CHERUB is owned and was created by Rob Muchamore. I own Trixie and any other characters not recognised.
OK so this is my first story. I really like the CHERUB books and thought it would be fun to write my own version of a girl Trixie (age10) and her CHERUB adventure. I didn't really want to write in too much detail her story before CHERUB but you need to know how she ended up there so in little detail the first chapter is her life before CHERUB.
I decided to do the first chapter in the first person, but from the second chapter onwards I will stick to having a narrator.
Please review and tell me what you think of this story and any major mistakes.
ENJOY!
My name is Trixie. Strange name, I know. I like it for its individuality. I'm very individual actually, my father was brutally murdered by some gangsters who he owed money to. My mother died in a fatal hit and run accident. But although I'm sad, it happened along time ago. I'm also individual because I'm part of an organisation that only has 230 people in the world in it and only about 600 people know about it.
Ok, so let me explain.
"Trixie- get down here NOW"
"sheesh hold your horses Joan" I called back.
"actually its Miss Willmore, your not normally so rude Trixie. Anyway I would like a word with you in my office." Joan, I mean Miss Willmore hissed.
I followed her into her office.
"Trixie, a new girl is going to arrive soon, she has come from an unstable family that is.. err under investigation.."
"so because my father was murdered and my mum was killed and I come from an 'unstable' family you want me to 'show her the ropes'" I snarled.
"TRIXIE! That's definitely not what I mean. It's just she is your age and I thought you would be good for each other." Joan said.
The next few days went by like a blur. The new girl had arrived she was called Sophie. We got along really well. She told me about her family and how she ended up in care. Her Dad was on trial for murder, she didn't know who he had supposedly murdered, but didn't care much for him anyway. Her mum had just ran off and left her when the trial began.
On the fourth day after Sophie had arrived, I found myself in a strange place. It was like a posh boarding school or something. I just woke up in a strange bed.
"Oh my god where am I???" I thought.
I saw some clothes on a bed side table and a post it note, it said; '1st floor, code: 089273, 3rd door on the left, through the door, left down the hall way.'
Puzzled by the note, I put the clothes on. Some army combats, an orange t-shirt with the logo CHERUB on it and some army boots. I walked out the door, taking the post it note with me. I followed the instructions and ended up at Mac's office.
"Trixie, I would very much like to welcome you to CHERUB." Mac said.
"What's CHERUB and why am I here?" I asked.
"I'll explain. CHERUB is an organisation run by the government. It is a junior version of Mi5. Children are very useful because an adult never suspects a child is spying on them. Here there are 210 children who work as spies. They live here and are all orphans just like you. They were recruited from children's homes by other Cherubs."
Mac told me.
"But what am I doing here?" I was puzzled.
"Well you are academically gifted and have a natural talent for sports, you're here because you have been recruited." Mac told me.
"But who are you?" I asked, not knowing what to do in this situation.
"Well I'm sort of like the Principal, let me introduce myself; My name is Terrence Macafferty, however everyone calls me Mac." Mac said.
"But do these Cherubs go to school and stuff?"
"Yes, there is a school on site. Classes have no more than 12 people and are set by ability rather than age. The school is the best in the country, when kids leave here they usually have 12 GCSE's, and 5 A levels at grade A or A. When your not at school then you are either doing martial arts training, hanging with your friends on a mission somewhere or most commonly stuffing your face at the canteen with all of your friends or running punishment laps!" Mac explained.
"Wow this place sounds awesome, but how do I join?" I asked
"Well you have to take an entrance exam. Judging by your enthusiasm I assume you would like to take the exam?" Mac asked
"Of-course" I enthusiastically said.
First I went to the Dojo, where I had to fight a girl called Kerry. I didn't win, Kerry was a black belt and the only fighting I had done was with the other children in the home. Next I had to take an exam. It was English and Maths with a small section on verbal reasoning. Following that I had to complete an assault course. I did this with ease, I love climbing trees and this was similar.
Next Mac took me over a small room, adjacent to the building his office was in. Mac placed a large box on the table in front of me. Next to the box he placed another box, but a much smaller one.
"Right, Trixie, in the small box are some 'items' well to be precise there are 30 of these 'items' your job is to take each of these items out individually and put them carefully into the larger box on your right. You have 20 minutes." Mac told me.
I opened the smaller box. Inside were spiders and snakes. Totally fearless otherwise, I had always been terrified of spiders and snakes.
"come on Trixie, its worth picking up a few silly bugs, if it will change your life forever" I whispered to myself.
In that 20 minutes I lost my fear to snakes and spiders.
Next I found myself in Mac's office. Mac placed a cage on top of the table. Inside was a pigeon.
"Trixie I want you to kill this pigeon. Here is a biro. Stab it in the neck, but make sure it isn't pointing toward you, it tends empty its bowels" Mac said.
I picked up the pen and stabbed it. I don't know why, I never thought it was wrong, thinking back I still don't think it was wrong, but if I killed a spider by accident now I would feal really guilty.
Sitting at Mac's desk, Mac began;
"Trixie how do well do you think you did in those tests?" Mac asked.
"OK I guess" I replied. "Just one question, why was killing a pigeon a test?"
"Good question, it was a test of courage. To pass you either needed to kill it straight away or refuse to kill it completely. Anyway onto your results. You tried hard in the fight against Kerry and did the best you could. For that you Passed."
"but I didn't win the fight? Surely I should have failed." I told Mac
"But Kerry is a black belt Karate champion" Mac continued "You did amazing in the written exam, 96 that's the 3rd best score ever!, next in the spiders and snakes test you did really well, you had a strong determination and you got over your fear. That quality is very important here! You did the assault course with ease and passed that! Next in the pigeon test, as I told you before you Passed! Therefore I am pleased to offer you a place at CHERUB."
"Wow I definitely wanna join!"
After that I went back to the home for two days, I packed then and told everyone that I had been adopted. Later I found out that it was Sophie who had recruited me, she had already been at CHERUB for two years, she joined when she was 8.
I left for CHERUB and that was where the adventure began….
Please review and tell me what you think of it and whether I should carry it on.
