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Rose
We were sent through the portal and straight into the city, I stood up still clutching Lissa's hand; I could tell she was pretty shaken up from the trip. I steadied her and ensured she was okay as Clary came flying through the portal along with Isabelle, Jace and Christian, I felt Lissa's mood lighten considerably as soon as Christian had landed safely. She reached out to him and laced her hand through his. I turned to survey our little group and noticed the scowl on Jace's face, no doubt from me forcing him to bring 'downworlders' into his precious city, what was up with that anyway? My conditions were reasonable, if the clave wanted to speak to me they were going to do it on my terms, and while Dmitri was still in hospital that meant I wasn't leaving Lissa's side for anyone. Before I could finish my thought, Christian's guardian came hurtling clumsily through the portal almost wiping out Lissa in the process, I rolled my eyes as I pulled her out of the way. Finally Alec stepped casually and gracefully through, as I remember Jace and Isabelle had, must come with practice I decided.
Once everyone was safely through the portal and Christian's guardian had finally stopped throwing up, Jace swiftly announced that we would be leaving, with no attempt to hide the annoyance in his voice. I took a moment to really look at Jace, he was gorgeous, and there was no denying it. Arrogant though, very arrogant, far too self-absorbed for my taste but maybe fun to tease. A smile trickled across my lip with that thought as we continued to the house of their cousins.
As we walked I took the time to really observe our shadow hunter "friends" the only one I had even heard of before today was Alec and although he seemed nice enough I was still wary. I turned first to Isabelle, she reminded me strangely of a moroi, so pale and skinny and very, very pretty in that runway model kind of way. I almost felt jealous before reminding myself of the curves I had that she couldn't dream of matching. Although our hair was strikingly similar, she had commented earlier on how it was strange amongst my kind to have such long hair considering that most women had it cut short in order to showcase their molnija tattoos. Of course mine sat in a tight bun for that very purpose, to show off my impressive collection of 12, that's right 12! I was now tying with Dmitri but for my age it was outstanding which I reminded him of at every opportunity. A smirk touched my lips as I turned back to the task at hand.
Clary was next; she was absolutely stunning although she didn't know it, but I can assure you she was most definitely the only one. Beautiful red hair with a pale complexion that suited the soft but reckless look she seemed to always have, she wore her hair out flowing down her back and she looked kick-ass in her fight gear. I skipped over Alec and turned back to Jace the most interesting thing about Jace was his marks. Shadow hunters wore runes much like we wore our Molnija although of course they didn't count any kind of death toll and the intricate patterns covering Jace's body were far more intriguing than a few simple tattoos on the back of someone's neck.
I sighed and continued the silent trek towards the mysterious house; I glanced back at Lissa once more to make sure she was doing okay, and noticed that Christian's guardian was walking right beside them. I rolled my eyes in spite of myself and smiled half-heartedly. I may be overprotective but at least I don't get in there make-out space...Yuk!
Jace
I could feel Roses gaze on me the whole time we were walking, or maybe I was just paranoid, or maybe it's just what I wanted to believe. Whatever. We finally reached the house and I ascended the short flight of stairs before knocking on the door. "Who is it?" Aline called out mockingly.
I smirked before replying "the pizza guy, who do you think it is?" she giggled in response before throwing open the door and scanning all of us her eyes pausing upon Lissa, her boyfriend and his Guardian before finally resting upon Rose where they stayed as her face lit up with an animated smile. She stepped forward and pulled Rose into a big hug and I let out a chuckle before I could stop myself. Rose's expression changed from surprise to amusement as she politely pried my cousin off her.
I cleared my throat expectantly earning me an elbow to the ribs from Aline before she began gushing introductions. "Oh I'm just so excited to finally meet a ...well you know"
"Dhampire?" offered rose with the smug look of amusement still on her face. Aline nodded excitedly before the other guardian finally spoke up "she isn't the only one here you know" he stated with annoyance clear in his voice, before Aline could even open her mouth in response a loud voice echoed through the house.
"Are you guys coming in or what?" and I couldn't stop myself from grinning. Sebastian.
Rose
I heard a voice call from inside "are you guys coming in or not?" A massive grin consumed Jace's face and I immediately stopped myself from noticing. I was already working with Dmitri (although he still insisted we could never be together) and I really didn't need another complicated guy to obsess over. Most girls were content with one! We started to head in all smiling and laughing with Aline still gushing about how fantastic this all was, until I finally spotted the owner of the mysterious voice from before. Standing in the kitchen with a relaxed smile on his face was a seriously hot guy! Shaggy black hair, tall without being lanky and his eyes were just so...no Rose no, you don't need another guy.
As we entered the room Jace finally spoke up "good to see you cousin" which was met with a lot of enthusiasm as Mr. Tall dark and handsome gave the most brilliant smile "it's been a while" he nodded at Issy and Alec as he continued "nice to see you Issy, Alec" he continued around the room eyes passing over all of us with a hint of amusement. "And I don't think I have had the pleasure of meeting the rest of you" he paused in thought "I'm Sebastian and..."
I smiled back "I'm Rose" I replied jabbing my thumb at the rest of them "and this is Lissa, Peter and Christian" they all waved or smiled on cue as Sebastian glanced at all of them his gaze finally resting on me
"I take it that you and Peter are the Dhampires?" he asked, I nodded as he continued "which would make Lissa and Christian the moroi I have heard so much about" I was just about to slip into full on flirt mode when Clary cut in.
"Hi Sebastian, I'm Clary" she declared obviously expecting some kind of reaction or recognition, when he looked at her in puzzlement she attempted to clarify "Jace's sister" she offered, that seemed to ring a bell but he didn't look to happy about it, his face darkened as he turned to reply.
"Ahh...Valentines daughter" everyone went silent then, even Aline and Issy who had been chattering wildly in the corner to catch up.
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