I know I rewrote this and have replaced Ch. 1. Enjoy! (And now I'm doing it again for the 3rd time because goodness if I'm gonna start writing this again I don't want new readers to drop out in the first chapters because of how terrible this is. Though I'm gonna keep the original author notes in here cause why not comment on not only my own writing but also my ramblings?)
Oh yeah, I support official couples and all that jazz,
Just not that much in this chapter.
Should I change the rating on this? I've seen a lot worse stuff under K+ than this.
I also suppose a proper explanation for this is in order, you can skip on down to the actually story if you don't wanna read this overly long explanation for why a story over 3 years old is getting revamped. See after ignoring this story for way to long I've decided to finally finish it, and I mean not just this one but Book 0 and Books 2 and 3 eventually. Now I can't promise when I'll be able to get these all done, but I've finally sat down and wrote out outlines for the rest of this book and the next one so I know that will help me focus on getting them done in a reasonable time frame. Ideally, I would like to get a chapter out every 1 or 2 weeks but we'll have to see how busy my school scheduled is before I set anything. Honestly, the goal is to get this fic done before I graduate college and go on to grad school next year, cause I really won't have time to write it then.
I guess I should apologize cause I keep doing this, saying I'm gonna finish this story before I graduate (Seriously I said this same thing when I started writing this back in my last year of high school) but I really want to this time and have a pretty good plan set out to do it already. The point is, I want new and old readers to enjoy this story, which is also why I'm re-writing the first 13 chapters again. They are really the weakest of the bunch because they were written first, when I was a much more inexperienced writer and I would rather the story bog down in the middle of the book than at the beginning. Hopefully you will see an improvement between these chapters now that I'm going back and writing them with a new perspective and more skill, and really I'm not gonna change that much from the original story. I always thought that this story had a lot of potential and good, if not just a little bit clichéd, ideas that just needed more fleshing out and attention given to them.
See, I've always had the idea for this story in my head, basically ever since I first started watching the show years ago. I've also always wanted to tell this story, exploring both new and old characters while also trying to give at least some closure to a great show that ended way too early. I don't know if we will ever get a canon ending for this show, I would love one even it if was done in a new medium like a comic book or something, but I do know that until we get one, fans are free to exchange their ideas about what could have happened, and at it's bare basic bones, that's what this story is. This it certainly has problems, mostly in how poorly I originally developed Gidget and Genesis, but that's because I really didn't have a full idea of where I wanted the story to go or what these two characters were like when I started this out and now that I do I'm hoping to finally give you all closure to a silly, little idea that a 13 year old girl had a long, long ago.
So yeah, this isn't a new story updating 25 chapters in one day, it's a long, often abandoned but never forgotten love letter to a show that deserved more than it got from the network. So if you want, join me on this silly little adventure from the mind of a slightly odd author about how she would end this show if given a chance. I promise never to babble on this much again and I hope you enjoy the story.
Tl;dr version: Updated cause original was crappy, bringing this dead story back from the grave, enjoy.
They ran.
They ran from Them.
They ran from the hate and the lies.
They ran because they had had enough.
They ran because they were afraid and if running was the only way to escape the pain, the abuse, then they would run.
Clang! Clang! Clang!
Their metallic feet made too much noise, they would be found soon, by Them. They had to escape, had to run, even if they didn't even know where to go.
The War
The Boy, only 14 years old and had already experienced so much, the Boy who was already more like a man now, stood upon the large metal man's shoulder and sighed. The sun was setting and the sky and ground were ablaze with blood.
How long until the ground is really covered in blood, I wonder. And who's will it be? He thought to no one but himself. The war was coming, and he did not think his forces were ready, they were too few, too stretched out, too tired. If anyone is out there, if you can hear me, please send us a miracle to help. He placed a hand over his eyes and rubbed them absentmindedly, there is something to be said when you become so desperate for help you're willing to pray to any god who might be listening.
"You worry too much, Chiro." A sudden voice directly behind him made him jump a bit, but still he couldn't help but crack a smile.
"Antauri, you scared me." Chiro stated while turning around to face his friend. "Why can't you walk like every one else?"
A silver simian who floated a few feet off the ground shrugged but smiled back for a moment before dropping the grin and looking seriously at the young leader. "Is it that you doubt the power of us, or that of our allies that makes you worry so much?" Chiro sighed heavily.
