Hello, this is hitokiri-9125. I would just like to say I got a FLAME! You know,
peoples this is my first fic so be the least bit kind!
This is what evil (the flamer wrote):
Dammit! motherfucker this is sick! bullshit I tell you! how could you make thi a
t/k fic its wrong shes dead let her die! and the war did not finish till kenshin
was 18 and also you need more detail!
Make it longer! theres no plot in this story whatsoever and this is a piece of
crap. You might be able to save this fic by taking the chapters and making them
more then 1 page long!
A writing I don't care if this is your firsat fic or not always rights atleast 5
pages!
put detail into it? what was kaoru wearing!
What is tomoe wearing!
goddammit learn to write
Ok, so maybe this isn't Shakespeare of J.K. Rowling but hey! Give me some
credit. First of all:
It's my first fic!
Also:
I happen to like Tomoe/Kenshin! If you don't like it, DON'T READ IT! Oh and
another thing *bursts into laughter* wats wif e spelling!
Last of all:
NO NEED FOR ALL THIS DARN FLAMES! GEEZ!
And I'd really like to thank my friend Hanna Engles for helping me out.
Reviews wanted, flamers beware. sigh I KNOW this has no plot. So? Its got
nothing to do wif you lil kaoru fans has it. I'm jus writing this fic cos I want
to. And this is MY version of the reply to the review. I no Its not polite but
who cares…. IT was pretty rude too.
SO WHAT CRAP DO YOU WANT ME TO WRITE! IF YOU DON'T BLOODY LIKE THIS IS IT MY
PROBLEM? I JUST WRITE WAT I WANT TO! I WRITE FOR FUN NOT TO MAKE YOU HAPPY! IF
YOU WANT GO WRITE ONE YOURSELF! AND WHAT KIND OF DESCRIPTIONS DO YOU WANT ME TO
WRITE? I WATCHED IT ON TV A LONG TIME AGO AND MY COLLECTION IS MISSING A DAMN
LOAD OF BOOKS AND EVEN THEN THERES NO COLOUR. WHAT DO YOU EXPECT ME TO DO: BUY
THE VCD FOR REFERENCE? AND WHAT DO YOU EXPECT ME TO WRITE: WHERE THEY GOT THEIR
CLOTHES FROM? HOW THEY TIE THEIR HAIR? WHAT KIND OF COMB THEY USE? HOW'M I GONNA
KNOW THAT!
Oh well and since I page isn't enough… I'm adding it altogether and adding a lot
of descriptions, if it makes it happy…
Disclaimer: Neither Tomoe nor Battousai belong to me *sobsob* I want Battousai…
Tomoe walked into the room where Battousai was sleeping. She smiled, then took
off her shawl (I don't know what the heck it is but I read somewhere that it was
a shawl) and placed it on Battousai's lap. In a flash he drew his sword, nearly
killing her. Seeing who it was, he calmed down and sheathed his sword.
"You'd better leave soon, or I'll kill you one day." He said softly.
"No. I'm going to stay here for a while. A sword needs a sheathe. You're
dangerous like a sword, and you need a sheathe to control you."
"I know the answer to your question." He smiled. "I'll never kill you. Never."
As he thought of what he had said then, tears trickled down his cheeks. She was
the only woman he had ever loved, and he had killed her. He had broken his
promise to her. Guilt overwhelmed him as he held her closer to him, closer, and
cried. If only she had left when he told her to. And yet… considering all that
time they had spent together… Tears slipped down his cheek and fell on hers.
'I can't allow him to do this' Tomoe thought, feeling her life slipping away. 'I
have to live. I don't care. It hurts me so much to see him like this, and it's
all my fault. Akira wanted me to be happy because he loved me. Now I love
Battousai and I want him to be happy too. And seeing the way he is right now…
no. I can't die. I want to live. I want to live the rest of my life with him. I
must.' She could see… a light at the end of a dark tunnel. 'NO! I CAN'T DIE. I
CAN'T LEAVE HIM ALL ALONE IN THAT WORLD I TOLD HIM A SWORD NEEDED A SHEATHE.
WHAT I DIDN'T REALIZE WAS THAT A SHEATHE NEEDED A SWORD TOO! I CAN'T… THE MOST
I'LL DO IS TO STAY HERE. I WON'T GO TOWARDS THAT LIGHT NO MATTER WHAT!' She saw
Akira. He stretched a hand out towards her, smiling, Looking behind, she saw
Battousai's face. Tears streamed down his cheeks as he called her.
"I'm sorry, Akira. I can't leave him yet. Not now. Not ever." She turned away
and took a step towards Battousai.
