Yo its TTJOD here with the 1st chapter of the Deathly Super Saiyan. This is the rewrite of the Legend Of The Super Naruto. The reason I actually rewrote it is because I didn't really give myself much wriggle room and gave him entirely too much power in the beginning that any power up I gave him would seem superfluous. So I started over with this one. I even added a way for the Kyuubi to vanish, but for Naruto to gain a power up. By the way I'm thinking of creating a new Super Saiyan state, that would have Shinigami like traits and powers and if you guys and girls have any ideas for a new Super Saiyan State shoot me a PM or leave it in a review. Anyway do enjoy the first chapter of the Deathly Super Saiyan.
TTJOD "Naruto do the disclaimer because we all know I ain't doing this spit again!"
Naruto with a steaming bowl of ramen on his hands smiles and says "Ten Tailed Jackal Of Doom owns nothing except for original jutsu, original characters and original bloodlines."
Chapter 1; Seals and Saiyans!
A blonde haired boy of 10 years of age was sitting in a very rundown apartment room, his face furrowed in a scowl as he stared at what he now knew to be a seal on his stomach. He had first discovered this mark when he was five, and had been bathing in a spring. Since then he had been determined to find out what the thing was and had used every skill known to him to find out what it was. Two days ago he had finally managed to figure out that on his stomach was a seal, and he had found this out thanks to a brown haired girl known as Ten-Ten who had shown him her weapon scroll that she used to seal her kunai and other things away. So now that he knew what it was he just had to figure out what it was for. He had quickly figured out that whatever this seal was holding back was most likely very powerful and possibly alive. The boy had actually used his stealth skills to pilfer a few scrolls and books about sealing. He had been studying said scrolls and books for the past two days and sealing came natural to him. He simply understood and recreated every seal he came across, even the more complex one's in the book, but he just couldn't make heads or tails of the one on his stomach. Groaning he was about to put his shirt back down when suddenly he remembered something one of the fan-girls in his class said. She had said something about meditating to help with her families skills and that everyone had a mindscape even if they didn't believe they did. The boy quickly realized that if this seal was part of him, then maybe he could meditate to figure out what it was. Smiling to himself he sat down to meditate and slowed his breathing.
Before long he found himself in his mindscape and he scowled as this place was a literal dump. His mindscape was a sewer and a dark and smelly one at that. He standing up started to move around looking for any sign of the seal. He blinked when he came across two sets of pipes. The first pair were light blue like how chakra was supposed to be, while the other pair was blood red and he could literally feel the heat and malice in these pipes. He wondering what the second set of pipes were started to follow them and soon found himself in a rather large room. Most of this room was blocked off by golden bars that made up a cage the height of the room. The boy looking at the cage blinked and wondered where it came from, but his eyes suddenly caught sight of the thing he had been searching for. It was the seal. Cheering slightly the boy turned to the cage and tried to peer into it. He couldn't see anything. He moving closer still couldn't make out anything in the cage. He actually touching the golden bars now was now looking directly in the cage. He could now make out a very large shape in the cage. He was wondering what this shape was until two very large eyes opened up. The boy froze in fear spotting the huge slitted blood red eyes. A mouth full of teeth then appeared and a deep demonic voice said "So my jailor finally comes to visit little me."
The boy hearing the word jailor was confused until suddenly light filled the room. The boy stumbled back in fear spotting the Kyuubi-no-Kitsune in all of it's glory. Kyuubi laughing maliciously said "Yes fear me mortal I am the great and powerful Kyuubi."
The boy now backed up to the wall was staring at the fox with wide shock filled eyes. Suddenly everything started to click, why he was glared at, why he was overcharged, why everyone hated him, even why the Hokage was so nice to him. It was because he was jinchuriki to the monster that had attacked the village 11 years ago and had killed so many people. This hurt the boy deeply as he realized that he was nothing but a weapon for the village and all those times he would be chased down by the villagers and stuff had most likely been to beat him into submission. This made the boy do something he hadn't done since he was abandoned by his mother at 3. He cried his big blue eyes out, letting out tears of pure agony. Inside of the cage, Kyuubi who would normally relish in the agony of others, was actually looking at the boy with pity and respect. It really wished there was something it could do to help the kit, but the only card it had was to offer the rest of itself to the Shinigami, and that wouldn't help the kit at all. It moving it's red eyes to the seal glared with hate at it, as this was all that damn Yondaime Hokage's fault. Wait it was also that mysterious masked Uchiha's fault. Yeah it was both of their fault that this kit was suffering so much and if the Kyuubi ever got it's claws on those fuckers, well things wouldn't end well for them.
Suddenly it noticed something about the seal it hadn't before. It standing up and shifting into it's human form, moved to the seal and looked it over. It's eyes widened as this seal was done by a Shinigami, not the Shinigami. This means that it's old friend Shinigami hadn't forsaken their friendship to seal it away. Gaining a smirk that would make even Orochimaru nervous it turned to the boy and said "Oi kit stop the crying. I'm about to make a deal with death."
