A Finches Flight (redone)

by Lynxtheicewing

Finchkit is the heir to her Tribe. She envy's her sister for not having to sit through her fathers lessons. And most of all, she HATES the kit who Her father chose to be her future mate. her life is dull. Until she meets Creekkit. (Rated t for violence) (this is a redone version of it because i was disappointed with the first one.)

1. Chapter 1

Tribe of the Shining Moon

Leader: Crowmoon: black tom with blue eyes

Deputy: Creamface: brown tom with a cream colored face and green eyes

Healer: Mudcat: brown tom with amber eyes

Fighters

Rusttail: dark red tom with amber eyes

Frostcloud: white and grey she-cat with blue eyes

Emberpelt: black she-cat with ginger flecks and amber eyes

Nightsong: fluffy silver she-cat with amber eyes

Flamesky: gray she-cat with blue eyes

Bluefire: ginger tom with blue eyes

Lizardnose: tortoiseshell with one green eye and one amber eye

Timberfall: Dark brown tabby tom with red eyes

Silverpelt: black she-cat with silver flecks and green eyes

Hunters

Moonglow: light grey tabby she-cat with blue eyes

Swiftcloud: black and white tom with amber eyes

Jaybreeze: grey and black she-cat with green eyes

Freckletail: brown tom with a ginger speckled back and gray eyes

Softflower: fluffy grey she-cat with light blue eyes, always has a flower behind her ear

Brightstorm: white tom with grey eyes

Blazingtail: black she-cat with a ginger tail and dark violet eyes

Blazefire: bright ginger tom with grey eyes

Queens/kits

Jaybreeze:

Finchkit: bright ginger she-kit with a white paw, and ear and has green eyes

Wrenkit: russet she-kit with dark green eyes

Nightsong:

Creekkit: grey tom-kit with one white ear and teal eyes

Flamesky:

Lunakit: black she-kit with violet eyes

Bravekit: large gray tom-kit with pale purple eyes

Flutterkit: white and ginger she-kit with pale purple eyes

Apprentices:

Halfpaw: half of his face is brown and the other half is cream, has dark brown eyes

Pebblepaw: grey with darker flecks one blue eye one grey eye

The Tribe of the Shining Sun

Leader: Specklesun: golden she-cat with brown flecks and amber eyes.

Deputy: Shadowbrook: black she-cat with brown eyes:

Healer: Starkpath: Pale grey with sky blue eyes

Fighters:

Talonfeathers: Cream tom with blue eyes

Dustfoot: brown tom with gold paws and yellow eyes

Crimsonnose: brown and dark ginger tom with brown eyes

Treeberry: brown tabby she cat with grey eyes

Russetglow: red and gold she cat with blue eyes

Kinkbramble: spikey gold tom with brown eyes

Blazefur: ginger tom with grey eyes

Hunters

Redsnow: red and white tom with dark red eyes

Lakestep: blue grey tom with teal eyes

Switchclaw: black tom with one white paw and grey eyes

Darkdawn: dark ginger she-cat with grey eyes:

Ivydawn: black she-cat with one green eye and one amber

Queens/kits

Treeberry:

Ferretkit: brown and cream she-kit with brown eyes

Echokit: tortoiseshell tom-kit with green eyes

Solsticekit: tortoiseshell and white she-kit with amber eyes

Primrosekit: ginger and white she-kit with dark amber eyes

Mintkit: dark grey tom-kit with grey eyes

Russetglow:

Shadowkit: Handsome black tom-kit with one purple eye and one amber eye

Apprentices:

Redpaw:white she-cat with a red tail and dark amber eyes

Elders:

Peachblaze: cream and gold she-cat with grey eyes

Prologue

A Great battle had started. No one knew who was an ally, or an enemy.

Two brothers clashed in the battle, clawing at each other.

"You will never win her heart!" Sun roared.

"It will be me not you brother!" Moon screeched back.

The battle raged on as a she cact watched, her eyes wide with horror.

This was caused by me! She thought, horrified.

She looked down at her stomach, which was carrying the kits she was going to bear.

She looked back up at the battle.

I know what i must do...she though with dismay. She ran out into the battle, racing towards the willow tree, on the cliff. She jumped over cats, slid under angry swipes. She clammered up the roots and onto a branch.

"STOP!" She called.

Sun and Moon glanced up at her.

"STOP THE BATTLE!" they yelled in unison. Screeching came to a halt.

"This must stop!" Shine yowled, her gaze angry.

There were many grumbles and hisses that spread through the crowd of bloody cats below.

"Why are you even fighting?" she snapped accusingly.

Sun and Moon dashed up to the tree trunk.

"Please get down from there, Love!" Sun begged. Moon snarled at his brother.

"Who said she was your love?" Moon hissed back.

"neither of you is my mate." Shine growled. She felt her stomach twinge painfully. She pushed it away.

"But darling-" Moon started.

"No buts." Shine fumed, her eyes blazing. The twinge became an uncomfortable nagging.

"Are you alright my dear? You don't look so good…." Sun cooed.

"I am not you-" she cut off suddenly, her eyes wide. Her paws slipped from her branch and she plumented towards the ground, hitting it with a thump.

She let out a cry of pain and pain coursed through her.

Sun and Mon dashed to her side.

"What's happening!" Sun cried.

"Kits you piece of crowfood." Moon spat back.

Shine let out a shriek. She shut her eyes, trying to block the world out. She felt a stick. She bit down on it. There were voices. So faint. And then. A mew. A second one. Words.

To much!

Bleeding.

Three

Lost one

Won't make it

I love you Shine.

At the last one, Shine relaxed before murmuring the name of her mate. Then the world faded forever, her mate the last thought she would ever think.

I'm gonna try again with A finches flight. I didn't like how the previous one turned out. This is just the prologue, about who Shine was. She is very important. For reasons i think the previous version of this explained.

If you have any tips for me, feel free to share them . any Questions? Feel free to ask.

~Lynx (: