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I recently edited the story a little bit and changed all the grammar errors that I could find. However, the plot of the story isn't changed, so you don't have to be worried about it. I only edited the errors and put more details into this chapter. Of course, you're welcome to read the edited chapter. This was my second time I wrote fic, so I noticed that the writing was pretty much ugly. But, I have improved and on the later chapters the writing was a lot better.
Please tell me what should I do to make my writing ability better? Alright?
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Warning: Yaoi, MinaNaru, Incest, Slight Lemon, Hard Lemon (Next Chapter)
Disclaimer:
I don't own Naruto. Yeah! I can't even draw a picture, anyway.
The White Day―Chapter I
'Unless You Are A Pussy'
Today was March, 14th 2012. Just another lousy day for someone, but for some people, could mark a very special moment. Today was the White Day, the day of which a boy gives his special one, a chocolate, as a token to appreciate his special one. The White Day was identical with the Valentine Day or as people would know it too, as St. Valentine's Day.
The difference was Valentine Day falls on every 14th February and it's a girl turn to give a chocolate to her special one as a token of love. Overall, it's not that different with the Valentine day. It's too bad that this day, wasn't as famous as it's 'sister', the Valentine Day.
One could say that, the White day was just another stupid publication from the chocolate manufacturer. But, for some people, this day could be very meaningful. At least, it was for Naruto.
A boy was walking aimlessly in the street of Konoha. Wearing his orange pants and a turtle neck, orange colored jacket with a black strip in the middle, the blond boy appeared to have a serious thought in his mind.
'Wonder what I should give him...' thought that boy confused inside his mind.
'A box of pink heart-shaped chocolate? or a heart shaped chocolate with a pink stripe in top of it?' added him in his mind as his mind kept drifting away and away. He's having a hard time to decide what chocolate he should give for his special one.
He really shouldn't think that much. After all, no matter what kind of chocolate he gave to his special one, he wouldn't notice that it was from him unless Naruto confessed to him about his feelings.
But, Naruto would never actually confess his feelings! He never even told anyone about his feelings! Only one exception though, he did tell his best friend, Uchiha Sasuke, about his unusual feelings. He did tell him about how he had weird affections toward his very own father, the Fourth Hokage.
The respond was positive though. Sasuke didn't laugh at him or gave him a self-pitying look. Instead, Sasuke encouraged him to go for it. Although he had a weird way to encourage Naruto to go for his love, it was a very 'Uchiha Sasuke' way. Naruto still remembered how Sasuke challenged him to confess his feelings with the blond Hokage.
Because of his stupid mouth, of course, he took the challenge. The challenge was pretty simple though. He only needed to tell the blond Hokage how he loved him unlike a father-and-son love but more like a lover's love or Sasuke would always call him 'Pussy'. And since, Naruto didn't like being called that way, he took on the challenge.
As a return, he challenged Sasuke back. He dared Sasuke to kiss Kakashi, his teacher, whom Sasuke had a big crush on, but of course, his Uchiha pride wouldn't let him to admit it. And so, that simple conversation turned out to be not that simple at all.
'Maybe I should I give him a white chocolate and send it anonymously.' thought Naruto unsure in his mind.
He couldn't think the right chocolate to give his father with! He wanted a chocolate that enough to tell him how he loved him so much, as a lover. But, he's afraid that his chocolate would be misunderstood as a token of appreciation. He didn't want it to be a 'thank you' chocolate instead he wanted his chocolate to be 'I love you' chocolate and 'I wanna sex with you' chocolate.
But, giving Minato a heart-shaped chocolate with a pink strip in the top of the chocolate, it sounded pretty cheesy for Naruto. As if it weren't enough, Naruto didn't know how to give it to his father. He was confused whether he should just give it and confessed in front of him or he should give him anonymously. He first thought to give it anonymously but then a simple thought came to his mind.
'What if he thinks the chocolate is given by some slutty kunoichi? A chocolate with a sleeping potion in it, so that she could get him to a bed. He's wanted after all' thought Naruto in his mind.
or maybe he thought
'A poisoned chocolate to put him down, so that the Hokage place could be replaced by someone else.'
