this is the first story I've ever let strangers read, so please review. I don't mind people attacking my stories, but please give some good argumentation.

This was writen after listening to bowling for soups li'l red ridinghood

I own neither the song, nor the character. If I did this wouldn't be called fanfiction.


Gil lay in his bed, clutching his chest in agony. No, he didn't get shot. No, he wasn't having a heart attack. But somehow, in some way, that didn't make the pains any less real.

It had started out innocent enough (well, as innocent as it gets with him), just watching his new prey. This had quickly turned into stalking, which he had justified by saying that he was just finding out if she had any friends he could add to the 'future prey' list. She didn't

Then he started scaring off the competition, claiming to just be keeping the prey to himself. No matter how painful his wounds got.

He started walking with her, keeping her from getting lost… he didn't want her to go and die or anything, she was his.

He was kind to her, overly so. She'd smile at him and thank him for whatever he'd said or done, though she'd say that he shouldn't have gone through all the trouble. But it wasn't any trouble, he was just keeping her close to him, so he could make his move at any given moment.

A few days after he'd told himself this, his friends kept him a few minutes, nagging at him for not making a move yet. When he did get to their meeting point, he spotted her talking to some hunter guy, his rifle hung off his shoulder: he was probably going hunting now. But this wasn't the thing that pissed him off, it was the fact that she was talking to him and she was laughing. Normally this wouldn't bug the albino much, but he hadn't gotten her to laugh like that in all the time he'd been flir- no! stop! He wasn't flirting with her! He was too awesome for that, right?

How naïve he'd been back then. He knew better now. And it wasn't a crush anymore, he was in full blown love with the girl. And she'd never return his feelings.


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