Okay my name is Shadow Obsidian, and this is my first fanfiction plz review and constructive criticism is allowed and encouraged. A few notes words in bold are my notes, the ones is italics are the speech, normal words are description or just to move the story, and finally underline words are thought. Lets now start the story.
Chapter 1: Unknown
(Shadow's prov)
Shadow runs down the street as fast as he could, as he mumbles "Crap I'm late, on the first day too." he had got up late as he had just moved to Beach city and was unpacking all night. Steven Universe had invited him to lunch at 1:30 P.M. ( Dam, first nice person and you are late, you fucking idiot ) he thinks as he arrives at Stevens beach house.
(Steven's prov)
"Hey Garnet, Pearl, Amethyst have you seen a boy around 6Ft. ,10In. , snow white hair, shiny white eyes, slightly muscled but still more on the thin side, lightly tanned skin, and wearing a black sleeved vest with a white under shirt, black jeans and white and red sneakers." Steven asked the gems.
"there." Garnet said as she pointed out the widow. Just then they saw Lapis burst out of the water, with Jasper walking out looking pissed.
"lets go."they all say in union
(Shadow's prov)
Shadow drops his cellphone that is playing Faint-by Linkin-Park, when a light blue skinned girl with darker Blue hair flies out of the water. He starts to run over to her when a really pissed orange woman that almost looked like a man walks out of the water. "WTF, what is happening?"
"human out of my way is you want live." the orange woman demanded. " I did not stutter did I? MOVE" she the throws Shadow out of the way.
Shadow gets up and see's the blue girl cry as the orange woman punches her. "STOP, NOW!" he found himself yelling as loud as he could. ( Wait why am I doing this, I cant win. I mean she picked me up and literally threw me 10Ft. With one arm. Wha-) his thoughts were interrupted when the orange woman shouted and punched him in the chest.
"stupid human you should have ran aw—phhaaaa" the orange woman started to say before Shadow gets up out of the sand a punches her in the solerplex with the force of a hammer, knocking all the air out of her lungs.
Shadow runs over to the blue girl and asks " Hey are you ok?, do you need. I'm going to get us out of here". He starts to pick her up and run when the crystal gems arrive.
"leave me and run, get away" the blue girl pleads, as she punches his back lightly.
End of chapter one. Ill post another is a day or so depending on what happens. Also this is a trial chapter future chapters if any will be 2x longer. So ill up load more if I see 3 people read this or if one person responds and OC's are accepted. Just leave a detailed description of what he or she looks like. Thanks, also Shadow is my OC.