"I'll never, ever leave you. Ever." She ran towards him, crying, running as fast
as she could, then felt life in her once again. As a spirit she had been so
free, without any worries, without having to drag a heavy body around. She
coughed. Battousai looked down at her. Held her tighter. Then, regaining his
senses, carried her and ran as fast as he could towards the nearest doctor. She
looked up at his tear-stained face, and smiled, wiping the tears off his bloody
face.
"Are you… alright?" she whispered softly. He didn't answer. They reached the
doctor and soon he had stopped the blood from flowing out.
"Never do anything so stupid again." he said. "I don't want to lose you"
" I'm never killing again. I almost killed you the last time and If I kill
anyone again I know how their loved ones would feel and it's painful to lose
someone you love. Instead, I'll find a way to protect you without killing
anyone."
Tomoe looked up and smiled. "I'm just happy I stopped you. So… have you made any
plans? Today Shishio Makoto is taking over you as hitokiri and now everyone
knows that you are the one who killed so many. Furthermore, you've quit. We
can't stay here."
" I guess… but where can we go then?" Kenshin mused. "Maybe let's just wander
around until we find somewhere to stay." Kenshin suggested. "We'll travel all
over Japan… together."
"Why not?" Tomoe smiled at him. "Where shall we go first?"
" Let fate decide." He replied. "You've been smiling so much lately. More than
I've ever seen you smile." Kenshin observed.
"Only because I'm with you." She smiled "So… when are we going?" Tomoe asked
"Tomorrow." Kenshin replied. Together they went to bed, (In case you ppl are
thinking I don't mean TOGETHER.) both dreaming about what the new day would
bring them.
*I'm gonna have to alter the ages and plot a lot here*
After traveling for a year, they had reached Chiba. Seeing how big the place
was, Tomoe and Kenshin decided to split up and find a place to stay for the
night. Kenshin wandered along the street, until he saw a man trying to kill a
girl in a blue kimono. She carried a wooden sword, and was trying to fight him
off. (I can't remember what happened anymore but this is supposed to be Gohei
trying to kill Kaoru.) He ran, and swept the girl off her feet, so that the
man's sword sliced the air.
"YOU LITTLE BRAT!" The man screamed. Kenshin took out his sakabatou and defeated
the man almost instantly with his swift movements.
"Thanks. I'm Kamiya Kaoru. What about you?" Her voice trailed off suddenly as
she fainted suddenly.
"Kamiya, huh?" He walked along the street, and then saw a dojo with Kamiya on
it. "Must be her home," he thought, and carried her in. He placed her on the
floor and sat there, thinking. 'Should I go look for Tomoe now? Or should I wait
for this girl to wake up?' Just then, Kaoru woke up. She froze in fear, then
looked around the room discreetly.
"You're awake." He said.
"Did you save me?" She asked, looking at the cute boy flirtatiously. "Thanks"
she said shyly. "And well… what's your name? I've never seen you in town before…
Where are you from?"
Nonchalantly, he replied "I'm Himura Kenshin, and I'm from Kyoto. I'm a Rurouni,
though. I was just looking for a place to stay in for the night."
"Why don't you stay here? It's the least I can do to thank you for saving me."
She smiled at him.
"Then if you don't mind, can I go look for my erm…friend?" He asked.
"Sure!" was the enthusiastic reply.
'She's got blue eyes,' he thought. 'Really nice blue eyes. Still, Tomoe's eyes,
which are red, reminds me of my vow not to kill ever again. And she doesn't look
that old…'
Kenshin ran out and combed the streets, looking for Tomoe. Finally, he found
her. "I've found a place for us to stay." he panted.
"Great!" Tomoe smiled. "I was just going to give up." They hugged each other
tightly, then, hand in hand, strolled towards the dojo.
"Erm… Tomoe?" Kenshin said uneasily. "I told her you were my friend. I'm only
15, and it's a bit too young to be married for one year."
"It's alright" Tomoe assured him. Together they walked into the dojo.
"Erm… Kaoru dono, this is my friend, Yukishiro Tomoe." Tomoe smiled, then bowed
slightly.
"Thanks for letting us stay here." She said. Kaoru looked at her. She was
certainly beautiful, slim and graceful, with long raven hair and red eyes. She
wore a white kimono (sorry again, I really don't know about what girls wear I
only know they wear kimonos… pls tell me more ok?)
'As long as she's just Kenshin's friend, I have a chance…' Kaoru thought.
Yahiko burst into the room. (erm sorry AGAIN cos Yahiko in my story is Kaoru's
brother. *thinks* Kamiya Yahiko… Ergh) "Where were you, busu!" Yahiko asked.
"Don't call me busu, Yahiko-chan." Kaoru mocked. "oh and the two of you can stay
in this room." She said politely.
