POKEMON ORANGE STORY OF DOOM
First of all I do not own pokemon or any other stuff I only own my OC's and the story line
This is my first pokemon fanfic and I'm not sure if it's going to be any good, so please constructive criticism only.
Chapter 1
"Yes, the new Pokemon game just came out they say its gotten brand new Pokemon" said Aurora, "I must have it!" Just then she saw Alice,her twin sister, walking into the store. She ran to catch up. When she got to the store there was only one copy of the game left. She quickly bought the game. Then she talked to Alice on the way home. When she got home a storm had come and they hadn't even noticed it. They rushed inside Aurora went upstairs and checked to see if her nintendo DS had finished charging. It had, so the first thing she did was trade her Tepig into her Pokemon Chaos Black game and her Dialga to her Pokemon orange game. Just then some lightning struck their cable. There was a flash of brightness and all of a sudden they were in a forest that looked suspiciously like the safari zone but everything was bigger than they remembered. When they got up, Alice yelled "Aurora where are you?"
"Alice, I'm right here" she said.
Alice screamed, "aaah Glaceon!"
"What? Where?"
Aurora looked around and saw Crabbys, Jolteons and Butterfrees. She screamed "Aahh! Pokemon they're everywhere." She looked where Alice had been.
There was a Persian there. She looked down and saw blue paws screamed "Aauu I'm the Glacion."
Sorry about the typos and the short and boring chapter I will try to make the rest more exciting. Once again please constructive criticisms only.