"Neither, I just believe in the number of our enemies more." Chiro hooked his thumb behind him towards the newly reincarnated Skeleton King army sitting just at the edge of the horizon.
"It is not mire numbers that decide a battle; skill and purpose also play a part." Antauri stated calmly. "They do not have the drive that we do. They are fighting to destroy, we are fighting to protecting not only our city but the entire universe." The silver simian had been looking pass Chiro and at the army as he spoke, but now he turned his attention back to the boy. "And if one was to ask my opinion, that alone would give us the upper hand, people can do amazing things when pushed. Not to mention, we have an even stronger weapon on our side than they can never hope to control; the Power Primate."
Chiro sighed but nodded while looking at his own chest. He could feel the power pulsing inside of him, put there by some greater purpose unknown to him, really for reasons unknown to him. Maybe Antauri was on to something, maybe they did have a greater chance at success than he had originally thought, but then why was this speech really not giving him confidence? As he pondered this, his hair fell in front of his eyes.
I need a hair cut. He thought with a slight smirk while flipping his hair back and actually laughing at the idea. If we survive this the first thing I'll do is get one. He told himself, chuckling softly. Here they were on the edge of the biggest battle the universe had ever seen, and all he could think about was getting a hair cut.
"Keep that thought process, Chiro." Antauri said with a smile and laying a hand gently on his shoulder. Chiro couldn't help but roll his eyes while answering.
"What, personal hygiene?" They both shared a laugh while Antauri shook his head before answering.
"No, that there will be a tomorrow." The smiles dropped from their faces as they briefly looked at each other for a minute before turning to look behind them to where the battle would be held in a few hours.
"Come Chiro, we must rest if we are to stand our ground and win this battle." The silver monkey said has he turned back towards the entrance of the Super Robot. Chiro nodded but stayed in place, slightly rocking on his heels.
"I know just give me a minute more and I'll head down." Antauri studied him a moment before nodding his head and leaving on his own. Chiro waited this his friend had descended the elevator, probably to go back and meditate, before turning his eyes back up to the sky and closing them.
If anyone is there, please send help. Chiro asked again, this time taking a deep breath before turning back and heading towards the elevator. He gave a final look back over his shoulder before he descended and sent one more thought out to whoever might be listening.
Or send death quickly
.::~::.
Chiro exited the elevator just as Nova and Sparx were in the midst of yet another verbal fight, probably the 20th or 30th in the past few days.
"You call that is a strategy?! We'll get fried in two minutes if we follow your plan!" The yellow monkey yelled dramatically while glaring profusely at her red companion.
"Well your plan consists of us running around hoping we hit something!" the red monkey rebutted while flailing his hands around for emphasis.
The yellow monkey glared while placing her own hands on her hips. "And you couldn't think of a good plan if it were to bite you on the-"
Chiro sighed before clearing his throat loudly. "Don't you two think you could hold off fighting amongst yourselves, just until this battle is over? Trust me, we'll be in the middle of another fight soon enough and then you two can get out your pent-up rage then."
Both of the monkeys glared at each other before immediately starting to simultaneously shout out an excuse.
"He was trying to get us killed by-"
"No, she was going to have us run in with no-"
Chiro sighed, he knew that Sparx and Nova had volatile relationship. They both cared deeply for each other, but recently they had a tendency to butt heads at what seemed like every little disagreement. No doubt this had something to do with the event not long ago when Sparx had the object of Hate but... ugh, he did not have time for this. Point was that there was definitely something that was awakened between them then and if they didn't stop trying to convince themselves otherwise, they would never stop fighting.
"Look guys," Chiro mediated while stepping between the two, "I know a lot has happened in the last couple of days, the Skeleton King being reincarnated and Sparx's ... incident just to name a few-" Sparx glanced away at his name, Chiro knew he still felt responsible for what had happened back there and that the wounds he had caused were still fresh- Nova hadn't even had time to replaced her cracked helmet yet- but if they kept pushing these problems back they would never be able to become a team again and then they definitely wouldn't stand a chance against the Skeleton King's army of Formless. "But we have got to stop fighting with each other and start fighting the actual bad guys."
"Well if it makes you feel any better, both of your ideas are horrible." Mr. Hal Gibson said nonchalantly while leaning against the main computer terminal. Sparx and Nova turned on Gibson together this time together.
