my eyes. i could feel a heaviness weighing on me as black waters threatined my conscienceness. a loud screech brought me back to see the wolf landing a blow, taking a huge chunk out of the vampire. my eyes widened as the wolf proceded to rip it to shreds. i stared at the pile of remains and swallowed hard. im next, i realized. the wolf had iits entertainment with the vampire, and was now gonna have its meal with me.
i closed my eyes waiting on the pain sure to come. but it never did. i opened my foggy eyes to see a guy in place of the wolf. i couldnt make out details, but he wasnt wearing a shirt, and his jeans hung low on his hips. i swallowed and tried to sit up. my head swam and i fell back on the sand, my hands trying to hold my head on place. pain shot through it as i touched the wound inflicted on my temple. blood covered my fingers as i drew it away. i tried sitting up alittle slower, but a hand restricted me. i gasped and flinched, looking up to see the guys hand pushing my shoulder back down.
he smiled reassuringly at me, "its alright, i wownt hurt you beautiful.."his words trailed off as my eyes closed, pain taking over. Wait..did he call me beautiful? i tried to open my eyes but i no longer had any control over them. i could feel my shoulders being shaken, and a distant shouting, but it was behind me. the blackness was taking over. it was comforting and made the pain go away. i welcomed it with open arms and then there was nothing.
~Tyler~
Her breathing slowed but didnt stop. her heart began to slow down and i paniced, hoping her head wound was that serious. my mate layed semi motionless on the sand. i glanced back at the remains of the vampire that had attacked her, now on fire. by morning itll be nothing but ashes, swept away by the waves. i picked up the girl on the sand and craddled her to me.
my mate. i finally found her. i smiled inwardly. now how am i suppose to explain to her about tonight, when she wakes up? i looked aound the vaccinity of the beach, hoping to find a bag or something that would have her I.D. But, i didnt know how far down the beach she could have come from. i wondered around alittle, her still in my arms. i evantually found a messanger bag laying near the water. i layed her gently down, and picked up the small bag, searching its contents for a wallet. i finally found a small wallet and opened it to find the drivers liscense.
It had her picture on the left, her smiling. her bright red hair curled softly in waves around her face, her bright green eyes shining brightly. Her name, birthday,address, and expiration date in bold the right. Mary Drew Locke. the name rang through me like bells, warming my being and sending chills through-out my body. a beautiful name, for a beautiful girl. i still couldnt believe i had called her beautiful aloud. i hope she hadnt heard it. i looked at the address and dropped my jaw. Tennessee? that was miles away, did that blood sucker really drag her that far away just to-? i couldnt think to end that sentence. i would just get even more mad at the thought of her being touched by that thing.
i shook my head and dropped the wallet back in the back and searched for something else to lead me to where she came from. i found a picture in the the side pocket: it was of her standing with an elderly couple, them smiling infront of an ice-cream stand. i reconized it immedietly, from down the street. her grandparents must live near here. I thought. i slung the bag around me and picked her back up as softly as possibly. i needed to get her back to the packs house to get her medical attention.
I half ran back down the beach, in the direction i had come from. I had smelled her sweet scent during my nightly walk. i had been walking, watching the waves, when i smelled something like cherry blossoms and vanilla. Every wolf smelled something diffrent when they found their mate. i loved the smell of cherry blossom and vanilla and followed it to find her pinned, helpless beneath that leech. i had got so possesive and worried, i had rushed right in shifting right there. her look of fear as her eyes snapped open and to me, sent a pang in my chest, i didnt ant her to fear me. i heard her gulp and glanced over to make sure she was alright.
the leech pounced on me before i could dodge and we began to dance in our fight. i was going to protect her. i circled him around so that i was standing between them. i would glance at her to check she was still alive. her eyes were closed and her breathing heavy, i had to end this quick. we both heard a stutter in her heart beat. he was the first to look, and i took the chance to grab him in my muzzle. i heard her heart begin again and noticed her wide eyed exression as she watched me tear the leech to shreds. i felt awful, for her to watch that. by the time i shift back, and had lit the thing on fire, using my cigerette lighter i always kept on me for these occasions. she was trying to sit upon her own, and failing.
i went to her, i couldnt watch. i gently pushed her back down. she gasped and flinched. i didnt let it to me. after what she witnessed just now, i dont blame her. i smiled, trying to show i wouldnt hurt her. "its alright, i wownt hurt you beautiful.." the word slipped out before i could stop it. thats when her heart began to slow suddenly. i started gently shaking her, yelling her to stay awake. but she was gone. thankfully still alive though.
i cut through the woods, heading down the invisible path to the house. it took ten minutes, she stirred only once, mummbling about a wolf. i slightly smiled, hoping it was a good dream. i had ripped my shirt sleeve to make a small bandage for her head. it was becoming soiled with blood, so i quickened my pace. i reached the house, and not long after it came into view, my mother came out of the front door, with a smile on her face. however, one look at the bundle in my arms wiped it off, anger and concern filled her eyes. "Tyler!-" "We dont have time. she needs help" i choked alittle on the last part. i looked at her with worried eyes as her breathing slowed even more.
i looked to my mother, trying to convey all my thoughts in one look. she seemed to understand, because her eyes softened and she smiled. "shes her isnt she?" i nodded and climbed the steps. my mother nodded and smiled opening the door. " take her to the dining room, and lay her on the table, ill get the first aid kit." i nodded heading to the dining room. i could hear several pairs of feet running down the stairs, when my cousins entered them room. i gave them one look and they shrank back, taking in the situation. all but one left the room. Lily, only a year younger, took one look and smiled alittle. she understand who shes was to me without asking.
she went to grab a cold rag, when my mother and father entered. my mother went straight to work on her head. Lily returned helping her. my father put a hand on my shoulder. "so its her eh?" i nodded. he chuckled alittle to himself. i began explaining the situation that happened earlier. concern filled my fathers face, my mothers filled with worry over Kai. i went to her and took her hand in mine. her hand was cold, as i rubbed it trying to warm it up. my father told me he didnt like that she saw me shift, but it couldnt be helped. after an hour or so, she was finally banadaged up and we decided to see how things go when she wakes up. i picked her up gently and climbed the stairs after thinking my family for their help.
i shifted Mary in my arms and opened my bedroom door. i closed it with my foot and walked over to my bed. Lily came in momments later with a pair of her own pajamas. i layed Kai on the bed and moved out of the way. my eyes never leaving her face. Lily smacked my arm and my eyes finally snapped to her, "what?" i asked bitterly. she eyed me, raising an eyebrow, "have you no respect? shes a lady! get out while i change her clothes!" i felt my cheeks turn red and nodded. of course stupid, i chastisized myself as i walked out into the hallway. a few minutes later Lily came out, telling me it was alright to go in. i opened and closed the door after thanking her, walking to my bed. i shrugged on a white t-shirt from the ground and sat on the edge watching her sleep. now all that was left to do was wait for her to wake up..