The boy looking up at it, gained wide eyes spotting a woman with long flowing red hair, pale skin and a body that would make men and women alike drool. Kyuubi ignoring the shock on the boy's face tapped the seal and said "Oi Kira-chan wake the fuck up. I got a proposition for you."
She stepping back smirked knowing that her message had gotten through. Sure enough seconds later a heavy pressure appeared in the mindscape nearly making the boy pass out. When the pressure vanished a woman appeared dressed in a dark purple kimono. This woman was taller than any the boy had ever seen before. She stood at 7 feet tall easily. Her skin was snow white and had no blemishes that the boy could see. Her hair was silver and spiked out everywhere. Both of her eyes were golden and shined with curiosity. From her forehead two thick pair of ivory horns could be seen. Sitting in her mouth was a rather large dagger and around her neck was a necklace of red prayer beads. This woman setting down on the floor of the mindscape looked at Kyuubi and asked "What is this proposition you speak of Akane?"
Akane smiling said "It's nice to see you after so long too Kira. Before I tell you about my offer take a look at the kit's memories and life so far."
Kira turning to look at the wide eyed boy waved her hand and was soon viewing his memories. Akane could only smirk feeling the palpable rage rolling off of Kira like waves. Kira turning to Akane asked "What is this proposition Akane?"
Akane looking with soft eyes at the boy said "Simple really I give you the rest of my life force and you take control over all of my life force instead of the Shinigami who sealed me, and you make the kit's life at least 10 times better."
Kira hearing this offer turned to look at the still in shock boy. She walking over to him squatted to his level and asked "What is your name little one?"
The boy going from shocked to afraid for his life stuttered out "N-N-Nar-Naruto Uzumaki!"
Kira hearing this smiled softly at him and asked "How would like a new mother?"
Naruto hearing this gained wide eyes and asked "Someone wants to adopt me?"
Kira giggling said "You misunderstand me Naruto."
Naruto hearing this looked sad and asked "So no one wants to adopt me?"
Kira stopping her giggling said "Let me explain little one. No you will no be adopted, but instead you will literally become the offspring of your new mother and have only her DNA and blood running through you."
Naruto hearing this gained his excited look back and asked "Who is my new mother going to be?"
Kira smiling softly turned to look at the waiting Akane and said "Your offer has been accepted Akane Yoko. Today you leave this world and I gain control over your life force. Embrace eternity!"
Akane hearing this closed her eyes and let all of her hatred go, as she faded away. Kira taking a deep breath in turned to the confused Naruto. She lifting one of her fingers up touched him where the seal was on the outside and said "I Kira Shinjin, the true Goddess of Death, mother of all Shinigami, only living user of the Shi no 13 senmon bun'ya(13 disciplines of Death), inventor of the soul slayer, and source of the death release herby make you Naruto Uzumaki my son and heir of the Shinjin clan. With the energy gained from Akane Yoko, known to the mortals as Kyuubi, and the favor my sister Kami owes me I herby transform you from a mere mortal to a full blooded Saiyan and A full blooded Shinigami."
Naruto hearing this gained wide eyes and blinked feeling something burst from his backside. He turning his head gained wide eyes spotting a long thick black monkey tail. He turning back could see the bright smile on Kira's face. She kissing him in the middle of the forehead said "Welcome to the family my new little maelstrom. No longer will you live in the ratty apartment you are currently in, no longer will you have to put up with the utter bullshit of this village, no longer will you be weak, no longer will you cry out to no one, no longer will any limitations be thrust onto your shoulders. For you are Shinjin and we are the strong."
Naruto hearing this couldn't help but feel the warmth and comfort flowing from her words and the kiss. He with a burning fire in his eyes said "I promise to never disappoint you Okaa-sama. I promise to be the best there is and to make the Shinjin name feared and respected in the mortal world. I promise to become the strongest Saiyan that ever lived and I promise to be so legendary that when my enemies meet you they'll realized that only legends create legends."
She hearing this giggled and said "I know you will baby and nothing you do will ever disappoint me. I will always be proud of you and will always love you. Now when you wake up get out of the apartment you're in an travel to training ground 43. I have already signed the papers to make you the owner of said training ground along with training ground 42, 41, and 40. 43 will have a palace I had some of your cousins create waiting for you. This palace is as tall as the Hokage tower, but could easily take up half of the red light district. In this palace you will find everything you could ever need, including a very special training room called the Hyperbolic Time Chamber. I have to go talk to your aunt now. Remember baby you are Shinjin!"
She then vanished and Naruto's mindscape quickly changed until it resembled a moonlit valley. In said valley the intimidating statue of a large roaring ape could be seen, it's monkey like tail wrapped tightly around a bolder making it look even more terrifying. Naruto looking at the ape wondered what it was for, but felt himself fading from his mindscape. He clenching his fist said "I an Naruto Shinjin and I am strong." He then vanished from his mindscape.
So how was it, do you approve of this rewrite? Anyway remember to review and/or shoot me a PM and that you should always FOLLOW THE JACKALS!