(This is my first story so please review and give me your opinions)
"This is it mates," said the notorious captain of the Black Pearl, "This is the house where the beautiful Elizabeth's friend is at. Mr. Gibbs!"
"Yes cap'n?"
"Mind the ship while I go to sore to fetch us a lady."
"So yer going to go get this Jane somebody for Elizabeth, who is with Mr. Turner on the Dutchman cause the witch let her, and we are to be getting a small token of appreciation from one Mrs. Turner and I am to watch the ship?"
The notorious Captain Jack Sparrow turned to look at his first mate and friend. He had been thinking about why Elizabeth would ask him to get her friend and in return give him some treasure, but he just shrugged it off.
"Aye," Jack said, "I'll just be awhile."
"Yes father, I will stay in my room," Jane Smith said to her father on her way up the stairs, "goodness, why don't you just lock me in the dungeon."
"I heard that young lady!" Her father yelled. He never did like to be mocked. Her father was a duke in London and loved to control everything. He would never let go that her friend, Elizabeth, became a pirate; supposedly killing her father in the middle of it, but she knew better than that. Elizabeth loved her father with all her heart and soul. She chose piracy because of her thirst for adventure and love for William Turner.
Jane climbed into her bed and thought. Oh how she missed Elizabeth; the way she would run over to her house when she visited, the way she would go sleep over at her house in the winter times, and the way Lizzie stayed with her when her mother was sick. She was so angry when her father made her come back and stay here until she found herself a husband. She wasn't ready to get married, but since her twenty fifth birthday, her father had been bringing eligible young men to the house. She was tired of it.
Just as she said that she heard her window open and a small cough sound.
Jack Sparrow looked over the young lady in the bed. She sure is pretty, but that's what I would expect to be Lizzie's friend. He came closer to her bed but she didn't seem to be scared. He looked deep into her hazel eyes and found that she was actually uncomfortable. He thought he was about to fall over and laugh when she said, "Well aren't you going to say something?"
"Do you want me to?" he said with a smirk. He was going to get a kick out of messing with this girl. He came a step closer to the bed, and he almost ran when he saw what looked like a snarl come from her mouth.
"Yes, well you did come into my bedchamber without my permission and through the window for goodness sake.