Hi. I've written a lot of Professionals in the past, but never one for FF-net. I really love the Pros, and recently I've found some episodes on youtube, so I could re-connect with them after far too long a time. :-)
So here goes. I'm not a native English speaker, so excuse me for odd sentences, mistakes and typos… Feedback? Yes please!
DONNA, by Elszy
PROLOGUE
- ANGOLA, AFRICA -
The world is quiet, oh so quiet. Silent but for the ringing in my ears. I'm on the ground, I feel dirt and tiny gravel particles under my finger tips. The taste of blood is on my lips, mixed with sand and salty sweat. I'm lying sprawled in the middle of the road and I feel more than I hear, that a heavy vehicle is coming my way. It stops somewhere beside me, but I can't see it.
The blast must have deafened me, cos I can't hear a bloody thing. My vision is too blurry to be healthy. My eyes are streaming. The thick black smoke that hangs over the road, finds its way to my lungs and chokes me. I cannot cough. I just don't have the strength. That, or I'm dead.
I think…
I think someone is calling my name.
Everything hurts. I'm hit. Ambushed. My platoon. Where are they? A distinct feeling of pain manifests itself in my lower abdomen and when I move my hand there, I'm shocked to touch soft, fleshy tissue, sausage-like shapes, wet with bodily fluids beyond blood.
My intestines.
'Here!' I hear screaming, although with my very limited reach, I'm not a hundred percent sure.
'Bodie?'
It's more guessing than actually hearing my name being said. A face comes into view, distorted by my stinging eyes, the pain shoving aside a clear view, not to mention any rational thoughts.
Oh gawd… this hurts!
'Bodie! You're still alive. Press this!' A hand, small and warm, grabs mine and pushes a bundle of soft cloth hard against my belly. I gasp and shriek at the pain it causes.
'Come on, come on, come on!' She screams for assistance. 'We must get him out of here. Masouf… come help me!'
Hands under my armpits drag me away unceremoniously. By the time we reach the truck, the pain screams like a pig and drowns out everything else.
I pass out.
(tbc)
