The first saga: the beginning of Usumaki Naruto!
Keys:
"word"- important
"word"-changes povs
"Paragraph/sentence"-flashback
End-end of flashback
"word"-just regular
"emotions"-to see what they are doing for an ex: -_-" means sweat drop
reminder: I do not own Naruto!
Must read!This is a naruharem fiction and sorry if it sucks I'm only 14 and can you guys be so kind and help me out by pointing out what my weak points are and say it nicely because like I say the reviews on other fics and it said some mean things like not correcting but really mean personal stuff. Also if you guys want other characters in here then you guys can send me a pm.
Ok these are the girls
Kurenai-18
Anko-17
Hana-18
Tsunade-22
And I' m only accepting 2 more
And yeah I changed their ages to fit in with Naruto
Boys:
Naruto-14
Ero-sennin-26
Sasuke-14
Shikamaru-15
Chouji-14
Kakashi-18
Ok start the fic sorry if you had to read all those
Author's pov-
"get away from here!"" go! You don't belong here you killed my husband go get!", said the strangers. They started to throw rocks at the blonde who was covering up his face so he wouldn't get any bruises. "Hey, who knew a beast like him could cry" shouted the bald stranger. The poor blonde who was crying now stood up and walked away but the crowd didn't let him. They tripped him and he landed on the floor bursting into tears. "Hey! Stop it! Can't you see he had enough! What's wrong with all you people! He's just a kid he don't know a crap!" yelled the lady. The blond boy pushed himself up and starred at the lady. "She's a shinobi!", the blond boy thought.
"Hey kid you ok?" she asked him. "yeah I guess so" stated the blonde. "Hey kid don't take those rude comments, their just jealous because they aren't cute like you" stated the lady. "hey what's your name" "My name is Naruto, Uzumaki Naruto." He said proudly. "Well Naruto my name is Anko, Mitarashi Anko." Stated the lady. "Why do you have purple hair and why are you wearing that long jacket and and why are you wearing that blackish under shirt?" asked young Naruto. "Well, how old are you kid?" "I'm 10 years old!" said young Naruto. "Naruto, your too young to learn why I have purple hair but I'll tell you why I'm wearing this outfit but you have to tell where did you get those cute blue eyes from, ok?" asked Anko "ok!" laughed Naruto. "I'm wearing this outfit because I am a shinobi" "oh" said young Naruto "I don't know where I got my eyes from, I think from my dad, I don't know. I have no parent that's why" said naruto sadly. "I'm sorry" said Anko. "can I ask you this?" "what?" "how old are you Anko- san and can I call you Anko-neesan since you're the only girl that I've ever talked to this long?" asked young Naruto. "Yeah sure" said Anko "let's go eat I'm hungry aren't you? "yeah I guess" said Naruto. "what you want to eat?" "ramen!" yelled naruto . "ok, Naruto. Wanna race?" asked Anko "last one there pays!"
They were running as fast as they can and were laughing too because they never had this much fun. When they got there, they were munching down a lot of ramen. "you two sure are hungry" stated the waiter. When they were done, Anko had no more money left because she had lost. "I knew we should've walked."
Sorry for the awkward end so can you guys tell me what to fix?