"Hey Brain-Strain, I'd like to see you come up with a better plan!" Sparx yelled at him while crossing his arms in a huff. Chiro rolled his eyes, ready to move forward to intervene, but Gibson continued to explain.
"I did. While you two were arguing over whose plan was worse, I was making a better one." He stated simply while shrugging.
"Oh, yeah?" Nova said putting her hands on her hips, taking a defensive stance that could make even the biggest men hide in fear.
"Yes," he answered while turning to display a battle plan on the monitor. "We just have to position our selves in this specific arrangement, starting with Sector L we can-"
Chiro turned away as Gibson started to explain, no doubt he would repeat the plan a hundred times before tomorrow and Chiro would know it by heart after the 98th, he could afford to miss one explanation and since it seemed like Nova and Sparx had calmed down some. He instead chose to walk over to a curiously quiet member of the team, Otto, who appeared hard at work on something.
"What you working on there Otto?" Chiro asked as he leaned over the green simian's shoulder to get a peek at his project. Otto turned around and looked up at his leader with big, charcoal eyes behind large protective goggles and proceeded to give Chiro a smile that could only mean trouble, hopefully for their enemies.
In actuality, Otto was taking the Nova/Sparx situation harder than any one suspected. He had after all had- okay maybe just a little bit still had- a small, tiny crush on Nova, and he would do anything to hide it. Like keeping his mind busy on tasks or maybe even put on an exaggerated, fake smile.
"A hands-free communication system so we can have faster communicate between our allies and us." He held up a small ear piece that looked like a tiny monkey head with an antenna on the top while pushing his goggles up his face.
Chiro smiled. "That is genius Otto, can you make enough for all the sector leaders to use by tomorrow?"
Otto smiled his devilish grin again before answering. "Already have and then some." he said waving his hand over several already completed ear pieces. Chiro returned the smile, he could always rely on Otto, even if he was a little odd. Or a lot odd as the case might be, he was still an extremely reliable teammate and friend.
"And after sector A completes this maneuver, Sector Q can follow behind them and-" Gibson looked up and realized that Chiro was not even paying attention to the plan. "Chiro are listening to me?" He asked with more than a bit of annoyance in his voice as Antauri entered the Command Center with his hands held behind his back and moved towards the commotion calmly.
"Is something wrong?" he asked, directing the question to the aggravated Gibson and quiet Chiro.
"Hey Antauri, and sorry Gibson." Chiro quickly apologized before changing the subject, "I was just looking at Otto's new invention, it's a hands free communication device that can be distributed to the troops." The team gathered around to look at the invention.
"Good job, Otto." Antauri stated while picking up the instruments and looking over it.
"Yeah, great work Otto!" Nova said excitedly while slinging her arm over Otto's shoulder. "See Otto can actually do something useful, unlike certain other members of this team." She glared at Sparx while saying this last comment. Otto blushed, but quickly pulled his goggles back down and continued to work quietlywhile Sparx, however, was about to make a loud and most likely smart remark when Jinmay walked in.
"Hey guys!" she said cheerfully, "All the sector leaders just arrived to discuss the battle plan for tomorrow, you guys ready to show it?"
"Excellent." Gibson stated with a smile while smoothing down his fur. "I just completed it and was going over it with the rest of the team. Please gather everyone in here swiftly, we have so much to discuss." He turned back to the computer and began typing quickly, "We have to discuss the strategy, organize the brigades, distribute the solders in groups that will maximize productivity and likely-hood of success while also distributing ammunition and-"
Jinmay walked over to Chiro with a smile and playfully bumped him with her hip. "So, are you going to explain the plan, because I think the war will be over before Gibson gets done talking about it."
Chiro smiled at Jinmay and nodded his head, leaving Gibson to quickly shut his mouth and issue them a slight glare. Gibson was really quite a talker once he got stared and they really did not have time to waste on loquacious vocabulary. The battle would start in the morning and they still needed to explain the plan to all the troops and at least try to get a good night's rest before hand. Not that anyone would really be able to actually sleeping, at the very least they could try.
"Alright guys let's get everyone in here so that we can finally get this ball rolling!" Chiro said with authority. He hoped they could learn the plan in time, without one they didn't stand a chance. Not there was much of one anyway but in the past had they always seemed to pull through somehow. Maybe Antauri was right and they could rely on the Power Primate to get them through, it hadn't let them down before. He could only hope their luck would hold out for a little longer. Or continue to pray for a miracle.
