Promise-Rewrite-: By Acie
7 April, 2012
Disclaimer: I don't own, you don't sue, capice?
Author's notes: I just wanted to see how a rewrite would turn out. It's been literal ages since I've last posted anything it seems and I wanted to see how my writing style has improved and how well this would be recieved in the community. I've since moved on to different fandoms, but as DBZ/SM was my first it will always hold a special place in my heart.
Trunks and I had been best friends since birth. We grew up together, trained together, laughed together and cried together. I knew I loved him. I just didn't realize until later what kind of love it grew to become-so when he asked me out, I was stunned. I blurted out a "No!" so quickly it would make your head spin, and regretted it almost right away.
When the visions around you
Bring tears to your eyes
And all that surround you
Are secrets and lies
He looked so downtrodden it nearly brought me to tears. But when he saw the frightened look on my face, he said, "I will always love you-and I'll wait until you're ready." Am I not ready? Is that why I said no? Or do I really believe what Rae said to me today? That I'm a klutzy, crybaby idiot? How could Trunks want me then?
I'll be your strength
I'll give you hope
Keeping your faith when it's gone
The one you should call
Was standing here all along
Walking back from his house in the dark, I kept thinking on this. I thought so hard, I was distracted enough to be caught unawares when a man grabbed me. He took my purse and shoved me in the alley. My training should have kicked in at this point but I was shocked. I had never been caught like this before. Suddenly, I just didn't know what to do.
And I will take you in my arms
And hold you right where you belong
Till the day my life is through
This I promise you
This I promise you
I closed my eyes, waiting for the next blow, but it never came. Opening them again, I saw Trunks standing over me, hand held out to help me up. I took it.
I've loved you forever
In lifetimes before
And I promise you never
Will you hurt anymore
I told him I was frightened. I told him I wasn't sure if I was ready. And I apologized. So much. And asked him if we can take it slow. We agreed to go out the next day. He walked me home, and by the end of the night, we both had a smile on our faces.
I give you my word,
I give you my heart.
This is a battle we've won
And with this vow
Forever has now begun
Just close your eyes
Each lovin' day
And know this feeling won't go away
'Till the day my life is through
This I promise you
This I promise you
The date was lovely. I was walking on clouds afterwards and he kissed me goodnight. I suddenly don't know what I was frightened of-and can't wait for the next one. I'm glad we didn't wait too long...
Over and over I fall
When I hear you call
Without you in my life, baby
I just wouldn't be living at all
And I will take you in my arms
And hold you right where you belong
'Till the day my life is through
This I promise you, baby
Just close your eyes
Each lovin' day
And know this feeling won't go away
Every word I say is true
This I promise you
Every word I say is true
This I promise you
I promise you...
~This is a rewrite of an original story that has had no sequels or other chapters. Constructive criticism is always welcome. Flames will be used to roast marshmellows :-)
Acie