R&R, no flames please. I'll think of the next chapter soon k?
peoples this is my first fic so be the least bit kind!
This is what evil (the flamer wrote):
Dammit! motherfucker this is sick! bullshit I tell you! how could you make thi a
t/k fic its wrong shes dead let her die! and the war did not finish till kenshin
was 18 and also you need more detail!
Make it longer! theres no plot in this story whatsoever and this is a piece of
crap. You might be able to save this fic by taking the chapters and making them
more then 1 page long!
A writing I don't care if this is your firsat fic or not always rights atleast 5
pages!
put detail into it? what was kaoru wearing!
What is tomoe wearing!
goddammit learn to write
Ok, so maybe this isn't Shakespeare of J.K. Rowling but hey! Give me some
credit. First of all:
It's my first fic!
Also:
I happen to like Tomoe/Kenshin! If you don't like it, DON'T READ IT! Oh and
another thing *bursts into laughter* wats wif e spelling!
Last of all:
NO NEED FOR ALL THIS DARN FLAMES! GEEZ!
And I'd really like to thank my friend Hanna Engles for helping me out.
Reviews wanted, flamers beware. sigh I KNOW this has no plot. So? Its got
nothing to do wif you lil kaoru fans has it. I'm jus writing this fic cos I want
to. And this is MY version of the reply to the review. I no Its not polite but
who cares…. IT was pretty rude too.
SO WHAT CRAP DO YOU WANT ME TO WRITE! IF YOU DON'T BLOODY LIKE THIS IS IT MY
PROBLEM? I JUST WRITE WAT I WANT TO! I WRITE FOR FUN NOT TO MAKE YOU HAPPY! IF
YOU WANT GO WRITE ONE YOURSELF! AND WHAT KIND OF DESCRIPTIONS DO YOU WANT ME TO
WRITE? I WATCHED IT ON TV A LONG TIME AGO AND MY COLLECTION IS MISSING A DAMN
LOAD OF BOOKS AND EVEN THEN THERES NO COLOUR. WHAT DO YOU EXPECT ME TO DO: BUY
THE VCD FOR REFERENCE? AND WHAT DO YOU EXPECT ME TO WRITE: WHERE THEY GOT THEIR
CLOTHES FROM? HOW THEY TIE THEIR HAIR? WHAT KIND OF COMB THEY USE? HOW'M I GONNA
KNOW THAT!
Oh well and since I page isn't enough… I'm adding it altogether and adding a lot
of descriptions, if it makes it happy…
Disclaimer: Neither Tomoe nor Battousai belong to me *sobsob* I want Battousai…
Tomoe walked into the room where Battousai was sleeping. She smiled, then took
off her shawl (I don't know what the heck it is but I read somewhere that it was
a shawl) and placed it on Battousai's lap. In a flash he drew his sword, nearly
killing her. Seeing who it was, he calmed down and sheathed his sword.
"You'd better leave soon, or I'll kill you one day." He said softly.
"No. I'm going to stay here for a while. A sword needs a sheathe. You're
dangerous like a sword, and you need a sheathe to control you."
"I know the answer to your question." He smiled. "I'll never kill you. Never."
As he thought of what he had said then, tears trickled down his cheeks. She was
the only woman he had ever loved, and he had killed her. He had broken his
promise to her. Guilt overwhelmed him as he held her closer to him, closer, and
cried. If only she had left when he told her to. And yet… considering all that
time they had spent together… Tears slipped down his cheek and fell on hers.
'I can't allow him to do this' Tomoe thought, feeling her life slipping away. 'I
have to live. I don't care. It hurts me so much to see him like this, and it's
all my fault. Akira wanted me to be happy because he loved me. Now I love
Battousai and I want him to be happy too. And seeing the way he is right now…
no. I can't die. I want to live. I want to live the rest of my life with him. I
must.' She could see… a light at the end of a dark tunnel. 'NO! I CAN'T DIE. I
CAN'T LEAVE HIM ALL ALONE IN THAT WORLD I TOLD HIM A SWORD NEEDED A SHEATHE.
WHAT I DIDN'T REALIZE WAS THAT A SHEATHE NEEDED A SWORD TOO! I CAN'T… THE MOST
I'LL DO IS TO STAY HERE. I WON'T GO TOWARDS THAT LIGHT NO MATTER WHAT!' She saw
Akira. He stretched a hand out towards her, smiling, Looking behind, she saw
Battousai's face. Tears streamed down his cheeks as he called her.
"I'm sorry, Akira. I can't leave him yet. Not now. Not ever." She turned away
and took a step towards Battousai.
