(Hi, so my name is Kevin and i have been reading a story written by Delthblade, it is REALLY good, but it moves super fast, he has gotten so much better at writing so at first if its not that good, just keep reading, it gets better, and in the story i am taking his main character Jak, and forming him into a completely new guy, so if you read my story, which might not be very good, just read his and try not to get confused, this is my first after all)
"STEEL! STEEL! STEEL!" Jak was currently in a boxing match with a man named Folder, his name was given by his kicks, when he kicked people their torso and legs would fold forward and he would smash his elbow into their head, knocking them out instantly
"Come on bud, you know how to do this eh?" Jak and Folder had been boxing and kicking for two hours, neither of them stayed down, and Folder was winning for sure
"Ah, but who got fucked in the head harder? me or you? cause i remember shoving my d-" Folder kicked Jak in the side of the head and he fell to his knees, then stood up seeing three Folders, Jak kicked forward and Folder moved left, a very sticky object slammed into his side, and he grabbed it
"Now your fucked" Jak moved his hands down and pushed up, Folder fell back and Jak kicked him in the groin, he pushed his leg back more until Folder started to tap out
"STEEL WINS!" Jak let go and Folders leg fell to the ground, he stood up and Jak helped him out
"Damn kid, i swore i was going to pummel you" Jak laughed then helped Folder into a chair
"Alright kid, you need some water?" A man that was about a foot or two shorter than Jak handed him a water bottle then Jak downed it
"Thanks Mal, needed a little pick me up" Malick was there as Jaks coach, and Den was the announcer, they ran an illegal fighting ring (See a lot more different from The Last Soldier)
"Dude, one hundred percent bonified bad ass, nice!" Den came up and hugged Jak
"We got more than six on this one, best match yet, and Folder dude, your still getting paid, that was to good, you both went on way longer than normal" Folder smiled at Den then gave a thumbs up to Jak, Jak smiled then coughed he felt something odd in his mouth, he spit it out and yellow mucus came out
"Nice, thats fucking gross...come on, lets shut down then we can head to the club, its over an hour from shut down anyway" Den and Malick helped everyone out, they gave Folder two thousand dollars, and they kept four thousand, they were all currently in California, in Los Angeles
After they helped everyone out of the big room, they went to a locker room
"Here, take a shower then put this on, this is some top o the line pussy attracters" Jak felt a bag land next to him, he waved and Den left to wait outside with Malick
"Ok, how much did this shit cost?" Jak took out a button up shirt, a pair of jeans, and black shoes, after that was out, he saw a little gift from Den, it had a note on the box
"Dont use them all on one person" Jak moved the little post it of a box of condoms then laughed
"Like i would use them" Jak threw them back in the bag then went to take his shower, after he had dried off and gotten his cloths on, he looked in the mirror and he thought he looked very snappy, so he went over to his regular bag then took a tie out he wore if Den or Malick were in the ring, he put it on and let it hang out
"Thats nice, now to go and have some fun" Jak coughed again then spit over into a shower drain
"Fuckin sick as a dog" Jak had been sick for a week and the sickness had just started to fade away, but then he started to spit yellow goop, they all thought it was mucus, but its really something that forms in his throat from sweat that ends up in his mouth, and he only needs to spit it out after sweating, or getting water in his mouth that ends up rolling down is throat, like in a shower
"DAMN JAK COME ON, THEY SHUT THE GATES IN TEN!" Jak ran over to both bags then stuffed all of his gear into the bag Den gave him, he ran out and they ran to a door
"SHOTGUN!" Den sighed then got in the back of the car, Malick started the car and Jak sat next to him
"Your to young to be stealin that fuckin seat you know that right?" Jak gave Den the finger then they drove off
"Your only three years older than me you old fuck" Den smiled and nodded
"Your nineteen and yet you've been invited to the play boy mansion more than ten times, your now just going?" Jak shrugged and took something out of his bag
"You guys want invites?" Jak threw one to Den then set one on Malicks lap
"DAMN! YOU CARRY THESE?!" Jak shurgged again then smiled at Den
"They dont have names on them, so just write yours somewhere if it needs it" Den looked on it and told Malick it was on the bottom right, they all signed the invitations and arrived at the mansion
"Jak this was for you to celebrate your win against Folder, or your lose, but your taking us with you? thats fuckin amazing" Malick wrapped an arm around Jaks neck and shook him
"Best little brother ever, eh Den?" Den nodded and read the invitation
"Coolest, but not the best, he still has to beat you Malick, I'm older than both of you" Malick laughed and smacked Jak playfully
"I'm older than him, so he is the best younger brother" Jak thought of something funny to say then smiled
"Damn straight, and since I'm not the oldest i dont have to think about how I'm going to get m next gi-" Den smacked the back of his head and Jak laughed with Malick
"Malick is a year younger, we can fuckin drink, you cant..dresser" Jak stood straight and turned to Den
"We agreed to never talk about that" Den laughed and Malick was confused
"But did we ever tell Malick?" Jak jumped at Den, but Den laughed and grabbed Jak by his head
"Jak got drunk at the bar, and we were talking to these fine young ladys, one of them asked if Jak wanted a "tour of her place" so Jak agreed and she-" Jak shoved Den off him and jumped agian, Den hugged Jak tight and continued
"She took him to her apartment, and as she led him to her room, she asked him if he wanted to see her cloth...fuckin a...ok so she starts to go through them, then Jak asks if she wants to see him in them, she laughed then nodded, so Jak...HAHAHA...she puts Jak in a fucking dress and puts makeup on him, then tales a picture and sends it to one of her friends at the bar, they show me and then they told me the story over text" Den let go and Jak shoved his finger right in his face
