This is my real first chapter I hope you like it.
In a small town on a large island mainly covered in forest filled with dangerous wolves, territorial bears, and sneaky monkeys. A man and woman run from the small desolate town. Upon closer inspection you would see a rather torn looking pregnant woman in a patchy gray dress, and a rather tall man wearing beige pants and shirt. They run along a small downtrodden path leading to a tree with ropes on it. the man says rather out of breath
"This can't be the only solution I can't live without you my love. Ingvildr isn't there another way we could just get rid of the children. Tell everyone they were hiccups and we sent them to die on the ocean. We would be forgiven then and Odin the all-father won't punish us for relieving the village of these mistakes."
The now identified Ingvildr responds "This is the only way for us to truly be free."
"Oh Ingvildr we need to think this over if we go threw with this we won't be allowed into valhalla."
" Tòfi you do not have to go with-"
" Wha- How could you even say that? I LOVE YOU! I could never leave you. Even if I am forever doomed to helheim I will never leave you."
Suddenly Ingvildr stops running looking at Tòfi. "You are more than I could have ever ask for Tòfi". Looking into each others eyes Ingvildr kisses Tòfi. As they part Ingvildr says "I am still the luckiest woman in all of midgard. No matter how this will end".
"You are really a romantic huh. Let's get this over with love".
They begin to jog along the decrepit path towards the tree.
As they make it to the tree Tòfi gets nervous. " Can't we just put this off for another week please Ingvildr" He says in his most convincing pleading voice.
" No we can't we've already put it off for eight months it should be done now this is as close as we can cut it love".
" I know, I know i'm just nervous.*sigh* You ready to meet Odin."
" Yes, let's get this over with".
Ingvildr pulls a rope from her innocuous bag on her waist. Tòfi sighs and takes the rope. He begins to climb up the infamous tree with the poison berries surrounding it. He took a long time trying to pick a branch that was sturdy enough for what they planned to do. He decided on the one with multiple smaller and oddly firm branches jutting from it. Making sure the rope can still be moved if pulled or relieved enough before climbing down the tree.
Tòfi stands back looking at his handy work in the significantly more menacing tree. Remembering walking past this tree in his childhood and looking to it with morbid curiosity instead of unrelenting disdain and fear. In his musings on past he can't help but wonder how the seemingly dead tree was still so large with it's branches still encroaching on the sky. As if all the death it's seen has kept it going and refusing to submit to anyone even itself with it's large cracking trunch that never dies but always appears to get worse.
Suddenly he is thrown from his thoughts on the tree to the present feeling his love embrace him for her final time.
Ingvildr starts crying " I'll miss you Tòfi. Promise it won't take you long to join me. Whether I am in Valhalla or Helheim".
Accepting her embrace and silently telling her that everything will be okay and that he will never truly leave her. having an unspoken conversation. Then she leaves his embrace and looks longingly into his eyes before she begins to climb the tree. He attempts to help her but she refuses and perceivers to the branch the rope is on. Tieing the rope into a noose and placing it around her neck before taking her final look to her beloved Tòfi.
Understanding what she wanted he went to the other end of the rope and secured it ti the ground. Before going to give her the signal that he finished, He headed to the poison berry bushes grabbing a handful putting half of them in his sheath for his dagger while putting it back in it's place. Walking to the front of the tree he gives her the signal showing she is ready to go. She gives him a smile and then falls back.
The rope kept in it's place secure and killing her instantly when her weight was fully put down upon the rope. The immediate silence after the is act was defining. The only sound willing to penetrate the gloomy air left upon Tòfi was the sound of her body taking it's last breath. Tòfi couldn't bare to look any longer crash to his knees in despair at his love's demise. Only looking up when he heard a disgusting squishing sound coming from the tree. As he looks up he sees the children that they were killing themselves to make sure weren't born. Were leaving her corpse in the most horrifying manor. He could only watch as four of these children no beast left her dead body. taken from his stupor by the crying of two of the babies.
Tòfi stands looking to the wee babes that left Ingvildr in disgust. "You are why my love has left me for now. I hope you die of starvation and frostbite. Now it's time for me to join Ingvildr".
Tòfi takes out the half of the poison berries he didn't put in his dagger sheath and eats them. For good measure he takes out his dagger and stabs himself with the poisoned blade getting as close to the heart as he can. Just barely getting his heart Tòfi dies his last thoughts being about his excitement about being able to see Ingvildr again. Then his body falls.
The four babies that were birthed by Ingvildr were two boys and two girls. One of the boys dying immediately after birth because of the impact he had with the ground which broke his ribs and caused them to immediately puncture his heart causing him to die immediately. The other three babies managed to survive the birth despite all odds managed to survive birth. One of the babies a girl was being eerily quiet while the other two a boy and a girl began to cry. From the pain of the impact with the ground as well as hunger and the cold of the area.
That's the end of my first chapter I know it's a bit morbid. But it is the way I wanted to start my story. In future chapters you will be able to tell who the main character is for these parts of the story. I hope you enjoy the story later on. The next two or three chapters will be about my OC. I will have a chapter on when Hiccup's mom get's taken. I do want to know if I should integrate him growing up. I know i'm getting repetitive but this story is important to me and I want to be able to write it and have people enjoy it. I am very passionate for this story so please GIVE ME FEEDBACK.
Please give constructive criticism. This story will start very focused on my OC, This will be a running away story. It will show her growing up and integrating into Hiccups running away story. I will integrate Hiccup when he runs away however I am not sure whether or not to integrate Hiccup as he grows up as well or just from him running away. If I do include Hiccup growing up I would like to integrate it by switching every few chapters between the story of my OC and Hiccup please give me your opinion on that format but also the amount of integration I should do for Hiccup in the beginning chapters. Lastly the current Title is also a working Title I don't have a permanent title yet the same goes for my current summary. Also I will not be updating this story as regularly as Vikings watch httyd. I will be starting another story as well it will be a one-shot but I might consider more of the same type of content so just tell me your thoughts and if I should try to do more of that type of content.
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