.::~::.
Sparx finished checking his controls and settings inside the Fist Rocket 3 before sighing and laying a hand on his forehead.
Only a few minutes until the battle, you know, the one that could have been avoided if I hadn't completely messed everything up? I should have been able to overcome the hate, I should have been able to keep Skeleton King from coming back, I should have- No, stop. I know if I think like that then we won't win, I can blame myself all I want to after the fight, but now I need to focus.
He grunted while triple and quadruple checking his controls again. He knew it was his fault no matter what anyone else tried to tell him, he felt responsible and it was his fault Nova had gotten hurt and he not would let that happen again. Actually speaking of Nova, he wasn't completely sure he had apologized to her yet for what had happened, or maybe he had but because what he had done was so horrible and unforgiving, he felt like he hadn't yet. Rubbing his arm absent-mindedly, he flipped a switch that let him open up a private line to her. Nova appeared in front of him, annoyed and on-screen.
She looked up angrily and glared at him. "What do you want Sparx? I'm kinda busy right now and have work to do."
Sparx knew he should just apologize and say what he wanted to say, but he just couldn't resist the temptation. He put on a huge grin, "Just thought I would see what you're doing, Sweet Cheeks." he said with a wink.
Nova glared at him with a look that could kill, then suddenly she smiled and simply said, "Goodbye, Sparx" while reaching for the button to close the line.
"No wait!" Sparx shouted quickly, "I really have something important to say!"
Nova leaned back and crossed her arms while raising an eyebrow and looking at him suspiciously. "What?" She asked shortly.
He took a deep breath before starting. "I just wanted to say sorry...for everything." Nova shifted in her seat uncomfortably, but dropped the harsh look.
"Sparx, I know." She said while trying to look busy. "You've said is several times now I told you it's fine-"
"But it's not." Sparx harshly stated. Nova tried to stop herself from visibly cringing at his tone, but was unsuccessful in the attempt and Sparx saw. A look of hurt passed over his face quickly before disappearing again and being replaced by a grimace and another mumbled apology. "Look, I'm pretty sure I could spend every minute of every day apologizing and trying to make up for what I did to you back there-" Nova started to protest but a quick hand gesture from Sparx stopped her and he continued, "and I still would never feel like I had said it enough." He sighed and rubbed the back of his head. "So I guess we can settle for me making sure I say it at least once a day for the rest of eternity and then maybe I would feel like I can finally earned your trust back."
"You don't have to do that Sparx..." Nova started to say while he shook his head slowly and looking down.
"No, I really do though." He brought his eyes back up and saw Nova doing her own slow head shake now.
"No you don't. I do trust you and I really do forgive you." she managed a small smile while leaning a bit closer to the screen. She felt like she was putting on a good show for a particularly tough lie. It wasn't that she didn't trust Sparx at all, just that she didn't trust him completely yet. But she did care for him and making sure he was okay was definitely a step in the right direction to get her to feel safe around him again. She also really didn't want to hear him apologize anymore, it was just getting awkward now. "So please, stop constantly saying you're sorry, okay?"
Sparx nodded while offering a small smile. "Yeah okay, deal. I'll stop being nice now." His grin grew more genuine this time.
Nova playfully rolled her eyes, "Good, is that all? Can I get back to battle prep now?" To her surprise, Sparx actually dropped the grin and bit his lip.
"Actually no," He said slowly, "there is one more thing I wanted to ask you." He started to grow nervous as a knot built up in his stomach.
"What?" Nova asked genuinely curious.
"What are you going to do after all of this?" Sparx began to fiddle idly with his controls, trying to look busy. "Ya know, after the war. If we actually win that is."
"What?" Nova asked confused. "What are you talking-"
"I think I want to continue racing, you know off of Shugazoom." Sparx continued on quickly. "Like head back to my old coach and see if I can't get back into the circuit again."
Nova blinked a few times, she honestly had no idea where this was going. "What does that have to do with-"
"Cause see, I want you to come with me." Sparx rushed on while looking down to hide the blush creeping into his cheeks. Nova stopped, mouth agape and looked at him. She was actually speechless, Where was this coming from? Sparks used this time of her utter shock to quickly to turn on the open line, causing everyone's faces appeared on-screen.
"You guys ready for this?" He asked with a big grin, acting like he hadn't just asked Nova to essentially move off planet with him.
