Hi this is my first fanfiction story (which you would already have known if you'd bothered to read my summary of the story). The 2 initiates in this chapter are based on my friend Nathan and me. Hope you can review, I'm open to suggestions! I'd probably update around 2-3 weeks per chapter. Happy reading :)
Nathan
I jump onto the speeding train, adrenaline rushing through me. Today, I transferred from Abnegation to Dauntless. My parents looked at me like I was no better than a slug. But I didn't care! I have always admired Dauntless, for their wit, their skill, their strength. They're practically fearless. I look around me. I see a girl, Sarah, who's also an Abnegation transfer, and 4 Candor, 2 Erudite and 1 Amity. Then suddenly Sarah yells, probably to me, "They're jumping off!" What! Are they committing suicide? The Amity girl shakes her head fearfully and says, "No! No! I'd rather be factionless than dead!" I don't agree. Oh well. Taking Sarah's hand, I says, "On three. Ok?" She nods. "One, two... THREE!" I shout and we jump.
Sarah
Nathan pulls me after himself. I cry out as I landed on something soft but solid. I find out it's Nathan. "Sorry," I mumble, red-faced, as I brush gravel from my legs. He nods understandingly. I stand up to see a girl standing on the ledge before us. She has wavy blond hair and is kinda short. "Alright! My name is Six, one of your leaders!" I hear a scoff from one of the Candor boys. "Names for numbers? Stupid!" he taunts. Six walks casually over to the boy. "Candor?" He nods stiffly. "Keep your shit to yourself." His face contorts in rage and I know that no one had ever talked to him like that. Serves him right! I smirk to myself.
Then Six tells us that we have to jump. Nathan and I look at each other in horror. Jump?! Are they mad?! To my shock, Nathan walks up and says confidently, "I'll jump first."
Nathan
I see the look of terror on Sarah's face as soon as I say it. She squeezes my hand and says, "Be careful, okay?" I smile reassuringly. The crowd of initiates parts as I walk up to Six. "Take your time," she says, smiling. I return the smile. I jump.
The wind whips through my short hair as a mix of apprehension and excitement rushes through me. Why is Sarah scared of this?
I feel like all the wind has been knocked out of me as I land. Safely. On a net. I start laughing hysterically, even to my own surprise. It's all a gimmick to make you scared! I wanted to yell up to Sarah.
"Name?" a teenage boy in front of me asks. He has deep blue eyes and looks around nineteen or twenty years old.
"Um, Nathan, I guess," I mutter.
"You guess?" the boy asks, raising an eyebrow.
"My name is Nathan," I confirm sheepishly. He helps me out of the net and as I step onto the ground, Dauntless members step out of the darkness and cheers fill the air. "First jumper - Nathan!" the boy yells.
I hear a scream and see as a gray-clothed figure with flying auburn hair falls onto the net. Sarah. I walk over to her and pull her up. She smiles at me and my heart turns to liquid. I don't know why, but I figure it's her. She makes me want to burst into flames or just turn to liquid. We turn and wait for the remaining initiates to jump. I see a blur of red and yellow. Huh. I guess the Amity girl jumped after all.
Tris
The transfer-initiates are:
1) Nathan, Abnegation
2) Sarah, Abnegation
3) Kendra, Amity
4) Christian, Erudite
5) Tosh, Erudite
6) Armand, Candor
7) Isabel, Candor
8) Marissa, Candor
9) Jackson, Candor
I had taken a liking to both Nathan and Sarah. Nathan looks at Sarah in the secret, stolen way Tobias used to look at me. In fact, he still does it and it's making me kinda annoyed, but also happy. Sarah's auburn hair is kept in a neat ponytail but it tends to fly into her face whenever there's a strong wind. Nathan occasionally brushes her hair out of her face and tucks stray locks behind her ears. Cute!
