This is my first fanfiction. I will update whenever I get the chance. Please review! I need some input on my writing. Thank you, and enjoy the story!

I, a soldier of the Grand Army, hereby take oath to the loyalty of my Galactic Republic and her peoples. I solemnly swear to protect the principals of my Republic, and if called upon, will defend her citizens to my last breath. As a member of the Grand Army, I will dutifully serve the Galactic Senate, and promise to carry out any order, instruction, or request given by my superiors. I understand that failure to serve my Republic, her member worlds, or her chancellor with full, unwavering loyalty will result in the hatred and contempt of my equals.

~~~~~ Oath of the Grand Army of the Republic~~~~~

"We're hit!" I coarsely yelled as the left wing of our LAAT Gunship burst into intense flames. The heat from the blaze radiated through my armor, bringing a painful burning sensation to my chest. "We must lose that Separatist droid starfighter! This bird will fall out of the sky if we take any more sustained damage!"

A clone sergeant named Rex called out to me. "Marquis!"

"Yes sir?"

"Open the gunship's side doors! That parasitic droid fighter has disabled our turrets!" Rex rapidly ordered as he nervously paced around the interior of the gunship.

I grabbed the blaster rifle that was slung across my back, and nudged the door's handle. The giant door swung out with relative ease, exposing the chaotic battle raging on the Geonosian surface hundreds of meters below.

"I'm on him!" I tirelessly announced to Rex, who was now conversing with the clone pilot. My rifle rested gently on the hard plastoid armor around my shoulder. I made sure that the gun's sights were perfectly lined up with the trailing enemy starfighter, and then tapped my finger on the trigger. The trigger gave a slight resistance, which quickly gave away when I squeezed it. The blaster's recoil strongly jolted my arms back. It was the gun's loud, ear piercing scream, however that most drew attention to me… attention from the droid. My blasterfire pounded heavily into the lightly armored metal skin of the droid, which only agitated it even more. I threw myself into a deep dive towards the gunship's interior, the collision with the cold steel floor forcefully driving the air out of my lungs.

The squeal of enemy blasterfire erupted from behind, followed by a sharp, ripping reverberation that rocked the top of the gunship.

"Shit!" shouted a panicking Sergeant Rex. "That damn bastard took out our-"

The penetrating racket of twisting steel slammed into my ear like a metaphorical torpedo, leaving my overworked brain momentarily stunned.

"Our Engines!" Rex finally completed his statement.

I felt a sickening drop in the bottom of my stomach as the gunship began to rapidly lose altitude.

Rex's voice crackled in my helmet's com-link. "Hang on gentlemen, we are going to have to land the hard way… literally! Prepare for departure and initiation of battlefield maneuver eight-sixteen-thirtyfive Alpha as soon as we make contact with the ground!"

"Yes sir!" I replied through the com-link, the echo of several other clones saying the same ringing my ears.

I closed my eyes, relying entirely on sound to contemplate the fierce battle uncontrollably developing below. Separatist droid fighters shrieked across the atmosphere, Republic AT-TE walkers clanked heavily with every thundering step.

It is time. Geonosis will be known as our victory when we finish overwhelming the inferior enemy.

"Brace Yourselves!" Rex courageously said to us, right before we slammed into the sand of the Geonosian desert. I was knocked to the solid steel floor, which once again stole my warm breath from my lungs. My vision began to fade; my senses literally blacking out. If I wasn't so damn determined to fight this battle in the name of the Republic I would have most likely died in the in the fiery remains of our shredded gunship. But I was ready as hell for this battle, as were the rest of the surviving members of Rex's faithful squad.

It's time…

I completely rewrote the first chapter. Please tell me how it compares to my original prologue (If you have read it)