Hello! So this is my first Narnia fan fiction, please tell me what you think and any ways I can improve,

Lucy exited the gates at Cair Paravel followed her four siblings into the forest, Peter would be mad if she had not followed them to begin with as he gave his little sister strict orders for her safety. Although she hated making Peter angry, Lucy felt there was something she had to do and could hear a sound so soft that it was like the echo of a whisper amongst the snow and trees,

"Come on slowcoach hurry up," Lucy heard Edmund shout,

"I'll meet you and the others later, there's something that I have to do," she replied,

"Stay safe Lu," Edmund cried as they turned a corner and Lucy, for the first time since they had become rulers of Narnia, was alone. Peter had not let her spend much time without them because he said that it was dangerous as many of Jadis' followers were still hungry for revenge - it had been two years since they had defeated her, and Lucy had only just turned eleven making her still a young child, although she was a queen. She had not forgotten her life back through the wardrobe where there were air raids almost every night and they ended up having to be evacuated to the countryside, she wondered if much time had passed in their other world because time in Narnia was just so different that you could be gone all your life and nobody would notice as you would be back in half an hour at the most. Narnia was an exciting place Lucy thought, with the talking animals and beautiful scenery - she was the first one to discover it and she would not give it up for anything. But she did miss having a mother.

It was deep into the winter so snow had fallen once again and Lucy had an extra warm purple, winter coat with gold lace, but snow had fallen everywhere so it was more white under the flakes. Suddenly she stopped,

"What is that sound?" she said to herself, "It sounds like crying,"

"Are you okay there?" Lucy jumped off her horse and rushed through the trees towards where she thought the sound was coming from. She got covered in snow making her cold and wet even through her coat and onto her gown. After having searched for a short while, she entered a clearing where a young child who looked to be about six was sitting in white rags in the centre. Lucy almost didn't see her because she was pale as a ghost, her hair was so light it almost matched the coat of her very own talking horse - Lily, and her dress seemed to have been made out of the thinest material,

"Please don't hurt me," the child said barely in a whisper, "I'm so cold," Lucy picked up the child who went limp in her arms with tiredness and put her onto the back of her horse. If the child had been awake then she would never have gone onto Lucy's horse because as the kings and queens found out when she woke up, she was a sensitive thing. Probably had a rough childhood with Jadis in power for such a long time - she remembered her friend Mr Tumnus saying Always winter, never Christmas. It's been a long winter. But you would have loved Narnia in summer. We Fauns danced with the dryads all night, and, you know, we never got tired. Lucy adored Mr Tumnus as he had found her when she first came to Narnia and spared her from Jadis even though he was supposed to hand her over to her, he visited Lucy at Cair Paravel as often as he could - but he was a busy faun since the Pevensie children had ruled the land.

Lucy got back fast as the snow was really picking up and Peter probably would have noticed she was gone by now and re-entered the gates of Cair Paravel, many servants rushed up to her and the child. She got off the horse and carefully lifted the child off,

"This is a young girl I found in the forest, please get her washed and put to bed. Tell me when she awakes please because I would like to talk to her about where she came from and of course, she will be really confused about everything so I will have to reassure her and-"

"Very well Queen Lucy but your brothers and sister arrived her not too long ago being unaware of your whereabouts, can you explain please,"

"Oh, I heard some crying and so I told Edmund I'd catch them up but when I found this girl I thought she needed meet to take care of her,"

"Well it was certainly very brave and thoughtful of you to do that your Highness-"

"That is why they call her Queen Lucy the Valiant," said another servant who took the child from Lucy's arms and carried her off to be washed, the one who was still there said,

"Your brother, King Peter the Magnificent, was very worried about you Queen Lucy the Valiant and was very cross with King Edmund the Just for letting you go. I have promised that you will go and meet them in the throne room as soon as you get back to the castle, they were about to set out a search party your Highness-"

"Thank you, but please just call me Lucy," she smiled and walked off to face the wrath of her siblings in the throne room.

Lucy took off her coat and straightened her slightly crumpled robes from the melting snow before she pushed the grand door open and peered inside,

"Lucy!" Susan ran up to her and threw her arms around her, "Oh Lucy we were all so scared for you, what happened?"

"Yes Lucy," she saw Peter walk up to her sternly, "What did happen?"

"Oh, nothing really I just got a little lost you see and it was Edmund who said I could stop following you and go the other way," she did not want to tell them about the child yet because it would take a lot of explaining to make Peter believe her and she wanted to keep the child to herself as she had found her after all. I hope she is okay, Lucy thought, I wonder who she is

So, did you like it? I know that it was not the longest of chapters but they will be longer as the story continues. Please leave me a review and follow me if you did like it because if I get lots of reviews then I will publish chapter two soon,

Rueflower7 xx