I decided to do my own commentary on the infamous My Immortal! Yay! My friends might join in at some later point, in which case there will be an author's note at the beginning.
Chapter Pointless Description: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) Was that supposed to be funny? 2 my gf (ew not in that way) Band child senses! Tingling! Must… Make… Sexual… JOKE! raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. Wait… You got HELP and it's still this bad? u rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! Oh, dear God. I am so sorry Justin. MCR ROX! They probably did before you dragged their name into all of this. my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way Am I supposed to remember all of that? and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) Yeah. Cause babies always have full heads of hair when they're born. with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid Seriously? tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee Don't drag her into this! She's talented! (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!Rude!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. Umm… Incest? I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. As opposed to…? I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England Scotland where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen No crap). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell Noooo! I never would've guessed!) and I wear mostly black. Isn't that what Goths do? I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. I did too. Then I read this. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. You will find that you can skip clothing descriptions… I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and rainingso there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. *Gasp?* You rebel! "Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was… The devil, come to drag you to hell where you belong? Draco Malfoy! Damn. "What's up Draco?" I asked."Nothing." he said shyly. Draco? Shy? The apocalypse is nigh! But then, A giant fissure opened up beneath my feet. I fell and died a painful death. I was never seen or heard from again heard my friends You have friends? call me and I had to go away. Was any of that dialouge necessary? : IS it good? No, Dear. Not in the slightest. PLZ tell me fangz!