Previously my story was absolutely terrible so I have decided to change it, not by much but just little bits so it makes more sense and doesn't sound like a terribly bad story.
For a week I have been in a constant survival only state of mind, I am on the run from a Cyclops a big hairy monster about the 10 feet high I think. But that's not even the close to the weirdest thing that has happened so far. For one no one else seems to notice the big hairy thing following me, secondly I am sure I have killed this monster at least twice and both times I made an earthquake that either knocked him out or killed him.
So to say the least my trail isn't a hard one to follow just follow the earthquakes and you'll find me Juliana the great building demolisher. At the moment I am sitting in a Mc Donalds waiting for my chicken wrap and water to be made when I hear the all too familiar roar of the Cyclops, the person behind the counter shouts out an order not listening to what it is I grab it and push past the queue and make a break for it. I Jump into the car I stole and drive out of the Maccas and onto the road heading away, not to sure where too but just away.
I open the bag when the Mc Donalds is but a speck in the distance yum it's a Chicken burger, Cheese burger happy meal, 6 Nugget happy meal and fries with two lemonades and water. Sorry to whoever I took this from but in a matter of minutes I've demolished the happy meals, I'm about to open the Chicken Burger when a rock explodes in front of me Cracking the road, I drop the burger and swerve out of the way almost coming off the road in the process. I turn around and less than a hundred meters behind me is the bloody Cyclopes.
"BLOODY HELL" I curse, doesn't this Cyclopes ever give in. I sigh hit the brakes a bit too hard and I get out of the car and turn to face the ugliest thing I hope I ever see.
"I was about to eat my Burger you stupid oaf, couldn't you have waited another 5 minutes?" I scream at him letting him come closer.
"I would eat you and the burger quicker than five minutes." He says back, over the past week I have somehow managed to teach him all about the proper way to speak back around day one he would have been all I'll eat you and this buurgeer person but now he was at least not painful to listen to. I have to stop my admiration of my work because he is charging towards me with all eyes blazing hahaha get it he only has one eye. I duck and move to the side and he charges past me smashing into my car.
"Dammit how am I meant to escape you now?" I yell at him seriously frustrated now, I turn but I can't see him I do a 360 but I still can't see him.
"UGLY! Where are you!" I scream out but no answer, this is a new strategy.
I turn back to the car and I see a teenager standing behind the car scattering ashes.
"What the hell are you doing out here?" I ask looking around again, "How'd you get out herrrr…." I stop spotting a horse on the side of the road. "Oh, you got here on your horse?" I ask walking closer, the teen clearly satisfied with their efforts to scatter the ashes turns around and looks at me.
"Sooo, you're the halfblood I have been chasing all around the country?" he asks but I take not notice, I'm staring at his eyes looking and the deep blue of the ocean I can see in them. I feel my head go light and the ground heading very quickly towards me.
It had been years since I had last seen the ocean, we used to live in Australia on the coast but then mum got a business offer here in America so we moved to California but five months after that I left home because mum had married a man that had already had two kids my mum died from cancer a month after the honeymoon leaving everything she ever had to her husband as long as he took care of her daughter. Well taking care of her daughter is a bit of an exaggeration, I became the real life Cinderella becoming a slave in our home forever lock away inside never allowed out of the house so I ran away. Was living off the homeless shelter and donations until I started being chased but a stupid Cyclopes.
My head started to hurt rapidly and I began to feel my legs and arms again I opened my eyes and was instantly blinded by a fierce light shining in my eyes. I sit up covering my eyes with my hand waiting for them to adjust to the world again. Once my vision had returned I looked around the area taking in the world, all around me were white beds with people laying on them some moaning other sleeping.
I get up and stumble to the open door taking in the vision of the world outside, it was amazing all around kids my age older and younger were running, climbing, fighting, shooting and doing everything fun like that. I begin to step outside when a figure steps in to stop me. It's the boy I met before I fainted into a memory.
"HI," I say in my happy voice, "Would you mind telling me where the hell am I and who the hell are you and how the hell I got here?" I say still in my happy voice.
"You are at Camp Half-Blood, My name is Percy Jackson, And my Pegasus well to you my horse fly us here." He said leading me out of the room with many beds.
"So why am I here, what's Camp Half-Blood and why does that person have goat legs?" I said firing my next round of questions.
"You are here because your parent is an Olympian god from ancient Greek times, Camp Half-Blood is a place where Demigods like you and I can be safe and train so we can go outside of the boundaries of camp and live and that person who has goat legs is my friend Grover. Hey Grover," he yells calling over the weird thing and then it clicks.
All the time on the run I remember having these weird dreams about ancient Greek creatures and markings that glow and a whole lot of weird shit.
"Hey Grover this is…" he turns around, raising an eyebrow in question.
"Oh my name is Juliana Tremton you can call me Julia, I hate Juliana it's the name my father left me before he left me and my mother for the dogs." I say looking around.
"Oh Julia it's okay it has happened to most of us, being left by our godly parent and having to fend for ourselves while our only parent tries to cope with us." Grover says putting his arm around me patting me on the back.
"Except most of you had a living relative," I say barely keeping it together, "my mother died 5 months ago from cancer and I've been living as a slave ever since to my Step-dad and my step sisters until I finally managed to escape from him one night." I say tears in my eyes I turn and run, I run away from all of them needing time to sort things out.
I run through a volley of arrows and I don't get hit once, I run into an arena where I am stopped by a tall girl with a face like a toad.
"Well look what we have here guys, another newbie looks like we are going to initiate this one today." She smiles viciously. One of her friends grabs me from behind and they walk me towards a bathroom.
"Hey Clarisse what are you doing with Julia?" I hear somebody call, I turn to see Percy and Grover running towards me.
"Girl business in the girl's bathroom." She replies leading the way through the door.
"Right dunk her head in that toilet." She says pointing to the toilet in the first stall.
"Don't you even think about it!" I yell, feeling my temper rising. Who the hell does this person think she is coming and dunking my head into the toilet?
I feel the ground begin to shake, there's a pulling feeling in my stomach and I feel water in the toilets rising flooding the bathrooms I turn and run leaving them in the flooded trembling bathroom I bump into Percy and Grover who are holding onto poles outside to keep their balance.
"What are you two doing?" I ask stoping the earthquakes and letting the water return to the toilets leaving Clarisse and her friends drench in the bathroom.
They detach themselves from the poles and I hear the sound of hooves, over the hill comes a great Centaur man, Percy and Grover walk up to greet him so I follow cautiously.
"So this is the Half-Blood that has been causing all this troublll…" I stops staring at a spot above my head, glowing there is a picture of a trident I gasp. Percy and Grover see it too and both have their mouths wide open when the symbol disappears.
"What was that all about?" I say turning my head towards Percy who is still staring at me. He turns to Chiron who is just as shocked as Percy is.
"Hail Juliana," I still hate that name, "Tremton, Daughter of Poseidon God of the Seas and the Shaker of Earth." He bows and I just stand still and blink.
"Well, by the look on your face Percy I reckon we might be related?" turning the last part of the sentence into a question and by the look on his face I'd say I was right. "You know what I'm hungry where does one get food around here?" I say trying to change the subject. When in the distance I hear and horn being blown.
"Well Julia I guess you're in luck that's the horn for Dinner." Percy says walking in the direction of the horn sound.
So guys that's chapter 1 rewritten, I'm going to rewrite all chapter before I do anything else okay, so don't expect the rest of the story to continue until I have finishes rewriting the story. Can you PLEASE review me on how the story sounds so far? Is it a good start or should I not have updated it?