A/N: Hey guys! So I decided that my first version of this story was terrible (but it was also my first fan fiction), so I decided to rewrite it.
One bright and sunny day in the town of Westfield, two girls were enjoying their summer vacation by taking a walk downtown. One of the girls was much taller than the other and she had blonde hair and brown eyes. She wore a floral dress and a pair of blue flip flops even though they didn't match. Blue was her favorite color. This mystery girl, well her name's Julia; she 16. Her friend on the other hand was short and she was a red head. She also has green eyes and she always wore shorts and a t-shirt (only during the summer months, of course). Now, this girl is also 16 and her name is Corenn.
Julia and Corenn were walking down by the local CVS (it's like a drug store).
"So, what do you wanna do?" asked Corenn.
"I don't know, what do you want to do?" replied Julia.
"I don't know, maybe we could go to the park," said Corenn.
"Hold, that thought," said Julia. Julia noticed some guys in the parking lot fighting. One punch was thrown, than another and Julia was sick of it. Julia really can stand seeing people fight like that in public. She thinks that they're not setting a good example for the younger kids.
"Hey, Corenn! We gotta go stop that fight before some gets killed," said Julia.
"Umm, maybe that's not such a good idea. Those guys look kinda tough," replied Corenn.
"Yeah, but they'll end up killing each other," said Julia.
"Ok, let's let them do that. It will be better for society," Corenn said.
"Better for society?!" said Julia. "It would be better if they stopped beatin the crap out of each other and went to do things that would benefit the economy. You know, fighting doesn't solve anything."
"Well, you've got a point there. I guess we could go try to stop the fight, but only if you go first," replied Corenn.
Julia and Corenn ran over to the two guys fighting. Julia grabbed the bigger one and pushed him to the ground while Corenn did the same with the other. Julia and Corenn stood looking down at them in disgust.
"And just what the hell do you think you're doing?" asked Julia.
The taller guy quickly stood up and punched Julia right in the face. "This," he said. Then the guy ran off. Julia fell to the ground. The shorter guy kicked Corenn to the ground when she wasn't looking. She fell on top of Julia. The girls remained unconscious for several minutes.
A/N: So, what do you think? A lot better so far, right? I think so. :D
Disclaimer: I do not own The Penguins of Madagascar.