After we (Tobias and I) had taken the transfers to the Pit, Chasm and their dormitories, we head for lunch. To my surprise and shock, Nathan and Sarah head for our table. "Hi, I was wondering if we could sit here with you?" Nathan asks. I catch everyone's approving glance across the table (except Lynn who is poking at her food dispiritedly, like she always is) and I nod, smiling. Nathan flashes me a nod of thanks and settles himself next to Sarah, who is beside me. Sarah pokes at her hamburger, and I flashback to my first Dauntless lunch. "Hey, put this on. It's delicious," I say, passing a bowl of blood-red ketchup to her. Still looking unsure, she puts the ketchup on top of the beef and bites onto her burger. Nathan, however, is getting along quite well with Tobias, Zeke, Will and Uriah. He is chatting amicably to them, while Sarah is keeping quiet and eating her food. After lunch, I make an 'excuse' to Tobias to let me go off 'shopping' with Christina and Marlene. He allows me to but keeps flashing me suspicious glances.
Christina, Marlene and I take Sarah along on our 'shopping trip', since the initiates have their first day off, while the boys, well, be boys. Shauna and Lynn are with their brother Hector. We head to the Chasm and dangle our legs above the spray of the roaring water. "So how's initiation going along?" Marlene asks Sarah. "Um... it's okay, I guess, but I'm worried I'll become factionless," she explains and quickly puts her head down. "Aw, don't worry, you'll get through it," Christina reassures her and she smiles gratefully. "Hey, do you like Nathan? You know, in 'that' way?" I ask. Sarah blushes and nods slightly. "Omg hi-five! Will and I were initiates together and we liked each other too! I mean, we still do," Christina shouts. Luckily there's no one at the Chasm to hear her.
Tobias
Something strange is going on. Tris has never liked shopping and she actually ASKED to go shopping?! No way! Something's definitely happening. Must be something involving that Abnegation girl... oh yes, Sarah. Will went somewhere, so that leaves Uriah, Zeke, Nathan and I in Tris' and my room. Uriah and Zeke are talking to Nathan while I am just sitting on my bed, thinking about Tris. "Hello? Anyone at home?" Uriah says, waving a hand in front of my face. I snap back to reality. "Yeah? Did I miss anything?" Zeke pretends to look shocked and replies, "Duh! Nathan likes Sarah, can you believe it?! First day only!" My jaw drops and I stare wide-eyed at Nathan as he looks down blushing. Just as I was about to say something, Marlene, Christina, Tris and Sarah burst into the apartment.
Christina and Marlene start chatting, probably to avoid the awkwardness.
Tris stares at me, then at Uriah, Zeke and Nathan in turn. I know, I know, I shouldn't have let an initiate on his first day to come to our apartment. But then why is Tris with Sarah? Sarah stares at the floor, her face a deep shade of red - crimson, I guess.
"So..." Tris starts. "HI TRIS! WE'VE MISSED YOU!" Uriah yells. "Actually, he's missed you," Zeke chuckles, pointing at me. Tris flies into my arms and I fall backwards, so I'm lying on my bed with Tris on top. She presses her mouth to mine and instantly, I forget everything, and kiss her back. I shut my eyes and enjoy it while it lasts. "Ahem," Uriah fake-coughs.
"Sorry..." I mumble. "Now, time to explain! Why is Sarah with you guys?" Uriah asks.
"Then why is Nathan with YOU guys?" Marlene retorts, drawing her hand back to whack Uriah on the head.
"Hey, hey, no need to get violent!" Uriah shouts and ducks. "Cos we wanna talk to him, duh! You blockhead, your turn!"
"What did you say?!" Marlene screams and hits Uriah. "You're the blockhead here!" Uriah runs away and Marlene takes off chasing him. I sigh. Sometimes they can be like five-year-old kids. But so can Tris and I.
"Sarah's my friend," Tris says calmly, the total opposite of the two hysterical 17 year old teenagers running around my apartment. I nod understandingly. "NOW GET OUT! ALL OF YOU! EXCEPT FOUR, NATHAN AND SARAH!" Tris hollers. "Um, who's Four?" Nathan asks. "Me," I say in a low voice. Seriously, you mean he doesn't know who I am?!