This is my first time writing, so please tell me what is wrong.
So Here Comes My New Chapter!
It was a bright morning when I woke up inside the Akatsuki Base. "Tobi wants cereal!!" exclaimed Tobi.
Now, my peaceful morning has now been turned into a nightmare with my new partner, Tobi, can't you reach the cereal box yourself un," I exclaimed aloud. "Don't get angry at Tobi," He quietly said. It was unusual for Tobi to be saying that, since he always is used to me, so I softened up. "Here, get the cereal box un," I said. " Yay! Tobi is gonna get free breakfast today," Tobi yelled. Then, Kakuzu showed up with his demands about buying cereal, when they can just eat a pile of wood. "I wish Sasori-no-Danna was back un," I thought in my mind.
It was later, in the midnight curtain that I was helping Tobi still drink with his mask on. "Ugh!! Tobi, just take that stupid orange mask off, un," I yelled, frustrated at Tobi's gullible mind. "Tobi can drink it, see," he tried to impress me. "You're pouring the drink on the floor," I said blankly. Then, I saw Kisame, trying to swim inside that puddle. "What is wrong with this ocean?" Kisame wailed. "He is definitely crazy with water, even though it spilled un," I thought simultaneously. When Tobi and I were watching television, I saw Hidan in a show, and it wasn't pretty. "Help! Tobi is scared," Tobi acted. "Oh just get off me Tobi, un," I shouted. I wish Tobi would just disappear with Sasori-no-danna.
"Hn," Itatchi said. "Hn what, un," I replied. "Tobi wants ice cream now," Tobi exclaimed. "Just be quiet, un," I hushed him. I hate Itatchi more than I hate Tobi," I thought of it now. Looking back at the past, it seems like there's a lot more to it than just ordinary rivalry.
So? How'd it go? This is gonna be the shortest one I'm gonna make. So, I hope you enjoyed this.
(Reviews are wanted by the story)