Gibson looked up and actually offered the red simian a smile "Ready as I'll ever be, I suppose." He answered truthfully.
"Well I'm ready to roll!" cheered Otto loudly while throwing a fist in the air. "Jinmay, you ready in communications?"
"Yes, the system is up and running, we have established contact with every sector and worked out the few bugs. Apprently some people couldn't figure out where to put it, but after someone showed Master Offay how you could wear it in your ear, everything was fine. Now everyone is just waiting till you guys give us the signal." She answered fairly calmly, considering they were about to enter the largest battle any of them had ever seen.
"Anytime you're ready, Chiro." Antauri said simply, looking to the leader.
Chiro nodded at the second in command before taking a breath and a moment to gather himself. "Alright then, guys let's get ready for this. As soon as the sun fully passes the horizon, we strike."
.::~::.
The line was shut off and the screens went blank as Nova sighed. How was she suppose to respond to that? It wasn't exactly what she had been expecting when Sparx had first called her up.
But isn't what you wanted? Her a small voice in her head asked, Isn't something like this what you wanted him to say when you told him you loved him?
"I didn't tell him I loved," she growled to no one. "I just said didn't want to lose him."
You said you loved him too much to lose him. The voice countered.
"So? I love everyone too much to lose them, Chiro, Otto, even Jinmay."
Well what did you really think he and everyone else would get from you saying something like that?
"It's just-" Nova struggled to explain how she felt, but the voice just urged her on.
Then you don't really love him?
"No, I didn't exactly say that either, it's just, just-" she struggled for words. In anger, she brought her fist down hard on her seat. She was frustrate and flustered now, two things she really didn't need to be right before battle and now she was getting progressively annoyed and angry at Sparx. How dare he suddenly just throw something like that out at her!
She growled deep in her throat as she thought about how mad she was at him now. Except, instead of the anger growing more, it actually started to subside and started to be replaced by... curiosity? Did he really mean it? Did he really want her to go with him if they survived the war? She considered this thought while thinking more on the proposition. It was pretty obvious what he was implying if she agreed to go with him, Sparx had never really been subtle about his feelings towards her, even if he had never actually gathered up the courage to tell her. The question was how did she feel about him? And she knew what was stopping her from really deciding, she was still afraid of him. She still had that scar he had given her just a few days prior and she still felt the pain of almost losing him.
"So basically, I don't want to lose him and I don't want to get hurt again." She sighed while cradling her head between her hands. "I miss the good old days when everything was simple and we all just fought weekly monsters together." She set her head back against her seat with her eyes closed and sighed.
"And I really hate the trick he pulled with the intercom."
Meanwhile in the other foot of the Robot, while Nova struggled with her own thoughts and feelings, Otto tried to clear his head of everything, get rid of all the thoughts flying around and focus. Anything that might have to do with Nova, Sparx, he couldn't afford think about that now. He had work to do and there was a battle minutes away. Like he told himself over and over, it was just a small crush and he should be happy for Sparx and Nova, and he was most definitely not jealous of them. Nope, no way, not at all. He continued to tell himself this as the small screen to his left suddenly flipped on and showed an orbit path of outer space Shugazoom.
Weird, I didn't turn that on- He thought to himself before stopping mid-sentence and actually registering what he was seeing on the screen. Oh no way...
.::~::.
Nova made up her mind, she would tell Sparx her decision before the battle, let him sit on that while they fought their greatest enemy. She flipped her own switch for Sparx's private line.
"Hey Sparx-" She started say before the words caught in her throat. He looked up at her and smiled and she felt her stomach tighten as he answered sweetly.
"Yes Nova?" He gave a radiant smile which she thought was supposed to be charming or something but just made her face burn. That cocky attitude of his made her furious and she just hated him for it!
Though she also kinda loved him for it. She took a deep breath before continuing. "Listen I-"
"Guys!" Otto suddenly interrupted, "There's something you need to see!"
"Otto!" Gibson started, "We don't care what the hilarious video you just found is, we need to focus on that battle at hand."
"No, it's not that," Otto yelled while violently shaking his head before stopping and bringing his hand up to his chin. "Thought actually there is this one with a really cute cat in it…"
"Otto, continue on with the actual urgent matter please." Antauri said calculatedly.
"Oh right! Well anyways I was just sittin' here when my-oniter ca-on an-ere wa-a biff!" Otto tried to explain as the video feed skipped for Jinmay.