"You deleted that sh-" Den took his phone out and showed Malick a picture, then Jak jumped at his phone, Den pulled back and Malick started to die, he was on his knees laughing
"J-Jak you wore that!?" Malick saw Jak nod then he fell on his side laughing, Den lifted him up and they continued walking, the gate was only another two minutes away, so they decided to run there and make sure they were on time
"Damn i need to work out more" Malick was tired and Den was fine, Jak had gotten there before them and was waiting next to the gate
"Took you long enough, come on" Malick and Den gave the bouncer their invitations and they went to the back of the mansion where music was heard
"Ok, Jak since your newly nineteen, a virgin, and have the smallest dick out of all of us, lets find you a girl" Jak shook his head and pointed to the small bar outside
"I'll see you guys tomorrow, i wont remember any of this most likely" Jak started to walk to the bar, Malick and Den decided to let him drink, he did have a broken finger, and his lip was busted
"Hey, how can i help you?" A young black bartender was in front of him, and he looked friendlier, than the usual bartenders that served him
"Hey, you guys got something strong, but tangy?" The bartender nodded then showed him a picture of a martini
"Can i just have a glass full of this stuff?" The man laughed then agreed, he started to mix gin, vermouth, and campari, he set a glass in front of Jak and poured it in, the put ice in and waved at it
"Enjoy, and be careful, its the strongest stuff we got, and its forty bucks" Jak put two twenty's on the counter and he took the glass, the liquid was yellow-ish and he sipped it, the stuff stung his lip and he set it down
"Damn thats strong!" The man turned and nodded then looked closely at Jak, he noticed something odd about him
"Hey arnt you that guy from the boxing den?" Jak let go of his lip and nodded
"Yo i saw you in the ring! that was awesome, you took that kick so well, then you ended that match, i was there for the entire two hours!" Jak smiled and took his wallet out
"If you ever want to come in and watch, or just come in to see how we set the place up, just use this card to enter, its kinda like a permanent backstage pass, but i have like ten, so this is my first one, so consider yourself special" Jak handed the man a red car with two black stripes on side, Jak then took a pen out and another card that was blue, he signed the blue card and stamped the blue car on the red, it had a small bar code on it and his signature over it
"Thanks dude! i come there every Friday and Sunday! I'll see you after tomorrow, oh yea, my names Cameron" Jak extended his hand out and Cameron shook it
"Jak Steel-Smith, nice to meet you Cameron" Cameron smiled then walked to the other end of the counter where three more people had sat down
"Damn my finger" Jak looked down at his finger, then pulled it straight, he bit his upper lip and then let go, it moved to the right a little then he moved it
"Malick?" Jak turned around and looked for Malick, Malick carried finger braces and sleeves if Jak needed one, so Jak downed his drink which was a very bad idea, as he stood he fell forward and caught himself, he looked around and everything was crooked
"Damnit" Jak saw Malick over at the other side of the pool area, and he made his way there, Malick was talking to a small group of girls in bunny attire
"Hey Mal!" Malick turned and caught Jak before he fell on him
"Woah buddy whats up?" Jak pointed to the bar then held his finger out, he pulled it and it turned right
"One second girls" Jak saw one of the girls staring at him, he felt Malick poke his shoulder
"Here, give me your hand" Jak held his hand out, and Malick put it on without fastening it
"You want me to fasten it?" Jak shook his head then jerked a small piece of leather on the brace up, it straightened and he groaned as he wrapped it around his finger and the metal straightened itself
"Thanks, I'm gonna go find D-" Something wet covered Jaks back, he turned and saw two guys splashing water at people walking by
"Oi buds, what are you doing?" The girls and Malick looked over at the two guys and they turned to Jak
"Having fun, what does it look like?" The two guys then splashed at the girls and Malick got in the way of the water
"No, that just looks like your ruining people who have their suits on, and making girls in these uniforms feel embarrassed, Jak would you like to do something?" Jak nodded and jumped into the water
"Gladly, now boys you have two options, you stop splashing this water at people, or i make you stop" One of the guys laughed then the other hit Jak in the chest
"Option two? alright" Jak swung his arm at the man who hit him, and hit him in his neck, the man coughed then Jak punched him in the chest and grabbed the sides of his head, he slammed his head into the mans head and he drug the man over to the wall and put him on the cement, the guy laughing was walking towards Jak, Jak put his hands up, and waited, when the guy swung, Jak smacked his arm down and grabbed the guy by his hair, he walked over to the wall and smacked his head against the cement
"Ok Jak, bring him up" Jak handed Malick the mans head and Malick pulled him out and set him next to his friend
"Damn guys, i just got here, whats up with these two?" Den walked up behind Malick and Jak got out of the water
"These guys were splashing water on people, ruining their cloths, so i stopped them" Den gave Jak a thumbs up and handed him a glass
"This is what i was looking for, i was looking for you so you could buy me some drinks" Malick nodded and Jak drank the glass of golden liquid
"Wow what was that?" Jak stumbled back a little, the bumped into someone
"Oh excuse me, i didnt watch were i was going" Jak turned and saw a small girl with brown hair, holding a tray, she backed up a little and looked down
"Oh, no it was my fault, i wasnt looking where i was going, you were right in front of me" Jak thought the girl looked pretty, but mainly because he was drunk, so he smiled and picked up two of the glass's he had knocked over