Ok here is a sample of the story i'm working on, it is focused on a pair of original characters in the Naruto universe, with the time frame starting just after Itachi went on his big killing spree. so please review and tell me what you think. (yes i know that my spelling is awful -no point having a proof reader just yet). -disclaimer, you know how it goes most of this stuff doesn't't belong to me i just use it- enjoy'
the beginning:
"you are no longer my son! shinobi are to control their emotions for a reason. to prevent losing it like you did, now what do you have to say?! you could have stopped him, could have protected..." the anger in his seemed to become contained somewhat " you are no longer to be recognized as the first son of Haishi hyuga, what you do is of no consequence to me, maybe you can find a way to redeem yourself through sacrifice." and with that he turned his back waiting for the young man to leave.
Ting's return:
"Haishi- sama... he's back" the anbu plainly informed the head of the Hyuga house.
"hmm? who is back?" he responded half heartedly, continuing to tend his bonsai tree.
"T ijiri-san sir. He is meeting with the kage as we speak." the water bottle the elder was holding fell to the floor, but he did not turn to face the masked messenger; merely instead waved him off in dismissal. Thinking out loud "how long has it been, Yosh?" he whispered to the cold air around him.
-elsewhere in Konoha-
"Hokage sama with brief you now" Sizune held the door open and extended her hand toward the large desk where an uncomfortable Tsunade sat surrounded by paper work. She eyed the tall man as he pushed himself off the wall where he had been leaning. 'so, this is the infamous Tijiri? not what i had expected from reading his anbu records, can still tell that he is a Hyuga though, even if he is wearing dark shades'
"Congratulations are in order i believe, welcome back. Its been a while .." the kage was cut off.
"eight years, five months, two weeks three days and fourteen hours, but who's counting eh Tsunade?" the oddly dressed man smirked as he spoke. "it feels good to be home but I'm not sure that i should expect a very warm welcome." he stood there looking around the office, last time he was here the third had asked him, not ordered but asked him to go on what was thought to be a suicide mission to relay information back to the village from the west. then he had no reason not to take it, there was nothing left here in konoha to tie him down.
flashback
"...what our sources have given us the our enemies are now looking to outsiders for ways to defeat us. i will only ask that if any of you feel that you do not want to accept this mission i can not force you. you are all like my family, children and siblings, i can not choose any of you to go, there is not enough known about what you will be facing to even give a percentage survival rate. all i can say is that there will be a Mist ninja also assigned..." the third spoke with a heavy heart.
"I'll do it! let me go, that...bastard has taken everything else so why not"
"then it is settled, you will depart as soon as you are ready and head to mist, there will be a ship waiting for you along with your new counterpart."
end flashback
so what did you think, i know not a lot there but its a sample. please review.