This is my first fanfic story please review

I pulled up in my red Chevy – ready for another day in Forks. I slammed the door shut and shivered. It was a cold day, and I hated it. At points I had sometimes wished I could just have stayed in Phoenix, but then I wouldn't have met Edward.

As much as I wanted to stay next to the heater in my Chevy, I had to get into class soon. I bent down to check the tyres because it had been so easy to drive down the road to school on the iced roads. I knew Charlie was over protective – but this? I stretched up and glanced round the car-park to see who was here.

Just what I needed, Edward's gaze over to me. Distracted, I turned to face him. I waved – pathetically though. My arms felt chubby and I couldn't help thinking that he thought I was retarded. Couldn't I get anything right? He returned with a wave and a smile placed upon his perfect face. I stood staring at him dumbfounded.

Edward was my biology partner. He told me not to trust him, I replied I already did. And so it be, we were inseparable. Yet I couldn't help wonder – what did I do right to deserve him? Charlie always told me that I was beautiful, but I didn't believe him. I was meant to be blond and tanned, like my hometown, Arizona – yet I was pale and dark haired. Edward on the other hand, well, he was completely different. He stunning looks trapped me straight into his web the day we met. He had to go away a few days though. He told me he had to go to a hospital far away to treat him – but he'd be back soon. I had pecked his cheek goodbye, and he was gone for the rest of the week. When he came back his eyes were like honey, melting me. And he continued to remind me I was bad for him, but I just replied, 'The better the more danger.' He sighed, like it ran further than just that and I couldn't help but wonder there was something serious he needed to tell me.

Alice, his pixie sister, turned to him and whispered something in his ear. His smile faded and his face turned towards me. Confusion spread across my face then Edward pointed to something behind me. I followed his finger and spun around.

Everything suddenly went into slow motion. I could hear Edward running towards me, telling me to run. But I couldn't. My legs were frozen – just like the ice. A van was spinning fast towards me. The boy driving had panic written all across his face, I could tell he was pressing the brakes, trying anything to stop it. I remembered I had seen him before – but I couldn't remember where. Was he in my English? But now was not the time to think like that, I also noticed a crowd of people running towards me – Jessica being one of them. I twisted my head to see Edward nearly close enough to save me. I knew he was going to rescue me – I wasn't going to die now, I couldn't. It wasn't my turn to. I was meant to grow old, have grandchildren, talk about 'in my day'. I wasn't meant to die – not now anyway. I turned back round to see the car. My jaw dropped the exact time everything turned red. My eyes were closed and I could fell coldness in my toes. I could hear Edward's melodic voice ringing in my ears.

"Bella, Bella, are you alright?"

I could hear other voices but they were faded out. Edward kept on calling my voice and for me to reply so he knew I was okay. Pain soared through my ribs and my legs were numbed. The darkness began sweeping rapidly up towards my stomach. I tried to fight it away, but it was resistant to me. I tried to reply but I couldn't control my mouth anymore. And every time he repeated my name it became more muffled than before. The invisible force had reached my chest now and I knew I wasn't going to win the fight. I could feel a warm pressure on my chest, pushing. I could feel something cool holding my hand. I couldn't hear anything now. The more I tried to fight the darkness the more is swept silently towards me. It surrounded the last little part of me, and I tried with all my effort to fight it but it reached my centre and I suddenly felt helpless and I was taken over by the dark force within a matter of seconds.

Suddenly I was struck by a bright light. I blinked a couple times, dazzled, and I stared up in the blinding light. I blinked a couple of times and then stared to see where I was. Nothing. I was in the middle of no-where. I could hear voices – but that was it. No Charlie. No Jessica. No Alice. Not even Edward. My love, the one I would give anything to hear his perfect voice once again, see is amazing face that stunned me to the spot everytime, to smell his musky scent that my heart flipped when I got a whiff of him…

I fell to my knees in the white dessert and began to sob. My hands covered my face. This was not how I pictured my life at all…

I don't know whether to continue and have Bella actually murdered and her soul lives on to find out who or not... please review and i'd love your advice on what to do or whether to leave it like that