A/N: This is my first Divergent Story, and I know it's one of those A Perfect Dauntless Worlds, but trust me this will have a large twist. I came up with this story actually before I read any Divergent Fanfics, and I had to stop reading a few because it sounded too much like how mine was going to be. Anyway my friend and I changed the main plot, but the original ideas are still there and this will be a longish story than I've done before.

The first few chapters will be in Tobias' point of view as they follow chapter directly out of the book.

Disclaimer: I don't own these characters, and the book, or the Utopia, and anything else but my plot, and my OCs.

Chapters 28, 29, and 30 of Divergent:

Tobias POV:

"Shut up," She said. She yanked her arm from my grasp and walked out of the room.

Ugh. Why Tobias do you have to be such a jerk to her. You love her and know that she is still sensitive. Yes I know she is also a badass dauntless, but still be kind to her. As much as I need to keep this a secret I know I need to find a way to make this right. I walk outside of the room, Zeke comes up to me.

"She left bro, and if and when Eric finds out she'll be dead."

I turn from Zeke and go to the workout room, breath Tobias breath. Where did she go? If she went to see Caleb- no she went to Erudite. I work off my stupidity by weight lifting, and my regular rutine, until Zeke runs back in.

"She's back and Eric will probably be talking to her in the "meeting room".

I stare at him confused.

"The "trouble room". You have three minutes they just pulled up when I left the control room."

"Thanks see you later."

I run out of the room and down the hall to take the fastest shower possible. I throw on a black tee shirt and black jeans, and run to the meeting room. I open the door and stare at Tris for a second. She is breathing calmly.

"What are you doing?" I ask Eric.

"Leave the room," Eric says. His voice is louder than what I heard in the hallway.

"No, she is just a foolish girl. There is no need to drag her here and interrogate her."

"Just a foolish girl." Eric snorts. "If she were just a foolish girl, she wouldn't be ranked first, now would she?"

I pinched the bridge of my nose and look at Tris through the spaces between my fingers. I try to get her to use my advice. Pretend to be vulnerable Tris, be vulnerable. She looks up embarrassed.

"I . . . I was just embarrassed and didn't know what to do." She put her hands in her pockets and looked at the ground. I catch her pinch her leg, and tears swell up in her eyes. She looks up to Eric, sniffling.

"I tried to . . . and . . ." She shakes her head.

"You tried to what?" Asks Eric.

"Kiss me," I say. "And I rejected her, and she went running off like a five-year-old. There's really nothing to blame her for but stupidity."

I was proud with our improvisation. Eric looked from Tris to me and then laughed, a little too loud and for too long. "Isn't he a little too old for you, Tris?" he says, smiling again.

She wipes her cheek like she is wiping a tear. "Can I leave now?" she asks quietly.

"Fine," Eric says, "but you aren't to leave the compound without supervision again, you hear me?" He turns towards me. "And you . . . had better make sure none of the transfers leave this compound again. And that none of the others try to kiss you."

I roll my eyes. "Fine". I see Tris leave the room. After about three minutes, to make sure Eric was a few hallways down, I walked to find her. She was sitting on the pavement, with her hands around her knees. Once she notices me, she stands up and crosses her arms, like she is waiting for me to scold her. She did slap me and get in to trouble with Eric, but I wouldn't scold her, well not for this anyway.

"What?" She says.

"Are you alright?" I touch her cheek lightly. She bats my hand away.

"Well," she starts, "first I got reamed out in front of everyone, and then I had to chat with the woman who's trying to destroy my old faction, and then Eric almost tossed my friends out of Dauntless, so yeah, it's shaping up to be a great day, Four."

I shake my head and turn to look at the diplomatic building on my right.

"Why do you care anyway?" She asks. "You can be either cruel instructor or concerned boyfriend." I see her tense up at the word "boyfriend".

"You can't play both parts at the same time."

"I am not cruel." I scowl at her. "I was protecting you this morning. How do you think Peter and his idiot friends would have reacted if they discovered that you and I were . . ." I sigh. "You would never win. They would always call your ranking a result of my favoritism rather than your skill."