"A what? Otto slow down!" Jinmay said while griping the communicator in her ear, "I can't -derst-nd -ou! The co-munica-ons are -oing ou-." she finished just before it was lost in a sea of static.
"What's going on?" Chiro said frantically, he did not have time for this. "Jinmay can you hear us?"
"Look!" Sparx brought the teams attention to their screens, luckily the Super Robot's internal communications system was working but more importantly, he was indicating everyone to look in front of the robot. Skeleton King's Army had just arrived.
"Scrap." Chiro mumbled under his breath. "Jinmay, Do we have any communication with the other forces?" The silence on other end of the line answered for him. "We really are in trouble now."
Nova gasped, "What is that?" she asked suddenly indicating everyone to look skyward. In the brightening morning light, a streak of light had appeared on the still darkened horizon from which Skeleton King's forces were arriving.
"That's what I've been trying to tell you, radar picked up something coming in." Otto rushed to explain "And it's coming in fast."
"How could the radar pick up something so tiny," Gibson inquired while leaning forward to get a better look at his own screen. "A meteor that small should have burned up as it entered the atmosphere."
"Because," Otto explained quickly, almost bouncing in his seat with excitement. "That's not the only thing it picked up.
"It picked up a distress signal with it."
"A distress signal?" Nova echoed. "You mean to tell me that thing is a ship?"
"Can you make out what it's saying?" Chiro asked, still keeping an eye on both the growing light and approaching enemy.
"No, but I looked it's frequency is identical to the one I used for the ear pieces." Otto explained. "That's why we lost contact with Jinmay, the static should stop when that thing lands."
"Or crashes." Sparx pointed out while looking closely at his screen. "There is no way someone is in control of that vehicle, coming in at that speed, when they hit the ground it's gonna be a rough landing."
"And where exactly would that land?" Antauri asked wearily.
"Right on top of…" Gibson said while calculating quickly before gasping, "The enemy."
"It's gonna land on Skeleton King?!" Chiro asked excitedly.
"According to my calculations, yes." Gibson stated while double checking.
"What should we do?" Chiro asked glancing between the Skeleton King army and the quickly enlarging light.
"Let it hit 'em!" Nova yelled. "They'll get what's coming to 'em!"
"I don't think we have time to stop it if we decided to." Antauri said simply. "Besides, we shouldn't take a miracle for granted." He looked at Chiro regarding this last comment but said nothing, causing him to blushed slightly.
In seconds though, the fiery ball had grown almost double in size. Wow, thought Chiro, Otto wasn't joking when he said- The space craft crashed right into Skeleton King's army, obliterating everything around it.
"Monkey Doodle." Sparx gasped, or maybe he yelled it, the resulting explosion was so loud, it sounded like a whisper to Chiro's ear. A gigantic crater appeared, were only seconds before, approached almost certain doom. Half of the enemy was wiped out in that single blast. Everyone sat in shocked silence as they watched the ensuing chaos. They saw Skeleton King yelling and could only imagine what he was saying, probably nothing appropriate for someone as young as Chiro to hear, as he hit Mandarin on the head and turned around, stomping around his bony throne.
Then he started to walk away.
"No Way" Chiro whispered. "He can't be…"
"Retreat!" the Skeleton King yelled at his minions. "We must make more reinforcements! Retreat!" The team sat in stunned silence for a few seconds, then they erupted in cheers. They couldn't believe their luck, they now had a chance! They could strike him while he was down and-
Nova suddenly noticed Otto wasn't cheering along with them, in fact, he was looking very intently at the wreck. "Otto, what's wrong?" she asked laughing. "We won the battle!"
"They're still trapped inside." He said simple, standing up quickly.
"Who are-" Nova tried to stammer out in the few seconds it took Otto to ejected from the Robot and start to fly towards the mangled wreck that had once been a space craft.
Alright guys, now I went and rewrote this Chapter (Now for third time) so there should be a lot less spelling errors and it flows a bit better. Go to the next Chapter to read about the title character!
R&R!
I actually like how this 3rd rewrite turned out, I think it flows a lot better now and is just a general improvement on the previous version. I'm sure there are still some errors and it is certainly not perfect, but I fixed a whole lot of Out of character moments that plagued it before and really tried to cut out the fluff. I think there is a lot more Character Development now and it is setting up for even more in the later chapters. It's also almost 3 times longer than it originally was, yikes.