"I'll never, ever leave you. Ever." She ran towards him, crying, running as fast
as she could, then felt life in her once again. As a spirit she had been so
free, without any worries, without having to drag a heavy body around. She
coughed. Battousai looked down at her. Held her tighter. Then, regaining his
senses, carried her and ran as fast as he could towards the nearest doctor. She
looked up at his tear-stained face, and smiled, wiping the tears off his bloody
face.
"Are you… alright?" she whispered softly. He didn't answer. They reached the
doctor and soon he had stopped the blood from flowing out.
"Never do anything so stupid again." he said. "I don't want to lose you"
" I'm never killing again. I almost killed you the last time and If I kill
anyone again I know how their loved ones would feel and it's painful to lose
someone you love. Instead, I'll find a way to protect you without killing
anyone."
Tomoe looked up and smiled. "I'm just happy I stopped you. So… have you made any
plans? Today Shishio Makoto is taking over you as hitokiri and now everyone
knows that you are the one who killed so many. Furthermore, you've quit. We
can't stay here."
" I guess… but where can we go then?" Kenshin mused. "Maybe let's just wander
around until we find somewhere to stay." Kenshin suggested. "We'll travel all
over Japan… together."
"Why not?" Tomoe smiled at him. "Where shall we go first?"
" Let fate decide." He replied. "You've been smiling so much lately. More than
I've ever seen you smile." Kenshin observed.
"Only because I'm with you." She smiled "So… when are we going?" Tomoe asked
"Tomorrow." Kenshin replied. Together they went to bed, (In case you ppl are
thinking I don't mean TOGETHER.) both dreaming about what the new day would
bring them.
*I'm gonna have to alter the ages and plot a lot here*
After traveling for a year, they had reached Chiba. Seeing how big the place
was, Tomoe and Kenshin decided to split up and find a place to stay for the
night. Kenshin wandered along the street, until he saw a man trying to kill a
girl in a blue kimono. She carried a wooden sword, and was trying to fight him
off. (I can't remember what happened anymore but this is supposed to be Gohei
trying to kill Kaoru.) He ran, and swept the girl off her feet, so that the
man's sword sliced the air.
"YOU LITTLE BRAT!" The man screamed. Kenshin took out his sakabatou and defeated
the man almost instantly with his swift movements.
"Thanks. I'm Kamiya Kaoru. What about you?" Her voice trailed off suddenly as
she fainted suddenly.
"Kamiya, huh?" He walked along the street, and then saw a dojo with Kamiya on
it. "Must be her home," he thought, and carried her in. He placed her on the
floor and sat there, thinking. 'Should I go look for Tomoe now? Or should I wait
for this girl to wake up?' Just then, Kaoru woke up. She froze in fear, then
looked around the room discreetly.
"You're awake." He said.
"Did you save me?" She asked, looking at the cute boy flirtatiously. "Thanks"
she said shyly. "And well… what's your name? I've never seen you in town before…
Where are you from?"
Nonchalantly, he replied "I'm Himura Kenshin, and I'm from Kyoto. I'm a Rurouni,
though. I was just looking for a place to stay in for the night."
"Why don't you stay here? It's the least I can do to thank you for saving me."
She smiled at him.
"Then if you don't mind, can I go look for my erm…friend?" He asked.
"Sure!" was the enthusiastic reply.
'She's got blue eyes,' he thought. 'Really nice blue eyes. Still, Tomoe's eyes,
which are red, reminds me of my vow not to kill ever again. And she doesn't look
that old…'
Kenshin ran out and combed the streets, looking for Tomoe. Finally, he found
her. "I've found a place for us to stay." he panted.
"Great!" Tomoe smiled. "I was just going to give up." They hugged each other
tightly, then, hand in hand, strolled towards the dojo.
"Erm… Tomoe?" Kenshin said uneasily. "I told her you were my friend. I'm only
15, and it's a bit too young to be married for one year."
"It's alright" Tomoe assured him. Together they walked into the dojo.
"Erm… Kaoru dono, this is my friend, Yukishiro Tomoe." Tomoe smiled, then bowed
slightly.
"Thanks for letting us stay here." She said. Kaoru looked at her. She was
certainly beautiful, slim and graceful, with long raven hair and red eyes. She
wore a white kimono (sorry again, I really don't know about what girls wear I
only know they wear kimonos… pls tell me more ok?)
'As long as she's just Kenshin's friend, I have a chance…' Kaoru thought.
Yahiko burst into the room. (erm sorry AGAIN cos Yahiko in my story is Kaoru's
brother. *thinks* Kamiya Yahiko… Ergh) "Where were you, busu!" Yahiko asked.
"Don't call me busu, Yahiko-chan." Kaoru mocked. "oh and the two of you can stay
in this room." She said politely.
R&R, no flames please. I'll think of the next chapter soon k?