Ahhh, how to begin? Oh I know.
Yo!
Please let me at first introduce myself to you my youthful readers of my fanfic. I'm a near 18 year old boy living in Germany. To be precise in Berlin, the capital. I found a couple of years ago and have read surly thousands of stories til yet and have decided, it's time to write my own.
I've already told you, that I'm from Germany. To make it clear: my English is bad. I've an unsure 3 since two years (don't know, you know what a 3 means in Germany, but it isn't really good if you know what I mean and I hope you know). But don't be afraid my English sucks only in grammar, spelling and tempus. OK, that's maybe almost the whole language but I take care. I'm sure, I've already a ton of mistakes simply in my introduction. That's the reason why I'm searching for a Beta-reader. Please don't stone me. This is my first try to write a fanfic in a language I'm not capable of, so rather help than stone me maybe it will become better
OK, so much for that. Let's begin with the really important stuff.
This fanfiction is AU, means alternate universe. To make a long story short: I CAN DO EVERYTHING WHAT I WANT AND YOU CAN DO NOTHING. maniac laugh
Of course, from time to time I will ask my youthful readers after theirs opinion and reviews are always desired, but that doesn't change anything of the base. Maybe some of your ideas are so good, that I'll occupiefd them. Feel honored if this will happen.
Also this fanfic will contain a more realistic story than the most. OK, maybe the beginning is a little abstract. But there will be no loves-of-the-first-view things. There will be two love-stories in my fic and I'll be blowed if I'll tell you which pairings I have in mind. Yes I know, I'm evil. more maniac laugh
Ah, yeah. Back to the important things. Naruto will become stronger over night or something like that. But he will not become jounin at 14. He will not be better than the current hokake at an age of 13. He still have to train because he is an youthful genius of hard work. He will not be super strong ore mature over night. He still will be our Naruto, just maybe a littlebit more normal and have a better life. Simply that what we wish him all.
OK, these are the terms of my story. Don't like it, don't read it. It's as simply as that.
Oh I almost forget about :
I DON'T OWN NARUTO, OTHERWISE I WOULD PROBABLY LIVE IN JAPAN AND ALL MY FANFIC IDEAS WOULD PLAY IN THE REAL MANGA
Doesn't sound that plausible?
"normal speaking"
'thinking'
"boss summons or demons speaking"
'the same with thinking'
actions like cough or laugh which are better embed in a fluent speak
And now: Drumm roll
MY STORY:
The White Storm of Konoha - Chapter One
My story starts in the famous "Forest of death". Orochimaru is present to try sealing the Kyuubis power away with his Gogyou Fuuin. Accent to "try". Maybe it wasn't a good idea to strengthen the seal who gives Kyuubis Chakra slowly to Naruto. But we will see.
The five purple glows on the fingertips from our all infamus snake-bastard contacted the seal on Narutos stomach. Suddenly, the snake feels the chakra storachs of the boy growing on.
'Shit, maybe it wasn't a god idea to strengthen the seal who gives Kyuubis chakra slowly to the brat.' Orochimaru thought. (HA, what I've said)
In Narutos mindscape, something incredible happened. It was a, let me say not really painless experience for both, the boy and the mighty demon fox. The latter was howling with pain as the seal on his cage begins to glow an a big stream of read demon chakra flow into it. A stream as big as the first began to stream from the seal in poor Narutos stomach in the same time. But this stream wasn't red, it was blue. Like blue in Naruto's own blue Chakra. Such a blue. The stream pumps the chakrapaths of the young boy almost till bursting. They begin to widen as good as they could to gather all of the new Chakra, but it was hopeless.
Back in the real world Naruto's chakra begin to flame high and wide. Sakura, as the most intelligent konoichi in her class release herself out of the shock from the fight, grab her Sasuke-kun and does the only right thing. She flew.
Our infamous snake-teme on the other side, to fascinated from the flaming and waving chakra gets the full blow as Naruto explode. He hit the ground a few hundred yards away from the epicentre and escapes too.
No he wasn't seriously injured, but an explosion of such measures was hardly to ignore.
'Crap, this orange brat destoys my plan to give the Uchiha-boy my cursed-seal. Argh, my revenge will be cruel.' Thought the snake-bastard and merged without any hand-seals in a giant three.
