This is my first fanfiction and I'm nervous that it's not that good. I know that I'm not the best writer and so I would really appreciate any and all feedback. I'm doing this story only in the hopes of improving my writing. I'm also looking for a beta reader if any are interested. This story is supposed to be set during the 7th book when Voldomort enters the minds of everyone in the castle. My own spin on that turn of events, this is supposed to be sort of like the game Clue.
Chapter 1
"Harry potter you have allowed your friends to die for you. Now you must kill them yourself if you wish to live" Voldemorts voice rang in Harry's head loud and sinister.
'What does he mean kill my friends' Harry thought in confusion then suddenly he was no longer in the great hall. He looked around him in bewilderment; the room seemed to shimmer. He now stood alone in a dark room, candles in every corner. A moment later people appeared all around him. Ron, Hermione, Ginny, Neville, and Luna shimmered into appearance.
"Harry what's happening? Where are we?" Ron asked in high pitched tone
"I-im not sure" Harry said pulling out his wand. "Lumos" Harry whispered, the other five followed suite. A head piercing laugh rang throughout their heads making Luna drop her wand to cover her ears.
"Is anyone up for a game?" laughed the voice of Tom Riddle. "One of you is an imposter. I have planted a death eater in your midst that has orders to kill you all. If you want to live you must kill the imposter, this is the game."
"Fight us face to face if you're not to coward!" Neville shouted out
"Just as ignorant as your parent's Longbottom, I hope your death is excruciating. When one has the elder wand it is no longer fun to just kill. That is much too simple, no; I much prefer to watch you all suffer. Death is too easy. Harry, I suggest you start off by killing that red head over there, she looks much too innocent. " Those were the last words they heard before every light in the room vanished.
"I can't see anything" Hermione screamed
"Everyone we need to stay calm, this is an allusion of some kind. We jus-" Harry's words wore cut off by a scream that filled the air.
A loud snap came from Harry's right, then the sound of a body dropping to the floor. The screams stopped and Harry's heart seemed to freeze. His wand was gripped so tightly in his hand it was a wonder that it was not broken. He fervently whispered spells for light but his wand did not respond. He dropped to the floor searching for something or someone. A warm liquid touched his hands. He gazed around slowly and realized he was in the middle of a pool of blood, and it was a sickening realization that the blood did not belong to him. He needed to know who had screamed, which one of his friends had died for him this time. The candles on the walls flashed with light and he looked down at his reddened hands, too afraid to look up. A body laid cold and dead on the floor in front of him a knife in her throat. Bile rose in his throat as panic threatened to overtake his mind.
"Luna!" screamed Neville
Neville gazed down at Luna and it shook Harry's very soul as he watched him scream. The raw kind of scream that caused goose bumps to rise on skin and hairs on the back of your neck to stand tall in fright. Everyone in the room was crying, but Neville was beyond tears.
"Luna you can't be dead, I need you! I love you! Luna please!"
"Oh my I must say that I never expected this to come from you Neville. She is pretty, to bad she had to die so young. Look at the bright side at least she didn't end up like your parents, less than human. You should be thankful for that" Voldomort's voice sang cheerfully.
"We must ignore him, he is trying to divide us" Hermione voice came out choked. She shakily walked to Luna's dead body. She kneeled and closed the dead blue eyes of Luna Lovegood. Neville looked up with murder in his eyes.
"Don't you dare touch her you mudblood! Was it you! I bet you're the fake, you don't even look like Hermione!" Neville pulled out his wand and directed at her.
"Neville calm down" Hermione backed up slowly reaching for her wand in her pocket.
"Don't even think about it or I will kill you" Neville bit out.
"Think about what you're saying, just put the wand down!" Ron said pushing Hermione behind him.
"Neville please" said Ginny. She walked towards him and very gently touched his arm. Neville's hand trembled for a moment before he lowered it in defeat. The room stood still for a moment then Harry got up and offered a hand to Neville. Neville didn't take the hand but he did get up.
"What are we supposed to do now?" Ginny barely whispered
"Well I was thinking that we should find out which one of us is the imposter." Said a familiar voice from the door way. They all looked behind them to find Draco Malfoy leaning against a doorway which had appeared out of nowhere twirling a wand in his hand.
"I think I found us our death eater" snarled Ron
"Why are you here?" Harry asked raising his wand
"That is an excellent question." Draco said casually.
