Pridaela: Yes I know, stupid to just stop at the beginning of a new story and re-write it but It's been half a year since i updated and what I feel for the story has been altered. Like the characters sounding too childish, the chapters are too short, too many boring bits, etc.
I decided to change the starting chapter with the two thief brief meeting instead of introducing the characters, cause there'll be a repeat and I HATE repeats xD
and don't worry, holiday started so I get more time on writing this then I did when I first started. 3 months :D
Hope my old readers still read these first two chapters because it has been altered and sounds way better. Some parts like the scene stays the same, but what they say is different and the characters are more mysterious :D
Starting my new style of writing now
Chapter 1: Wedding crasher
On a very dark night, there kneels a black hooded figure on a tree outside a huge mansion's balcony. Beside the gadgets, the person was dressed completely in black thus helping the person stay in the dark for as long as the person wanted. The only think it couldn't hide was the glowing pink orbs under the hood. Suddenly, the person raises their right hand up then inside the hood and a soft click was heard. Then the person waited.
Inside the mansion there was a big ballroom where it was holding a wedding dinner for the newlyweds. On one side of the ballroom was the newlywed husband, Seiichiro Suzuki, who is one of the top businessmen in the country as well as the newlywed wide, Saaya Suzuki, who used to be known as Saaya Yamabuki and is the daughter of a very rich family.
Seiichiro was celebrating with some of the other top businessmen in the country while Saaya was off bragging about her beauty to half the females in the room.
"You look so lovely today Saaya" one of the female near Saaya said,
"No no, you look lovely all the time Saaya !" another female exclaimed,
"Ho ho ho, of course I am," Saaya said as she flipped her curly red hair, "I Saaya from the Yamabuki family, have the most beautiful appearance ever known, ho ho ho ho"
On the other side of the ballroom was a crowd of men surrounding two females who are sitting by a table, one was looking bored while the other was eating cakes.
The girl who was eating cakes stopped and asked the person next to her "Rima ? Don't you want some cakes ?"
Rima, the one looking bored was a short and petite girl with striking amber eyes, long wavy blonde hair down to her hip with a black bow headband on top of her hair, wearing a silky knee-length light yellow strapless cocktail dress with a black sash and bow around the waist.
Rima turned her head towards the other girl and said in a very quiet tone, "No, I'm fine Yaya"
Yaya, the one eating cakes was also short but not as short as Rima and has dark brown eyes as well as light brown shoulder length hair which was tied up in two pig tails with big red bows on each side. She was wearing the same dress as Rima but in red with the black sash and bow around the waist.
Yaya started having teary eyes and said back, "But Rima, the cakes is really good"
Rima stared at her for a moment and then said, "Right…but I still don't want any"
"…Fine~" Yaya said as she gave up and continue eating her cakes as the other guys around them started asking Rima for a dance
"Rima, do you want to dance ?" one of them asked,
"Yes Rima, would you like to dance with me ?" another one asked,
"No no, you should dance with me"
They went on and on but Rima just ignores them and continue looking bored. When a small beeping sound that could only be heard by Rima and Yaya came from her purse, Rima stood up, smiled sweetly and said, "Excuse me gentlemen" then she dragged Yaya and walked out of the room. The guys then frown and went back to their groups to talk among themselves. Rima walked down a hall with Yaya trailing behind then turned left and went into a bathroom. The second she was in, she locked the door, opened her purse, took out what's look like a wireless hand free Bluetooth Earset for a mobile phone and put it on her right ear then she clicked the flashing button and started talking.
"Why hello there my little thief, are you still hiding in the shadow while we are having a grand time at this 'Oh so wonderful' wedding party ?" Rima asked in a very monotone voice,
A woman's voice chuckled at the other end and said, "Why yes my little comrade, it's quite dark here so I am hidden quite well though I hide quite well all the time anyway, how's the party ?"
"Crap, that stupid bitch won't stop that irritating laugh," Rima muttered, "like seriously, who would the hell go off bragging about their looks on their own wedding ?"
"A stupid person who go bragging about their wedding gift given by their fiancé before the wedding to alert a certain thief who just happen to steal only pink colour gems" the thief replied,
"Ah yes, true" Rima agreed and then muttered 'stupid idiotic people these days..' before Yaya took the communicator from Rima and put it on her ear
"Amu, Amu !" Yaya called out in a very happy tone and then exclaimed, "These cakes are yummy !"
Amu, the thief sighed and said, "That's great Yaya, but we're on a job remember ?"
"Oh yes, you are waiting for our call before you go off stealing that pink dia…" Yaya started before Rima covered her mouth to stop her from talking too much and then took the ear-piece back.
"Okay, enough of that, let's go back to our purpose here, I've already sorted out the easiest route for you back at home and Yaya supplied you the appropriate gears to get the job down, the only difference is that the guards that are suppose to be patrolling the place seems to all be at the ballroom or at the front entrance which is too damn weird" Rima said as she thinks of a reason why.
"Don't worry, if anything goes wrong, I'll just flash and run" Amu chuckled,
"Right…anyway, time for you to go and for us two to go back to hell before they suspect I'm doing something with Yaya" Rima replied
"Haha, not like you are interested in the guys anyway" Amu continue to chuckle
"No, but I rather not be known as the lesbian princess" Rima replied before she turns off the communicator. She then put it back into her purse and dragged Yaya back to the ballroom, the second she enters, she was surrounded by all the guys and again asking her for a dance, okay maybe we should've messed up our hair Rima thought.
