EVERYTHING WRONG WITH
Pokemon World Our World
Spoilers!
(duh)
"There are two worlds in the universe, or two dimensions in the universe."
We've just started this story and already I'm calling bullsh*t. Ding
"Our world and the Pokemon world were both very different in continents and creatures.
Thank you Captain Obvious. Ding
"But few people were about to discover that there is another world besides there's."
This was just a sign of the bad grammar to come in this story. Trust me, it gets worse. Ding
"There is a gang with 4members; Ash, Brock, Misty and May."
Misty and May have never traveled any region together. Sure they have met up, but they have never explored together. Ding
"Everyone was calm from both worlds until both of their worlds started to shake violently. Thunder clouds appeared and everything was acting weird like TVs and radios were going berserk due to the frequency of the events."
I'm fairly certain that if something like this happened it would be declared a national emergency. Ding
"No one knew what was going on all they did was run."
Finally in a fanfiction where mysterious portals open the characters don't just stand their like morons. Ding
"Then a few people from our world were sucked in some void and were sent to a place they have never seen or believed in before."
No, not the pokemon world like the title suggests, some strange middle universe that makes no sense. Ding
"Ohh what is happening?"
Author makes it seem like we don't know, even though we most likely know. Ding
"I know this chappie was short but I tried to make it as interesting as possible and just introducing things"
And you sir, have failed.
"I will update soon"
Get used to that line people. It will get REALLY annoying later on. ding
Chapter Sin Tally:9
Sentence: To be Updated Soon
*I had this idea in mind for a while now, so what do you guys think? I have always wanted to do a fanfic version of cinema sins. Did it work? Or should I stop? Later!