Short NaruHina. Not so good. Some OOC-ness. One of my first fanfictions, made way back in the early days.
I walked towards Fathers office. I was a little scared, what was so important that I had to postpone a mission with my team for? "Hanabi-chan, w-what exactly d-did father want to speak about?" Oh why did I always have to be so nervous! Hanabi slowly opened the doors and I nearly squeaked. Father had a very serious look on his face and Neji-nii-san was there too. I gulped and stepped in.
"W-what is it that y-you wanted to sp-speak about F-father?" I said shyly. Oh God now I could tell how serious the situation was. "Hinata, please take a seat." His low voice was more commanding than asking. I slowly moved towards one of the chairs in front of his desk. As I sat down, he spoke again. "Hinata, do you know why I called you here?" "No, F-father." "Do you know why you are always so afraid to speak your mind?" "No F-father. But I think it is because I'm so shy." He paused there. He wasn't thinking, he just took the moment to glare at me. He sighed, and spoke to me again.
"Hinata, I'm saying you are weak and a disgrace to the family. We, the Hyuuga are the most powerful clan in all of Konoha. Yet, you do not live up to our standards. You are unworthy and therefore can no longer live in this house as a Hyuuga." I've always known this; I've known that I was the weakest, that I was always a burden. I knew how my father thought of me, but just hearing this made me angry. I felt rage come out of me from nowhere, like it had been bubbling inside of me for a long time.
I couldn't hold it back any longer. I stood up immediately from my chair. "YEAH, WELL I'M JUST AS GLAD I GET TO LEAVE THIS PLACE! THE HYUUGA ARE CRUEL! I'VE WASTED MY ENTIRE LIFE JUST TRYING TO LIVE UP TO YOUR EXPECTIONS, BUT YOU GOING TO THROW ME OUT OF THIS HOUSE, JUST LIKE YOU DID WITH MOTHER!" I ran out, slamming the door behind me.
"Neji go after her". "Yes Uncle".
It was dark outside. But still, I ran as fast I could. I couldn't think, I just ran out of the house and past the gardens. Past the Hokage building. By now, I think I ran all the way to the other side of Konoha. There I stopped walked into an alleyway. I pounded my fist against the wall and broke down.
I cried, more than ever before. I always knew this day would come, but I just can't help but cry. I had just been banished by my own family! I felt so angry. I heard footsteps behind. I turned and saw Neji. "Go away, I'm fine!" But, I wasn't. Tears were pouring down my face. He put his hand on my shoulder, but I wriggled it off. "Hinata, right now isn't the time. It's dangerous, come back to the house, rest, then you are free to go." "
"I'll be fine!"
He stayed silent after that. "Should I leave?" He said calmly. It sounded more like he was questioning himself instead of me. "Go" I replied coldly. "Neji, I'll take care of her from here."
We both turned to see a blond ninja looking at us. "Go away Naruto-kun, I don't want you to see me like this." "Where did you come from?" Neji glared at him. He didn't want me with Naruto. "I heard crying, so I came to see what it was."
"Look she can stay the night at my place, and I'll help her look for a new apartment in the morning, alright?" What? He was he fighting? For me?
"Alright, but if you try anything, you're dead meat. Got that Uzumaki?" Neji growled, Naruto nodded, then took my hand and led me into the building with him. I was jealous of Naruto; he had no one to boss him around. But I was glad; Naruto was showing that he cared for me. We went up a few flights of stairs; we arrived in front of his door.
Strangely it wasn't as messy as I expected, but it was still kind of a mess. There were clothes left thrown about, and there was half-eaten ramen on his desk. Naruto blushed when he saw looking around his room. "You can use the bathroom if you wish." He finally said after a while.
I nodded and went to wash my face. By the time I came out, the ramen was thrown away and he had managed to fold (I think) and put away most of his clothes. 'Wow that's fast' I thought.
He got about to making a mattress on the floor. "You can have the bed," he said quietly, his voice barely above a whisper. Before I could argue, he had already rushed into the bathroom, his pj's in his hand. I quietly went over and sat on his bed. It was very comfy and soft. I took of my jacket and finally decided to get some rest. I thought I stay up all night thinking, but I fell asleep the next second.
"Good morning Hinata!" I opened my eyes to see Naruto above, with his usual goofy grin painted on his face. He had already changed into his normal clothes. I blushed a little and sat up. I went to the bathroom to wash my face, while Naruto went to make some breakfast.
I came out to see two bowls of ramen on his desk. I blushed a little. 'He even eats ramen for breakfast?' I thought.
We quickly finished the food and went to look for a new apartment for me. After a few hours of walking around Konoha, we had finally chosen one and we were walking up the stairs right now. It was a few blocks away from Naruto's apartment building. We came to a stop in front of the door. I turned to face Naruto and leaned against the door a little. "Thank you for everything Naruto-kun."
"It's the least I could do; after all you are one of my best friends!" He ended the sentence with another grin. Then he leaned forward and kissed my cheek.
Hinata fainted and Naruto caught her. He propped her up against the wall and fished the keys out of her pocket. He unlocked the door to the new apartment and set her down on her bed. He placed the keys on her bedside table and closed the door behind him – with a smile on his face.
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Naruto (c) Masashi Kishimoto