This is a new story I have started writing, called The Red Fox.

Its about a boy that posses as a vessel to a powerful demon fox. The boy must learn to control the fox or it end up destroying every thing around him. Many other clans hope to get their hands on the boy so that they might control him. He who controls the fox holds the fate of the world in their hands. So follow the Red Fox's orange haired vessel has he struggles with its power, his anger, and his feelings for a girl, all while he fends off other powerful master demon vessels.

Please review so that I know how the story is and if I should continue.

The Red Fox

They say evil holds no bounds. It is a product of man. It has many forums. Created from the ignorance of others. It is said that even the purest of beings can be corrupted by it. Like a bloody mist it takes hold and spreads. Yin and Yang, good and evil, body and soul.

Sky Rock Village

A young boy with orange hair runs down an alley way. Hot in pursuit 5 more boys, older than he, rush in after him. Cornered the frighted boy turned to face his pursuers. The 5 others approached slowly, fists held ready. Young and afraid the orange haired boy could only wait for the first strike. Confident the 5 older boys taunted him. Calling out names.

"Look at him" one mocked "he has Orange hair!"

"What a freak!" another taunted

"Lets get him!" the oldest called out

The 5 ran at him all at once. Using their fists and feet they beat the boy til he could move no more. Bruised and broken the boy watched as the 5 boys walked away. In pain he tried to rise, only to fail. The 5 older boys watched as he tried to rise. They mocked him as he fell each time. Hate began to form in his heart. It took hold of him and he rose and charged the 5 boys. Shocked they failed to move as he swung at them. A well placed hit sent one flying back into a wall. The others terrified of his massive strength ran. The one that took the hit stumbled away bloody and at a loss for breath. Still enraged the boy screamed at the sky. Shock waves cracked the very stone he stood upon. Seething with rage the boy ran out of the alley way and pursued his would be attackers into the market area. Bystanders backed away from him as he approached. Fear and shock written on their faces. Anger continued to full the boy as he spoke.

"What are you all looking at."

Confused and over taken by his rage let out a roar that sent a wave of power a the people, knocking them back. Within the dust clouds the boys body began to change. His on anger mutated his very body. The black line under his eyes spread colored his ears. His nails grew into claws, his ears became pointed and grew out. His very body grew and sprouted patches of orange fur. He roared once more, but fear kept the people in their place unable to move. He raised his fists into the air together and then brought them crashing to the ground. This sudden force cracked the ground and pushed it up towards the people. His roars and attacks brought the villages military to attack him. They however were not prepared for what their eyes saw.

Further away two men stood upon a village house. They watched as the boy ravened the market place.

"So it would seem he has finally awakened it.'

"What do you think could have awakened it, Caption?"

"Who knows."

"Where do we start?"

"First Hiitoke, we must subdue him. Then we'll force him back to his lesser state."

"This his going to be difficult. The Fox has already taken hold."

"Not quite, his ears and tail have not fully formed. And his fur his still in patches. So he's not as strong as he could be, but we must hurry before the process completes."

"Understood."

The two men jumped from house to house then one entered the market place. Immediately the Fox spotted him, and sent a roar his way. Hiitoke stood his ground as the wave of power passed him. He was pushed back, but kept on his feet. The house behind him though, collapsed. Hiitoke dropped into a fighting stance. Chains fell from his sleeves. He spun them around as his caption did the same in the Fox's blind spot, behind him. The Fox, still without a full tail, wobbly ran at Hiitoke. Hiitoke stood his ground still spinning the chains. Then just before the Fox reached Hiitoke a chain rapt around its neck pulling it down with same force it used to run. With the Fox down Hiitoke to his chance to subdue it. He tied the Fox's hands and feet, then used iron spikes to hold the chains tight and nailed them into the stone. With Fox successfully restrained the Caption pulled out a scroll and unsealed it. He cut his hand with a knife and put a bloody print on the ground. He then read the word from the scroll. As he read the Fox struggled and began to break the chains as his form began to near completion. When the Caption finished reading the scroll red ribbons covered the Fox and squeezed it, forcing its dark inergy to stop progressing. Then the Captian aproched the struggling Fox. He put his bloody hand on the Fox's chest then spoke the words of a seal. The Fox's form began to recide leaving a orange haired boy loosely covered in red ribbons. Sweat poured from the captions face as he fell to one knee.

"Caption are you alright?" Hiitoke rushed to his side.

"I'm fine" he insisted "get the boy, we must take him to the lord to complete the sealing."