At the same time a few hundred yards away an unconscious boy lying in a hugh crater sneezes and awakes slowly. The first thing he saw was either an angel or a devil he couldn't really clinch which of the two possibilities might be correct. What he saw was maybe one of the beautifulest women he has ever seen, and the immense lack of view-blocking clothes did his own part. One the other side the grimace of wrath changing to an manical (oh I love this word) grin has nothing to do with the world of light. Of course the woman was no other than Mitarashi Anko, the one and only. Only? Well, she and a regiment of at least 20 ANBU-members were sorrounding the little boy.
"Do you sense it Yamato?" she asked an ANBU at her right side in a very low tone.
"No." he murmured back.
"How ist it possible. This chakra-explosion came from that boy for shure."
"Yes, I believe it too, but I must repeat myself. I didn't sense it."
Needles to say that the meaning of 'it' includes a special fox-someone.
"Maybe it's just back in his cage."
"I guess you did not understand me Anko. I didn't feel anything in this direction."
"Nothing?"
"Not a litlebit of its chakra and I could feel it anytime since yet"
"Now you mentioned it, his chakra is at least seven or eight times higher since the last time I saw the boy. But this is the chunin-exam plus he fight one of the sannin. How could he hold so much chakra?"
Suddenly she touched the stomach of the Boy with her blank hand in believe Naruto still sleept. The black seal hasn't disappeared since yet and she tried to feel his chakra better trew it.
"It isn't only more, it feels different since I saw him yesterday. It's more calm now. Like he have more control over it."
"Maybe the Kyuubi is gone. Maybe we underestimate Yondaimes seal."
"Yes, maybe." Mumbled Anko and take her hand back.
"WHAT THE FU…. !!" she screamed. Her hand was full of black ink dropping from her fingers. Another time she smear over Narutos seal and to her shock she could clean it from his stomach fully.
"Is the seal breaking?" she asked Yamato full of fear.
"No." he stated calmly. "Something like that only happens if the seal isn't necessary any longer."
"You mean…?"
"Yes it's gone."
"Wow that was unexpected." Said Anko now again calmly.f
Yamato sweat-dropped.f
"HOW COULD YOU GET SO CALM SUDDENLY. DON'T YOU UNDERSTAND WHAT THAT MEAN. WE'RE SAVE, HE'S GONE, THE BOY IS FREE."
"Psht, you wake the whole forest if you keep screaming like that." Said Anko.
Yamato sweat-dropped another time.
"Didn't you shout the same way a littlebit earlyer?"
"That was something different."
"Because….?"
"Because I said so."
"Grrr …" , he mutter to himself
"Yes, grrr Tiger." Ankoanswered in a seductive voice and in the same time opening her trenchcoate a liddlebit more. A tiny drop of blodd from his mask was the onkly sign of his critical nosebleed.
"OK, I wouldn't be sure, that the demon is gone before I consult Sandaime-sama or at least the perverted toad of a sannin. Perhaps Inoichi wouldn't be a bad choice too."
She taks Narut over her shoulder.
"I take him with me. This excuse of a snake might be now I-don't-know-where and this is importend too."
"NO" "NO" two voices interrupt her.
"Oh guess I forgot about you. Still here I guess. What do you want?"
"If you take Naruto with you we're not able to pass this exam any more." Stated Sasuke. (I'm almost sure you forgot about these two Do you ?).
"Yeah," adds Sakura "We've already lost our scroll to this snake, don't make it harder for us."
"Listen. This Snake did something to your friend which isn't a child's play. It's possible he became severely injured. I have to bring him to Sandaime-sama. Immidiently!"
Anko saw the hard stare in the Ushiha-boys eyes.
"This exam isn't worth his death."
Another time this strange glare. Anko trys to plan something different. Apparently Naruto wasn't affected by his teammates.
'Yes this might work.'
She taked two scrolls, one heaven- and one earthscroll, out of her treanchcoate.
"OK, listen. Take these two scrolls and head immediately to the tower in the middle of the forest. I'll speak with Sandaime-sama and will change the rules a littlebit. See these scrolls as a reward to fight an S-class criminal. And if you're cabable of that, you might be able to reach the tower in less than a half day to."
The two Genin only nodded, took the scrolls and ran away. Anko spined to four other ANBU a few seconds later.
"Follow but don't interrupt them. I've a feeling, that the brat wasn't Orochimarus target."
Ahhh, so much for my first chapter. I know, I know: grammar, spelling, tempus. I suck. But don't stone me. Help me and review. The better my style so easier it's for you.
And I know its rather short. But with such chapters I can update more often.