She opens her mouth, but no words, or come backs, come out.

"You didn't have to insult me to prove something to them," she says finally.

"And you didn't have to run off to your brother just because I hurt you," I say. I rub the back of my neck. "Besides-it worked, didn't it?"

"At my expense."

"I didn't think it would affect you this way. Sometimes I forget that I can hurt you. That you are capable of being hurt."

I see her come to a realization that I did what I did because I like her a lot. Well I think she understood, because the next second she was standing on her tiptoes, and gave me a kiss. Only our lips touched.

"Your brilliant, you know that? You always know what to do."

"Only because I've been thinking about if for a long time," I kiss her quickly, and then I remember. "How I would handle it if you and I . . ." I pull back and smile. "Did I hear you call me your boyfriend, Tris?"

"Not exactly," she shrugs. "Why? Do you want me to?"

I stop for a moment. I pull her to me until our foreheads meet. Do I want to her to call me her boyfriend? "Yes. You think we convinced him you are just silly girl?"

"I hope so, sometimes it helps to be so small. I'm not sure I convinced the Erudite, though."

I take a breath. "There's something I need to tell you."

"What is it?"

"Not now." I glance around. "Meet me back here at eleven thirty. Don't tell anyone where you're going." She nods and I turn away and leave quickly.

I go back to my apartment. I am officially Tris' boyfriend. I'm not home for more than twenty minutes, before Zeke shows up.

"Dude how'd it go, she forgive you?"

"Does calling me her boyfriend mean anything?"

"Yeah, congrats bro. I'm still waiting out for Shauna. We flirt all day, but she doesn't acknowledge me as more than an awesome friend yet."

"I thought you've gone out?"

"Yeah well, she won't kiss me, or anything like that. And the dates aren't even romantic."

"Then make it romantic. I don't know anything about dates except for mine and Tris' but we were both Abnegation."

"You're no help I'll go talk with Uri."

Zeke leaves, allowing me to be alone in my space to think. How do I tell Tris.

I find Tris late at night. Without saying a word I grab her hand and pull her towards the tracks. I dash into a train car and pull her up after me. When she falls against me, it feels right and perfect. I grab Tris and steady her as we stand close.

"What is it you need to tell me?" The wind is thundering around us.

"Not yet."

"I pull her towards the ground and back is to the wall as she straddles me. The moment is perfect, and I grab her face and pull it towards mine, and our mouths meet. The wind is cold, but quite comfortable. We sit there enjoying each other's company. As the train rattles on she starts to shake but steadies herself and places her hand on my hip. She kisses me, but I can tell she is nervous. I don't know why but she is. I'm not her trainer, but Tobias now, the Abnegation boyfriend.

Cold air sweeps in, and I move my hands down from her collar bone.

"Birds, are they crows? I keep forgetting to ask."

"Ravens," she answers. "One for each member of my family. You like them?"

I can't help myself. I don't answer her with words but feeling. I kiss each of the birds.

"I hate to say this," I look to her, "but we have to get up now."

She nods in my direction and we stand up and jump. We are standing in an empty area, and at midnight with all the streets dark, I point to a large cluster of buildings, which happen to be Erudite headquarters, that are lit up.

"Apparently the city ordinances don't mean anything to them, because their lights will be on all night."

"Has no one else noticed?" She looks at me frowning.

"I'm sure they have, but they haven't done anything to stop it. It may be that they don't want to cause a problem over something so small." I start to get tense. This is the hard part. "But it made me wonder what the Erudite are doing that requires night light."

I turn to face Tris. The truth about me continues. "Two things you should know about me. The first is that I am deeply suspicious of people in general, it's my nature to expect the worst of them. And the second is that I am unexpectedly good with computers."

She nods, probably remembering that I worked in the control room most of the time. "A few weeks ago, before the training started, I was at work and I found a way into the Dauntless secure files. Apparently we are not as skilled as the Erudite are with security, and what I discovered was what looked like war plans. Thinly veiled commands, supply lists, maps. Things like that. And those files were sent by Erudite."

"War?" She brushes a piece of hair from her face. "War on Abnegation?"

