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Max POV
Why are we still here, I think to myself we should have left Anne's weeks ago. Here at school I have to face one of my biggest fears nine times a day Crowds.
5...4...3...2...1...RING!
I'm visibly shaken as I climb out of my chair and walk towards the door. One foot outside the door and I start to feel dizzy.
I keep walking, trying to get to the cafeteria as the art room doors spring open, and kids start running out.
I look around and their is no way out people seemed to be running in circles around me.
I collapsed, the walls started coming together and the room started to get darker.
I just cried I didn't care who saw me, I was falling apart right there in the hallway and then their was Fang.
Angel POV
I wounder were Max and Fang are there usually the first ones here trying to get ahead of the crowd.
I,ll go find them Iggy said walking towards the cafeteria doors, they must have flying got held back for some reason.
WAIT IGGY!
Max is having a meltdown, Fangs taking care of it.
Fang POV
Max?
Max are you okay?
I sit down next to Max who has curled herself up in a ball in the middle of the main hallway.
She looked so helpless, vulnerable, I hated every second of it.
I picked Max up and walked right through the front doors of the school, ignoring the looks some of the other kids gave me.
I stopped in front of the park, about 3 blocks from Anne's.
"Shh shh its okay Max", she was still shivering from the shock of not being able to stay strong.
"No, its not" she whimpers, "I just broke down" she looks down at what shes about to say "I'm weak".
"Max your not weak, you've just been strong for to long"
"Look at me" I whisper while lifting her head "you're the strongest person I know".
And with that, the world shut down, and the next thing I knew, I leaned down and kissed her, my best friend, my Max.
Thanks for reading, I'm begging you to review please.
-Emma