Back outside, after Rima turns off the communicator, Amu stoop up and leaped onto the second floor balcony, she landed gracefully and walked into the room. Amu looked around and saw a couple of un-used furniture and a double bed, probably a guess room Amu thought then she walked towards the door on the other side and opened the door quietly as she peeked out to see if there was anyone. When she checked that the hallway was empty, she then gently open the door enough for her to get through and walked out then she silently closed the door behind her. It was even darker in the mansion then it was outside but she could still see everything thanks to Yaya's invention on the pink eye contacts with night vision built into them. Amu turned right and walked down the corridor, quietly listening to any sounds that could indicate anyone who will interrupt her purpose for the night. As she comes to an T-intersection with one that continue forward and the other turning left, she turned left and continue down the hallway but after a couple of steps away she stopped and turned to the wall on the right side. On the wall was a painting with Saaya dressed in a princess style dress sitting on a chair as many gold decorations surrounded her. Amu took down the painting and in front of her was a small metal safe with a security pad on it. She pulled the backpack off her, opened it, took out a device with cables and then plugged the cables into the security pad and turned the device on. The screen started to scroll through numbers, stopping at a certain number each time, after a couple of minutes the safe clicked. Amu unplugged the cable and put it back into her bag then opened the safe. In the middle of the safe was a square black pillow with a large pink diamond and many small white diamonds around it. Amu took the Pink diamond and replace it with a card, but as she tucked the Pink diamond into a pocket on her belt, lights were seen on the edge of her right eye. Amu quickly turned around to the right and saw two figures with flashlights just turning in from the right corner of the intersection; both of them flashed their lights at her direction.
"Hey, You !" one of the person called out, "this is the police, identify yourself !"
"It looks like a thief sir !" the other police stated and as both of them turn towards each other for a split second, Amu grabbed something off her belt and rolled it towards them, "but not the thief we were to catch tonight"
The first guy rolled his eyes and then called out again pointing the flashlight at the thief's hood since the face was still hidden under it, "I know that idiot, you, who are you and what are you doing here ?"
Amu closed her eyes and covered her ears as a big white light exploded in the hallway blinding the two officers, dropping the flashlight to cover their eyes as their ears ring. There's my flash I run she thought as she ran the other direction away from the officers and down the hallway.
"ARGH ! MY EYES ! I CAN'T SEE !" the second officer screamed,
The first one tapped his communicator on his ear and yelled, "SIR ! SOMEONE THREW A FLASH GRENADE AT THE MIDDLE HALLWAY IN FRONT OF THAT DIAMOND'S SAFE !"
Amu continue to run down hallways and turning into corners whenever they come up, she kept running until she saw some lights at the end of one of the hallway, she looked back and saw more lights. None of them can see her yet but she got nowhere to run, the doors were locked and no windows can be sighted between the two lights. I can't be caught, not yet ! Amu panicked as she stepped back to a door. Then suddenly the door behind her opened, two arms wrapped around her waist pulling her in before the door closed shut again. When the police turn the corner to the hallway it was now empty, they could only see more polices on the other end, one of them tapped their ear-piece and said, "Sir, we lost the thief.."
Inside the room, Amu and the person who saved her, stayed still until there was no noise or lights shining underneath the door, then she spoke out quietly, "Thanks whoever you are but can you let release me now ?"
The person behind her chuckled as the arm squeezed her tighter and then said in a husky voice, "No, I rather like this contact, don't you ?"
Amu fumed, a guy, definitely a perverted one as well, and angrily replied, "Hell no, let me go !"
"But your body is so soft" the 'perverted guy' said seductively near her ears making her shudder as the hot breath touches her ear through the hood
"If you don't let me go, I will hurt you" Amu threaten as she continue to struggle,
"Aww, I know you like it" he said as he purrs at the same place making her shudder again
"Don't do that !" Amu blushed, but he couldn't see it.
"Heh, you're such an innocent child," The guy says, this time away from her ears, "and such a child shouldn't play around in a dangerous game like this"
Amu snapped. She twisted around and slapped the person hard on the face shocking the guy for being hit so hard for that comment, resulting in letting Amu go as she then jumps back towards the open window in the room, glaring at the man who wore a dark blue sleeveless tight shirt that comes half way down his chest with a belt around the bottom of the shirt and a cross in the middle of his chest, dark blue tight pants with a belt around his waist and a long black leather ribbon tied on one knees loosely to the other knee with the rest hanging, dark blue gloves from mid- shoulder and elbow down to the hand but not covering the fingers, with a thin belt around the top of the glove and sharp metal claws on the top of his knuckles, dark blue cat ears on top of dark midnight blue hair with a pair of purplish-blue eyes and a long thin cat tail that sometimes moves around.
As Amu glare at him through the darkness she says in a cold tone, "How dare you think I'm just playing around, I know exactly what I'm doing! This ain't no game, this is serious and I will take back what was mine" before she jumps out the window disappearing into the shadow of the trees.
The guy was alone now as he rubbed his cheek that was most likely red by now and muttered, "Damn, didn't see that coming...hmm...Interesting...maybe I should force her to quit so I can finish my objective without any problems" Then he also jumped out the window and disappear into the darkness. Too busy thinking about the feisty thief, he forgot his original purpose for coming to the mansion.
"WHERE THE FUCK IS THE CAT THIEF !" a guy yelled out from somewhere in the mansion.
~end of chapter~
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