Noticing that it would end up rather badly if he gave the chocolate anonymously, Naruto shook away his thoughts to give the chocolate anonymously.
'Damn it! He'd never eat my chocolate! It's too suspicious! A ninja should be very cautious and he's the great Fourth Hokage! Of course, he'd be cautious with the anonymous chocolate!' debated Naruto in his mind.
"Backing out, Dobe?" suddenly a slow husky voice came out and it startled Naruto.
He jumped in respond to his shock then he panted a little bit trying to adjust his breathing as he looked out to where the voice came from. The voice came from a raven haired boy, with a superior looks in his face as if everyone was simply inferior compared to him. That oh-holier-than-thou looks on the face was Uchiha Sasuke.
After Naruto had regained his breath, he shouted to the Uchiha in protest.
"Damn it! Teme! Why did you have to do that!" shouted Naruto as he pushed the Uchiha shoulder abruptly with his hand.
"I was just trying to help you, idiot! You mustn't fantasize imagining someone was humping your ass senselessly in the middle of the street." said Sasuke irritated.
Naruto face turned red. He's angry now or maybe he's blushing because he suddenly imagined Minato gripping his shoulder and fucking him aggressively to the ground. In moments, Naruto brought back to reality, he then said,
"Damn it! I wasn't imagining that, you insensitive bastard!" well, at least not until Sasuke mentioned that.
"I'm not a pervert like you!" continued Naruto angrily.
"Then, why you're standing here looking like an idiot, more idiotic than you probably have been?" said Sasuke superiorly. He then continued
"Hey Dobe? You're confessing to him tonight aren't you?" said Sasuke to the blond boy.
Naruto blushed a little, he then said to Sasuke sheepishly
"Well, yeah… that's… er… I… I dunno about this Sasuke…"
Sasuke looked at his face, unsure whether he had to cut the mumbling out our wait until Naruto's word finally made sense. But, he decided to wait for Naruto. Naruto then continued,
"You see... tonight… tonight maybe... hhh... I was wondering... you know… to give him a chocolate… as for today, is a White Day… but then... umm… I dunno which chocolate should I give him… and how should I give him… Maybe I should give him anonymously or maybe…' stuttered Naruto nervously.
Sasuke then raised his eyebrow, as if to question Naruto,
"White Day? I didn't know you believe with that stupid publication" said Sasuke in surprised.
Of course, Sasuke Uchiha was too genius to fall for that publication, at least he thought it that way.
Naruto then answered timidly,
"Err... yeah... but... maybe... what better occasion than this… to confess someone with the… chocolate… as the… as a token of love… but then again… what if he misunderstood it as a 'thank you chocolate'… then I… then.. I... Hhh… maybe this is not a good plan…" said Naruto as he sighed in disappointment.
"Cut it out, Dobe" said Sasuke firmly.
"It doesn't matter whatever chocolate that you give to him, with whichever way that is, all that matter is, you confess to him how truly your feeling is, and let him know everything." said Sasuke comfortingly.
"B-b-b-but..." protested Naruto sheepishly.
But before he finished his talking, Sasuke cut him first because he didn't want Naruto to start mumbling restlessly again.
"Pick whatever chocolate you want, a regular one is enough. Unless, you feel quite girly and give him a heart-shaped chocolate with 'Be My Love' written in pink on top of it." said Sasuke superiorly.
"No way… It's… alright, maybe a regular chocolate is enough." agreed Naruto.
Sasuke grinned, just a small grin, enough to declare that he's happy winning his conversation against Naruto. Naruto then decided to buy a box of regular chocolate with nothing special in it. Just plain good old chocolate wrapped in white and orange.
"Let's go" said Sasuke, as he pulled out Naruto's hand with a single stroke.
In front of Hokage's office, Naruto frozed in silence. Sasuke then moved Naruto's hand swinging it up and down to bring Naruto's consciousness back
"Naruto? will you move? or should I just drag you all the way to the Yondaime?" asked Sasuke.
