Hey guys this is my first fanfiction so please give me any pointers you have for me, and please tell me if you see any mistakes in my writing.
Chapter One:
A Friends Intuition
"Get back here street rats!" one of the local merchants bellowed as he ran after three figures shrouded in brown robes with hoods that enveloped their faces with shadows so much that their faces were no more than shadows themselves.
"Come, this way!" the second tallest of the three, having taken the lead, whispered hoarsely and dove for an ally teeming with life and filled with numerous markets. The irate merchants, who knew he had loss the thieves, stopped short of the entrance of the ally screeching curses that should not be repeated around small children. The shadowed thieves where about a mile and a quarter before they started to slow their pace. They came to a stop at an old warehouse in the outskits of town. They went around to the back where a rusted door was. There they entered what was their 'home.' Once inside they removed the robes. The tallest teen was a boy with blue tinted black hair that was in a duck-butt style with pale skin and dark eyes. The second tallest was a girl with pink cropped hair, pale skin, and olive green eyes. The smallest of the three was a boy with waist-length blond hair and deep blue eyes. Unlike the other two, his skin was a deep tan, and he had three scars on either side of his face. No one knew how he had got them.
The first to speak was the girl, "That was almost to close."
The two boys nodded and the black haired one walked to a pile of miss matched pillows and sat down. He motioned for the other two to do the same. The girl compiled and sat next to him, but the other teen only came a little closer.
The black haired teen sighed and looked over at the youngest one of their team, "You still don't trust us, Naruto?"
Naruto looked up at him meekly, "Sorry Sasuke, Sakura. It's just hard to kill old habits."
Sakura smiled at the cute 'kicked puppy dog' look Naruto was giving them.
Sasuke just shook his head, "I'm not mad at you, Naruto, but if you can't trust us then we can't be a team."
Naruto shook his head,"It's not that I don't trust you guys; it's-" He stopped and looked around; he ran and jumped into the pillows, hiding himself.
"Naruto? What is it?" Sakura asked while looking around tring to find what scared the young teen into hiding. The floor, no the whole building began to shake as though trying to rid itself of the vagrants that dare besmirch it with their filth.
"What is that?" Sasuke yelled while Naruto dove out from under the pillows and ran to the door. The others soon followed him into the nearest ally where they looked back at the place they had called home as it fell into ruin. The Black Nights- demons that worked for the king- were looking through the rubble for something or better yet someones. Sasuke and Sakura gazed at Naruto wanting him to explain.
Naruto saw their looks and sighed,"I can sometimes feel whats about to happen." He waited for the yelling and hateful looks, but they never came. Instead they both were looking at him in wonder. Naruto hopefully ask,"You guys aren't mad at me?"
"Why would we be mad at you for your amazing gift?" Sasuke asked while Sakura nodded in agreement. Naruto smiled and started to laugh as the three teens made their way to another hide-out unaware of the eyes (or eye as the case may be) watching them escape into the night.