I grab her hand and lace our fingers. "The faction that controls the government. Yes. All those reports are supposed to stir up dissension against Abnegation. Evidently the Erudite now want to speed up the process. I have no idea what to do about it. . . or what could be done"

"But why would Erudite team up with Dauntless?"

I stare at her blankly. Then she goes wide eyed at me. "They're going to use us."

"I wonder, how they plan to get us to fight."

(A/N: This is a new line which changes the rest of the story, pay attention.!)

"Well, our minds manipulate with the serums with the fears, maybe they have another type of serum?"

"I think you're right Tris. That makes the most sense, we won't be able to know what we are doing, but still functioning enough."

"I know this is bad, but we need to tell Max. Well, does he know what's going on?"

"Eric certainly does, Max probably doesn't know how bad it's going to get, but has some idea."

"Well tell him, if he knows that you know, we can stop it."

"It's late let's go back, and I'll tell him, after I walk you back."

I walk Tris back towards the dorm. Less than one day and we can go public. I can't wait to kiss him carelessly. Tired, I walk towards Max's apartment. Max definitely knew what was going on, but I don't think he will be influencing his own Dauntless to kill a bunch of Abnegations.

"Max," I call through the door. "It's Four."

"Four, what are you doing here it's after 1."

"Look, you probably know this, but if you don't I'll tell you. In short Erudite is planning on forcing the Dauntless into taking a serum, which will make them un-aware of killing the Abnegation."

"Are you serious Four?"

"So, you knew, wait until I tell everyone…"

"No, but I didn't think Jeanine would take it this far. She told me that she was just trying to make a serum that the Divergent can't escape, so everyone has a fair chance. I was not expecting this."

"Max are you sure this isn't just you scamming to keep this position?"

"I am sure, but Four, Jeanine was the one who convinced me to change the Dauntless regulation, I think it's time to go back to the original means of the Dauntless. Now we have Initiation in a few hours and I will make change in the morning."

"If you don't?"

"I will, but Four go to bed."

"Night" I turned and left. I got home and slept for the rest of the early morning.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I wake up around 8, I get up and go to the gym. By 10, I've showered and dressed, and went to set up the initiation room. This was it. Will Tris make it? She's in first she better. When the initiates pile into the room I take the lowest ranking Dauntless born and bring them into the fear landscape room, I then inject them and leave them to their fears. The only good thing right now is Eric isn't there, which means that Max took care of it. I stand by the door to the fear landscape, when Tris walks in. She walks past me quickly and doesn't look at me, which I am fine with. I then hear a: "Hey, Tris!" coming from Uriah's mouth. "You can sit on my lap, if you want."

I wait for her reply. I don't want her sitting on his lap, she is my girlfriend and in a few hours we will go public.

"Tempting, it's fine. I like to stand." That's my girl. Her but belongs on no one else's lap but mine. The lights turn on in the landscape room and Marlene is crouched down and crying. Max, , Lauren, and the three other leaders help her out.

"Transfers, the order in which you go through the final test was taken from your rankings as they now stand," I say. "So Drew will go first, and Tris will go last." That means there are five people before her, I hope I can wait that long. After everyone had gone, I go over to Tris.
Tris." Max stands there with the serum. "Ready?" I ask. She steps into the room. I stand watching her screens. I know where certain fears are. I've seen how she's conquered them, but some are new. When the leaders laugh I stare at them. Why are they laughing at my girlfriend during the hardest moment of her life? Whatever, she must have a stupid fear, like Christina and the moths. Then after a minute their expression changes to wide eyed, and I can tell it's the one where she has to kill her family. Ten seconds later, they take off their cords.

"Seven fears!"

"We haven't seen under ten, since Four."

"Shall we go congratulate her?"

The leaders and I got up and went to the room, Tris sits there shaking.

A/N: The next chapter will also be in Tobias's POV, but it should then go to Tris for a while, and maybe a few other's as well. Throughout the whole story there will be Truth or Dare games, if you could please submit some any rating, and any people, and stage in a relationship, that would be helpful.

-Abby, the TeenStarkid