He gulped a bit…
"Sas… Sasuke... what if he rejects me..?" said Naruto nervously. Then he continued, "What if he feels awkward knowing I love him as a lover… and then... and then... what if... he... he..." before he mumbled even more, Sasuke cut his mumbling,
"What if... what if..." said Sasuke irritated, then Sasuke thought the only way to encourage his best friend was by insulting him,
"You. Are. A. Pussy." said Sasuke arrogantly with a superior smirk in his face.
"What? heey… I'm not a Pussy!" protested Naruto.
"Yeah you are. You are a Pussy because, you know what? That's what Pussies do. Bitching and Whining about something that isn't even happened yet." said Sasuke agitatedly.
"What? Noo... Damn it! I'm not whining! I'm just... I'm just..." whined Naruto.
"You're just? Well, you're just acting like a pussy. Dobe, you're all talk. Where's that 'I never back down with my word'? or 'It's the way of my ninja?' where did it all go now? You stashed it inside your Pussy?" said Sasuke sarcastically.
"No, I'm not a Pussy! I have a dick! you bastard!" argued Naruto.
"Well, then you might want to refund your dick! Because you acted like a damn Pussy!" said Sasuke, again looking down to Naruto.
"Damn it, Sasuke-teme! Why do you always to act like a dickhead!" said Naruto angrily.
"At least I'm not a pussy. You are. Pussy. Pussy. Pussy. Congratulations, You can throw away your chocolate now then go fuck yourself with your pussy." said Sasuke, he then crossed his arms and looked Naruto superiorly, enough to offend Naruto about how low he was now.
"Damn you! I'll show you I'm not a Pussy!" said Naruto determinedly.
"I'll give this fucking chocolate to him and confess all my feelings to him. Then, I'm not gonna back down, even if he rejects me! , I will kiss his lips! He must know what my feelings are. And today, all the 'loving him from a far' stopped now!" said Naruto, now his cerulean eyes glowered with determination and power. "And then it's your turn Sasuke-teme!" continued Naruto.
Sasuke smiled, with his face saying 'Bring it On', then he gestured Naruto to go inside to the Hokage's office. Naruto gulped a bit, then he thanked Sasuke, "Hey, teme, thank you for encouraging me.", Sasuke nodded, and anwered with a simple word "Hn."
Naruto then walked and reached to the door, as he trying to open the door. He stopped a little bit by the Hokage's office door, and heard something he wished he hadn't. He heard the sound of a man, kissing and moaning inside of the room. The sound seems rather erotic and quite aloud. He knew what was going on in that room. He's shivering… Not with pleasure or what… but in pain. He knew what was happening… The Yondaime was making out in his office.
He could feel a tear coming in his blue eyes. He didn't want it. He didn't want to see the fact that the man he loved, wasn't his and wouldn't ever be his lovers. He cried in pain, all the memory and the fantasy that he had before, were crushed. Almost instantly altogether. He could feel that the chocolate he's holding now, was some kind of cursed chocolate that reminded him how a stupid fool he was, to even think to give Minato a chocolate as a token of love. While in fact, he'd never be loved like he wanted to.
He turned around abruptly, smiled miserably at Sasuke and excused himself with a stupidest reason ever. He wouldn't let his tears be seen by Sasuke. He ran away, away… all that he could think was running away until his heart stop beating until the pain somewhere in his chest would ease a bit.
Sasuke was in shocked for a moment, but in a minute he could figure out what's happening, he knew how crushed Naruto's heart would be. But he also knew that he couldn't do anything to ease his pain. All that he could do for his friend's sake is to confront the Yondaime Hokage. To tell him how his son loved him so much. Even so this is against his position, he opened the door abruptly with his onyx eyes filled with determination.
"What THE HELL are you two doing?" said Sasuke in shocked. There he saw them. A silver haired man was kissing and making out with a brunette. Yep, a brunette.
"What? What the? Hey!" protested the silver haired man.
The man abruptly pulled up his mask to cover his face, and turned away, so that he could hide his embarrassment. While the brunette, also looked away, to hide his embarrassment.
"Kakashi-sensei and Yamato-taichou? In Hokage's office?" The Uchiha barely could speak.
