A Way Out
Hey this is my first fic so comment and tell me how to make it better. AND PLEASE NO FLAMES JUST CONSTRUCTIVE CRITIZISM Oh yea the story is in Kiba`s POV. Kiba and Hinata are dating.
CHAPTER 1
"HELLO!" "IS THERE ANYONE THERE?" Hinata's screams were a vain effort to attract help. I looked up from the forest floor to see her trying to climb in vain out of the gorge we were trapped in. This was our third day trapped here.This was all my fault. Her sleek figure gleamed with sweat in the hot sun. If only I had listened, I thought… If only I had-. My thoughts were cut short by the sound of something moving above . I jumped to my feet to get a better look. "HEY!" "SOMEONE HELP!" "Over here!" we shouted, but it was just a squirrel. She sighed and sat on her chair that we made. I had no chair, thinking I could act tough and say I would`nt need one, sat on the floor. But now the floor is taking it`s toll on me.Why do I always do this? I said mentally cursing myself. Although Hinata was just half an inch taller than me, fatigue made it seem like she was 10 feet tall, gradually getting higher. But why was she appearing to struggle with the wall? I dizzily stood and saw she was climbing up. She didn't seem very athletic when we met last year. While I didn't have the mental capacity to wonder how she managed to get up the wall, I did have capacity to try it myself.
Hinata's steady rhythm of grunts and heavy breathing as she pulled herself up the seemingly end-less were the only sounds heard besides the crumbling of loose rock and the rushing water of a nearby stream from which we drank and, received the occasional catch of fresh water on a ledge she activated her Byakugan to check for any one of our friends. She sighed deactivating it and I asked " Any sign of Naruto or the others?" She shook her head dejectedly and we started to climb again.
"What took you so long?" Hinata joked deactivatng her Byakugan once again after I reached the top. "What took me so long? How did you get up here so fast?" I shot back. "Hey you`re the one who would`nt practice climbing this thing while we were down there!" she retorted. The argument went on for 5 minutes before I cracked a smile. "What?" she said obviously confused. "Look at us, bickering like children!" she stopped then started to laugh. "What now" I said chuckling. "Nothing I just cant stay mad at you!". And with that she pulled me into a deep kiss that I lovingly returned and turned it into a tongue wrestling match. She broke the kiss much to my displeasure and without warning looked out into the distance stopping on a particular spot and taking off into a sprint with me running after I finnally caught up I stopped hert and questioned her on her taking off the way she did. And she breathlessly replied "I found someone!"
ALRIGHT I THINK THAT`S ENOUGH FOR NOW. 90 COMMENTS AND I`LL START THE NEW CHAPTER. Feel free to pm me about sugestions to the story like characters, events and whatever else you would like to see. But don't think your suggestions are garunteed in the next chapter because I have to adapt the story to fit my mind then I can deviate. So untill next time!