Hey everyone! This is my first fanfic, so for whoever is reading this, please tell me what you think.
Max (11years old)
I'm sitting at the back of the class. I finish writing the note that I was writing and turn around to pass it to one of my friends, Iggy.
"Hey! Iggy. Pass this to Fang." I whisper so that the teacher won't hear.
He grabs the piece of paper and passes it to Fang, who's two seats behind him. A minute later a small piece of paper comes flying back at me. This is how our conversation went:
(Max, Fang)
~~~ We need to talk Fang.
About what?
Many things.
Like?
Why do you keep ignoring me?
I'm not ignoring you.
Yeah, you are. You won talk to me in lunch, and you're hanging out with LISSA'S GROUP! Heck you barely talk to me after school! Is that not ignoring me?!
No.
Look, fine then. If you're gonna keep ignoring me, then I won't talk to you, until you decide I'm good enough to speak to. Better yet, until you decide who's your real friend? Oh yeah and yesterday you left me stranded in the park! Just when I needed to tell you something very important. ~~~ (end of passing notes)
I finish scribbling this down and then throw it at him. I watch as he reads it and then picks up his pencil and starts writing. His dark hair falling in front of his face and covering the paper. The important thing I needed to talk to him about is that my mom decided we were moving. I tried to argue with her, but then it seemed as if this was something really important. And when something is important to her there's no way to argue. She had an expression, as if something bad was about to happen, so I stopped arguing and just helped her with packing. We are supposed to be moving in three days. From California, all the way to New York. Iggy already knows and now I just needed to tell Fang, but he never came. Instead he decided to go hang out with his so called "friends."
Just as he puts his pencil down the school's speaker blares on. "Joanna Maximum Montes, please come to the office."
Of course the entire class turns around to look at me. Iggy's eyebrows rise as if asking what did you do now? I shrug and walk out of the class and towards the office. Truth is that not even I know what I did this time. So I can't help wondering what this is all about.
As I enter principal Cano's office, the first thing I see is the police standing right next to Mrs. Cano's desk. The man is tall and looks menacing. Immediately I don't trust him. His eyes are an ice cold blue and his lips are in a thin line, his hair is neatly pulled back and he has a slight scowl on his face as If he never smiles. He bends down and looks me in the eye.
"You're Joanna?" his voice is raspy as if he smokes too much. I nod my head and ignore the urge to correct my name as 'Max'. "My name is Herman Pimentel, just call me Pimentel." He finally says. I want to laugh, but I don't think this man would take it very kindly. So instead I keep my mouth shut. This surprises even me.
I finally notice the worried and sympathetic look Mrs. Cano sends in my way. Suddenly I feel nervous. What did I do so that a police comes to my school, just to take me out of class? Or so that Mrs. Cano can send me such an expression? Is it really this bad? I notice that they're still staring at me and truthfully, it's getting on my nerves. I finally find myself with confidence again and speak. "Can I ask why I'm here so we can get over this, and I can head back to class?"
Pimentel gestures to the seats in front of the desk."Have a seat this, is going to be difficult to say." I reluctantly sit down and wait for what they're about to tell me. Mr. Pimentel sits right across from me and folds his hand neatly in front of him. I watch as he leans forward and attempts an expression of sympathy and sincerity. Key word: attempts. Finally, after a long time of anxiousness, he decides to speak.
"I'm extremely sorry to tell you, that your mother was in a car accident and she wasn't able to make it."
So? Good? Bad? Please review and tell what you think! I would really appreciate it! And don't worry about me getting offended; I'll listen to good and bad comments. Should I continue with this story or do a different? Is it interesting so far?