He was pretty shocked to see that his teacher was licking and tasting each other's tongue together with a very indecent body language.
"'We weren't!" said Yamato.
"It's not like what you think! He... he... forced me to do it!" added Yamato.
"What? You are not even fighting back! How could you even say that I was forcing against your will?" argued Kakashi.
'That pervert teacher… I always knew he's a pervert! Damn it, I feel sick... I was having a crush with a pervert like him...?' thought Sasuke admittedly.
"In Hokage's office?" questioned Sasuke as he then raised his eyebrows sarcastically.
'Damn it even thought it's kinky to make out in someone's office quietly while hoping to not get caught, this is just too much for me... that pervert bastard! forcing to kiss someone's lips…' thought Sasuke angrily in his mind.
He had definitely lost his crush with his teacher. Fortunately he felt relieved that Naruto might not be broken hearted at all, he'd just misunderstood it. All he needed to do now was to tell Naruto about this incident, And, he couldn't care less about this two pairing, but before he excused himself, Kakashi excused to avoid Sasuke accusations,
"Well... umm... we… after we finisihed … the mission... we were reporting to Yondaime, but he's nowhere to be seen... so maybe… he'd left to his home.. and... we thought that…"
But Sasuke didn't want to hear the detail, he lifted his hand, as if to gesture 'it's enough', turned around and closed the door, before he closed the door, he said to Kakashi
"Don't do it to rough, Team 7 will be having a mission tomorrow... I really hope Yamato-taichou could still walk properly so that he wouldn't be a burden…" not even bother to hear Kakashi excuses, he closed the door and rushed out to find Naruto.
He then found Naruto in the training ground near the village, he looked at him, and didn't know where to start. He looked at the chocolate box, and it was crushed. The chocolate was still intact though, the only thing that remains intact. He wondered that maybe Naruto's heart was as crushed as the chocolate box was.
He patted Naruto's shoulder, and sat beside him. He looked at Naruto and Naruto looked back at him thoughtlessly. It was as if his mind weren't there anymore. Sasuke looked at Naruto's eyes and tried to comfort him.
But before Sasuke said anything, Naruto said to Sasuke, with a small weak voice, noting that he was hurt a lot…
"Don't…" said the blond boy weakly.
Naruto didn't want any pity, now, he could see Sasuke's face was full of pity and he couldn't stand to accept the pity. Then, Sasuke said it to him,
"It's not what you think, you know…" as Sasuke patted his shoulder slowly but gently.
"I said don't Sasuke... don't start it… not anymore…" he jerked out his shoulder, making Sasuke's hand fell of to the ground, and he looked away, to hide his face. Naruto knew that he could feel his tear fall from his eyes, as his eyes started to be stinging again. No wonder he's going to cry...
"Look the thing is…" said Sasuke comfortably to his friend because he wanted to explain the truth to Naruto.
"No... please stop..." Naruto closed his ears with both of his hands because he didn't want to hear anymore. He didn't want to think about it. All that he wanted was that the stupid day could just end soon. He didn't even bother with the tears that started to fall down from his azure blue eyes down to his cheeks.
"It was Kakashi-sensei..." said Sasuke calmly.
"No… please stop… stop it… I don't want to know with whomever he was making out... either it's with Kakashi-sensei or with whoever..."
Naruto closed his ears even tighter with his hands as he closed his eyes to prevent more tears falling down his eyes. But he failed miserably. He could still hear what Sasuke was saying and he couldn't stop imagining how Minato and Kakashi kissed and making out with each other, his heart ached so much. The thought of Kakashi and Minato pressed against each other made his eyes stinging even more.
"No, it's Kakashi-sensei with Yamato-taichou...' explained Sasuke.
"Damn it! God! Sasuke, stop it, will you?… Why do you want to hurt me so much? Don't you think it's already hurt enough, to actually see your lover having sex with other people? And now, Do you think I want to know that he's having a damn threesome!' said Naruto.
He opened his eyes, and tears falling down in his cheeks, he couldn't help it anymore. He's hurt, and hearing what Sasuke had just said really hurt him deeply. He didn't want to imagine it, but the image of Minato's having threesome just kept reeling in his mind. Although it looks hot… But it's hurt deeply…
"Naruto look at me!" ordered Sasuke with his eyes filled with determination and trust.
