This is my first attempt so please don't crucify me but honest and respectful criticism is appreciated. I managed to map out the entire story already so just need to find not how to word it. As long as it appear people are liking it I will update regularly.
Like everyone else I don't own Inuyasha or any of their characters and just writing this for fun.
As Maru approached Naraku's castle, his hand gripped the summons Kagura delivered to him instructing him that if he wanted his younger brother Oro return to him safely and not in pieces he should arrive at the castle by night fall and do exactly as Naraku says. Maru had been the current Northern Snake Tribe Leader for the past 200 years. He was a snake demon with an immense yokai aura about him. He had the tail of a snake that extended 10 feet past his massive 6 foot standing form. The top of his tail was jet black with a silver swirl marking running down it's length and extending the intricate black and silver pattern up his back. The underside of his tail and his chest were a smoky grey color. His hands and forearms were were jet black with razor sharp silver nails on each finger. Black and silver snake tattoos encircled his biceps with the black snakes running up his shoulders and the heads ending on his chest, while the silver snakes wrapped around to his back. Maru had black hair with blue ends that fell to his shoulders and swept around his face framing his yellow eyes making them appear to glow against the shiny black locks.
"I can't believe that damn Naraku. How dare he take Oro and use him against me like this. He will not get away with trying to manipulate the Northern Snake tribe. I will teach that damn Half Breed to learn his place in this world. And I will take my brother back."
Maru turned his back to Naraku's castle and faced the 6 vipers he brought with him tonight. "You understand what is required right," he said as he let his heated glare land on each snake in turn. "You are to sneak into the castle and find that damn Naraku and attack that Son of A….", Maru cut off as his fist clenched and his fangs began to dig into his lower lip drawing blood and his yokai aura began to flare causing the vipers to slide backwards to get away from the animus evil aura encroaching on them. "GO. NOW. And you better not fail me or I will have your HEADS!" With that he cracked his aura at the vipers to hasten their departure into the castle grounds to find their intended target.
"I swear by all that is unholy you will not survive this night Naraku" And with that Maru proceeded to slink towards the dark castle surrounded in Miasma.