This is my first story so let me know how I'm doing.

Comment to nothing to harsh . I don't own the Kane chronicles .

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ok so it's the after noon and I am training with some of the recruits . Julian just smashed his opponent . Alassya was taking a longer time her opponent quickly swung

It's arm at her she quickly dodges and runs up to the shabti touches it whispers something an then the shabti falls apart . The only shabti left was Walt's . He quickly looks through his amulets . But he was not fast enough cause the shabti quickly punches Walt . Walt gets sent flying and he jumps up on the arm an summer sults then jumps up to the head touches it an it turns into ashes .

ok guys that It for today I says a look at them we have been working for Two hours we walkout of the training room their stand Sadie she's yelling it Felix who summoned and 20 penguins. Felix! Saudi yells you can't summon all these penguins w why not says Felix this and disappointed because then we have a like 1 million penguins running around.

At around 5:30 there was a knock at the door . Sadie was able to fix our penguin problem . I opened the door there stood a girl with a yellow shirt blue jeans and has blonde hair with brown eyes . The boy next to her wore a t- shirt an black jeans . Then there was a girl with a pink shirt with white jeans an she has dark blonde hair with brown eyes . Finial their was a boy smaller then the second girl but not by much he wore a all blue shirt with white basketball shorts . They said their names are ( in the order they were described )Bree , Tim, Jade , an Zack .

Hi guys my name is carter Kane what are your last names? I asked Bree quickly replied we are the Masterson's ."So you guys are siblings"? Yep said Tim . "Who is the oldest"? I ask because each kid looks only a few years younger then their siblings . Bree is 13 , I am 13 , jade is 12 , an Zack is 11 Tim says . Ok I say but if both you an Bree are 13 who is the oldest I ask .Bree is by a minute Tim replays . Ok guys welcome to Brooklyn house .I say as we walk inside they all stare .

I showed the guys around . I introduced them to Walt , Jaz, Julian , and Sadie .When I introduced them to Sadie, Sadie said " cool more couples" I then told Sadie that they are siblings an she said " really" Tim said yep tuff luck old cap he said mimicking Sadie's British accent . She then said I don't like that one she said showed them to there rooms .

I explained to them we would find out their magic power and what god path . Tim asked " will we also train tomorrow"? I told him we would just start with the basics . And with that every one went to bed .

So how was it ? To long ? Comment please