"What..?" Naruto's facee was thoughtless, he couldn't think anymore, all that he could answer was a simple monosyllabic 'what' with a dull tone.
"He's not there you know. He's not making out with anybody!" explained Sasuke.
"But then I heard..." protested Naruto, the sound he heard in Hokage's room kept playing his mind.
"It was Kakashi-sensei and Yamato-taichou who's making out, only those two! no more." explained Sasuke.
"Oh... oh... you are not lying…?" Naruto felt so relieved, it was as if all was just a plain lie and this was just too good to be true.
"Look into my eyes then…" as Sasuke stared at Naruto's eyes deeply with his onyx eyes smoldering with comfort and trust. Now, that he looked at Sasuke, Naruto noticed that the black coal eyes didn't show any sign of lie.
"Then… then... where is he...?" asked Naruto with a new hope rising within his veins.
''He probably already went home by now, and you should probably too.' suggested Sasuke.
"But... but... I… oh... the chocolate..." Naruto whined. He remembered how hard he had crushed that box with his hand, as if to relieved how hurt he was, he remembered he focused all his pain in that box of chocolate. Just to make the pain go away… But it didn't…
"It's okay. It's still intact you know... Just bring that to him... and then... you can... confess..." said Sasuke, he then smiled with a perfect smile in his face.
"But... but what about you...? Kakashi-sensei was..." said Naruto.
"Shut up Dobe! Just go get your love now!" shouted Sasuke embarrassedly, he wouldn't admit his crush with his teacher. Of course, his Uchiha pride didn't want him to be self-pitied.
"…Thank you… Sasuke-teme." said Naruto sincerely. He then got up and left the training ground. He's heading to his home, hopefully he would find his father in his house and hopefully all of this would end soon, in a good way.
At his house, he noticed that Minato was already at home. He opened the door, and entered his house,
"Oh, you're really late today?" a voice came out to greet him.
And there he saw it. Minato, in all his shirtless glory. His heart beat suddenly raced, because of seeing Minato's shirtless body. It's very attractive to him. Looking at Minato's body, still wet and looked very perfect. At first, he didn't notice that Minato had a very toned abdomen, almost forming a six pack. It's probably because he rarely saw his father shirtless.
Naruto didn't reply anything, he's very stunned in between afraid to confess and giving his chocolate or getting hard because of watching Minato's body. Naruto gulped a little as he then could feel something throbbing in his pants. And, he's having a painful erection that started bulging in his pants. He then saw the blond Hokage put a shirt in his body and ruffled his wet hair with the towel in his shoulder. It appeared that Minato was just finished from bathing.
"Naruto? How long do you plan on standing there?"asked Minato curiously.
Naruto then suddenly came into his mind. He wiped out his nervous feeling and started to walk inside his house into the kitchen room. He opened out the refrigerator, picked up some water bottle, and drank the whole bottle down eagerly because he was very thirsty or he did that to relieve his anxiety.
Minato then asked again,
"Naruto? What's the matter? Are you okay?" asked Minato caringly with his face looks pretty worried.
He walked closer toward Naruto, and touched his cheek,
"You've been cying a lot?" asked Minato to his son as he then traced his finger across Naruto's cheek to state the fact that Naruto's been crying a lot.
"Why?" he asked again.
Naruto then cleared his throat a little bit. And decided that if he didn't confess to Minato now, he wouldn't get another chance anymore…
"All right… This is it…" thought Naruto in his mind.
―To Be Continued―
Author's Note
Well, that's my edited version of this chapter! I think it looks quite decent to be read now rather than the original version. I didn't change the plot though but I hope that the story will be more understandable after I've edited the errors. I'm not a very bright person in grammar so, if there's any other story that you think needs to be edited, just let me know. Peace.
Oh, and the recent chapters were a lot better than this.
Please tell me what should I do to make my writing ability better? Alright?
Reviews and constructive critics will be gladly accepted.
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MinaNaru4ever